Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct small grammar issues. Start with a clear topic sentence, combine short fragmented sentences, and avoid repetition. Use linking words (for example, so, therefore, also) to make it coherent and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I walk a lot because there is no direct transport from my home to my workplace, so I walk from my house to the nearest (cheaper) station and from the station to the office. I also try to fit extra steps during the workday, so I usually reach about 10,000 steps daily.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer first and then a single clear supporting detail. Avoid hesitations and repetition; use past simple consistently for past habits and a linking word like "however" or "often" to connect ideas.

Example: Not often in formal trips, but I often walked locally as a child because we lived in a close-knit community, so I frequently went on foot to my cousins' and friends' houses.

Suggestion: Provide a concise reason and a specific example. Reduce repetition of "I think" and correct phrasing (e.g., "adapted to an active lifestyle"). Use one linking phrase like "because" or "so" to explain cause and effect.

Example: People like walking in parks because parks offer cleaner air and a peaceful environment, so they can escape the busy, polluted city and relax or exercise outdoors.

Suggestion: Clarify the location and correct unclear phrases ("who's in this" unclear). Start with a direct statement of the place, then give one specific example of why. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and avoid tense errors.

Example: I would like to take a long walk in historic city districts because walking helps me understand local life and feel connected to the place. For example, when I walked with friends in Cebu to UP Cebu, exploring on foot turned out to be the best decision because we discovered interesting streets and local shops.

Suggestion: Remove fillers like "umm" and start with a clear topic sentence. Be specific about the place (name it) and give one supporting detail about why you go there. Use a linking word such as "besides" or "also" to connect ideas.

Example: Lately I usually walk at the local circle park near my home as part of my commute and exercise routine. It's relaxing to see others jogging and walking there, which motivates me to keep an active lifestyle.

× Yes, I do walk a lot because there is no direct transportation from my home to my workplace.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot because there is no direct transportation from my home to my workplace.

The auxiliary 'do' is unnecessary for affirmative present simple statements. Use the simple present 'I walk' to sound natural. Suggestion: use 'I walk a lot' for routine actions.

× For instance, I do work from my home to the cheapest station and from the train station to my workplace.

✓ For instance, I walk from my home to the nearest station and from the train station to my workplace.

'Do work' is incorrect in this context; the intended meaning is habitual walking. Use the verb 'walk' in simple present. Also 'cheapest station' is semantically odd; 'nearest station' likely intended.

× During the day.

✓ I walk during the day.

'During the day' is a sentence fragment without a verb. Combine it with the main clause to form a complete sentence: 'I walk during the day.'

× At the workplace, I also squeeze in some steps and make sure that I do accomplish 10,000 steps a day.

✓ At the workplace, I also squeeze in some steps and make sure that I accomplish 10,000 steps a day.

The auxiliary 'do' before 'accomplish' is unnecessary in affirmative sentences. Use simple present 'I accomplish' for habitual actions.

× I do not remember specifically a trip where we actually walked, but since we live in a very close household or close community, I tend to walk from my home to my cousin's home or to my friend's houses.

✓ I do not remember a specific trip where we actually walked, but since we lived in a very close household or close community, I tended to walk from my home to my cousin's house or to my friends' houses.

Mixing present and past creates tense inconsistency. The question asked about childhood, so use past tense: 'remember' can stay but better 'did not remember' or 'I do not remember a specific trip' and then past 'we lived' and 'I tended to walk'. Also 'specific' is the correct adjective form; possessive placement 'friends' houses' corrected.

× So I I think that was a memory of walking when I was a kid.

✓ So I think that was a memory of walking when I was a kid.

Typo 'I I' duplicates pronoun; remove extra 'I' to correct sentence structure.

× I think people nowadays have adopted to this active lifestyle that they do walking, running, jogging, hiking and everything that involves the outdoors.

✓ I think people nowadays have adopted this active lifestyle of walking, running, jogging, hiking and other outdoor activities.

'Adopted to' is incorrect; 'adopted' without 'to' or 'adapted to' are correct choices. 'they do walking' is ungrammatical; use the noun form 'walking' or a gerund phrase 'of walking'. Also 'everything that involves the outdoors' is wordy; 'other outdoor activities' is clearer.

× And I think that they are so overwhelmed with the cityscape, the pollution, the vehicles, amount of buildings that they see that they wanted to take a break and. Active lifestyle, particularly walking on parks.

✓ I think they are so overwhelmed by the cityscape, pollution, traffic and the number of buildings they see that they want to take a break and adopt a more active lifestyle, particularly walking in parks.

Multiple issues: preposition 'overwhelmed by' is correct, 'vehicles' better 'traffic', 'amount of buildings' should be 'number of buildings'. Tense should be present 'they want' for general truth, not 'wanted'. 'walking on parks' should be 'walking in parks'. Also sentence fragment 'and. Active lifestyle' merged into one coherent clause.

× I do like taking walks on who's in this because that gives me a sense of belongingness and and understanding of the places where I traveled.

✓ I like taking walks in these places because that gives me a sense of belonging and an understanding of the places I have traveled to.

'who's in this' is unclear and incorrect pronoun usage; replace with 'these places'. 'belongingness' is awkward; use 'a sense of belonging'. Use 'an understanding' and present perfect 'have traveled to' to relate past travel to present feelings.

× For instance, when we went to Cebu, a province in the Philippines, I encourage my friends to walk on our way to UP Cebu where we originally intended.

✓ For instance, when we went to Cebu, a province in the Philippines, I encouraged my friends to walk with me on our way to UP Cebu, which is where we had originally intended to go.

Tense inconsistency: 'went' is past so 'encourage' should be past 'encouraged'. 'walk on our way' is awkward; 'walk with me on our way' is clearer. 'where we originally intended' is incomplete; use 'which is where we had originally intended to go.'

× They took that was actually one of the best decisions that we did during that trip.

✓ That turned out to be one of the best decisions we made during that trip.

Original sentence is ungrammatical. Use past 'turned out' and 'we made' for decisions in the past. Avoid 'they took that' which is confusing.

× So aside from it being umm, part of my normal routine going back and forth from home to office, I usually take a walk at the circle where I also do my jogs.

✓ So aside from it being part of my normal routine of going back and forth from home to the office, I usually walk at the circle where I also do my jogging.

'do my jogs' is awkward; use the gerund 'jogging'. Add 'the' before 'office'. 'take a walk at the circle' simplified to 'walk at the circle' to match habitual action.

× It is kind of relaxing to see people also umm, walking, running.

✓ It is relaxing to see other people walking and running.

Redundant 'also umm' removed; 'other people' is clearer than 'people also'. Use parallel gerunds 'walking and running'.

× And just having an active lifestyle for themselves.

✓ And it's nice to see them having an active lifestyle.

Original is a fragment. Convert to a full sentence with subject and verb: 'it's nice to see them having an active lifestyle.'