Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct tense usage; start with a direct topic sentence, then briefly give reason and habit. Avoid redundancy and fix minor grammar (e.g., 'I haven't been able to walk much lately' and 'on weekends I walk for at least 30 minutes').

Example: I haven't been able to walk much lately because of a heavy workload on weekdays. However, I make sure to walk for at least 30 minutes on weekends to refresh and recharge.

Suggestion: Open with a clear affirmative sentence, reduce fillers (umm), correct tense consistency and be more specific about activities or feelings to enrich the answer.

Example: Yes, I often went for walks with my grandmother when I was a child. We usually strolled through parks, watched other children play, and I enjoyed those calm, happy afternoons with her.

Suggestion: Give a clearer, structured response: start with a topic sentence, then provide two or three specific reasons using linking words. Remove hesitations and vague phrasing like 'beautiful people' which is unclear.

Example: People like to walk in parks mainly to relax and enjoy nature. For example, they can watch children play and use the playground, appreciate the scenery and fresh air, and have a peaceful break from city noise.

Suggestion: Use a direct conditional and avoid repetition. Make one clear reason and add a specific detail about what you'd do to make the answer vivid.

Example: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along the beach because the endless view and gentle waves are very calming. I would walk barefoot along the shore and watch the sunset to relax and recharge.

Suggestion: Start with a direct answer, fix tense and phrasing, and keep it concise. Mention specifics (treadmill, time, routine) but avoid repeating 'recharge and refresh' twice.

Example: I haven't walked outdoors recently, but I have been using a treadmill at home for about 30 minutes each day to unwind after a tiring day.

× Lately I was not able to walk a lot due to a heavy workload, most especially on weekdays, but I make sure on weekends I was able to walk at least 30 minutes a day to be able to refresh and recharge for.

✓ Lately I have not been able to walk a lot due to a heavy workload, especially on weekdays, but I make sure that on weekends I can walk at least 30 minutes a day to refresh and recharge.

The sentence mixes past simple and present intentions; 'Lately' requires present perfect (have not been able) to indicate a recent period continuing to now. Also 'I was able to' should be 'I can' or 'I am able to' for habitual weekend action. Improve by using present perfect for recent past and present simple/can for habitual activities. Suggested revision pattern: 'Lately I have not been able to... , but I make sure that on weekends I can/ I am able to...'. Use commas and remove redundant phrases.

× Yes, when I was a child I used to walk a lot with my grandmother.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I used to walk a lot with my grandmother.

No grammatical correction needed; sentence correctly uses past habitual 'used to'. Included here only if identification required; otherwise it is correct.

× She's umm, we walk through a lot in the parks and we watch a lot of children playing and so I enjoyed walking a lot with her.

✓ She and I used to walk a lot in the parks and watch many children playing, so I enjoyed walking with her.

Original mixes pronouns and tenses and has incorrect subject structure 'She's umm, we walk through a lot'. Correct form is 'She and I' or 'My grandmother and I' with past habitual 'used to' or past simple 'used to/walked'. Also 'a lot of children' is acceptable but 'many children' is clearer. Fix run-on by splitting clauses and keeping consistent past tense.

× She's umm, we walk through a lot in the parks and we watch a lot of children playing and so I enjoyed walking a lot with her.

✓ She and I used to walk a lot in the parks and watch many children playing, so I enjoyed walking with her.

Phrase 'walk through a lot in the parks' is incorrect; use 'walk a lot in the parks'. 'Through' is unnecessary and changes meaning. Use correct preposition 'in' for location. Also streamline redundant words.

× I think people like to walk in parks because they like to watch beautiful people like playing children, enjoying the, the slides, uh, the beautiful scenery and people just love to relax and unwind.

✓ I think people like to walk in parks because they can watch children playing, enjoy the slides, appreciate the beautiful scenery, and relax and unwind.

Sentence has redundancy and awkward adjective use 'beautiful people like playing children'. Remove 'people' and place adjectives correctly: 'children playing' and 'beautiful scenery'. Also parallel structure: use verbs in the same form (watch, enjoy, appreciate, relax). Remove filler words 'uh' and repeated 'the'.

× If I would be given a chance for a long walk, I would like to go to the beach because the view is endless, it's serene, it's quiet.

✓ If I were given the chance to take a long walk, I would like to go to the beach because the view is endless, serene, and quiet.

In conditional sentences contrary-to-fact, use 'If I were given' rather than 'If I would be given'. Also 'given a chance for a long walk' is better as 'given the chance to take a long walk'. Maintain parallel adjectives by separating with commas and using 'and' before the last item.

× It would give me peace after a long weekend to recharge and to refresh.

✓ It would give me peace and help me recharge and refresh after a long week.

Context implies recovery after work; 'after a long weekend' conflicts with earlier mention of recharging after work—likely 'after a long week'. Also 'to recharge and to refresh' is repetitive; use 'help me recharge and refresh'. Maintain conditional 'would' consistent with preceding clause.

× Lately I was not able to walk outdoors, but I tried my best to walk at home using a treadmill for at least 30 minutes a day for me to be able to recharge and refresh after a long tiring day.

✓ Lately I have not been able to walk outdoors, but I have tried my best to walk at home on a treadmill for at least 30 minutes a day to recharge and refresh after a long, tiring day.

Use present perfect 'have not been able' and 'have tried' for recent actions continuing to the present. Use 'on a treadmill' rather than 'using a treadmill'. Remove unnecessary phrase 'for me to be able to' and tighten to 'to recharge and refresh'. Add comma in 'long, tiring day'.