Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp cùng dùng từ sai (ví dụ “work” thay vì “walk”, cụm từ lặp và thừa). Nên mở đầu trực tiếp trả lời, tránh lặp từ, sử dụng cấu trúc câu ngắn gọn, và thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể (thời lượng, lợi ích).

Example: Yes, I walk almost every morning for about 30 minutes to keep fit. For example, I stroll around my neighborhood park before breakfast because it helps me feel energetic for the day.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời khá tốt về nội dung nhưng có lỗi nhỏ về trật tự từ và thì (ví dụ “I, my parents and I” lặp; “spend” nên ở quá khứ). Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, dùng thì quá khứ nhất quán và thêm một chi tiết cụ thể để sinh động hơn.

Example: Yes, we often went for walks around our neighborhood and the nearby park in the mornings. We usually spent about 20 minutes enjoying the fresh air, and sometimes we would stop to feed the ducks at the pond.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi từ vựng và chính tả (ví dụ “work” vs “walk”, “parsley” không đúng, “fresher” dùng sai). Cần chọn từ phù hợp, dùng liên từ để liên kết ý và cung cấp lý do cụ thể, ví dụ về lợi ích sức khỏe và môi trường. Tránh lỗi chính tả và cấu trúc câu không hoàn chỉnh.

Example: People like walking in parks because the green surroundings and fresh air make exercise more pleasant. In addition, seeing others being active can be motivating, which helps people keep a regular routine.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời nêu đích đến rõ ràng nhưng có lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp (ví dụ “freshly breeze”, “their hustle and bustle”, “work” thay vì “walk”). Cần viết câu gọn hơn, sửa lỗi collocation, dùng liên từ hợp lý và nêu thêm chi tiết cụ thể về hoạt động khi đi bộ.

Example: I would love to walk along the Coastal Road in Da Nang because the sea breeze and sunset views are wonderful. A long morning walk there would help me relax and recharge away from the city's noise.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời có ý tốt nhưng nhiều lỗi đại từ sở hữu và thì (ví dụ “their new park”, “the both”, “worked” thay vì “walked”). Cần dùng đại từ chính xác, thì quá khứ khi kể sự kiện gần đây hoặc hiện tại đơn cho thói quen, và cung cấp một ví dụ cụ thể, rõ ràng về lần đi bộ gần đây.

Example: Lately I have been walking in the new park near my house because it is within walking distance. For example, I walked there last summer evening and enjoyed a quiet stroll after work.

× I always try to work a lot, a lot of work for a long in the early morning because I believe that it is a good way for me to keep in shape and stay healthy.

✓ I always try to work a lot in the early morning because I believe that it is a good way for me to keep in shape and stay healthy.

The phrase 'work a lot, a lot of work for a long in the early morning' is ungrammatical and contains incorrect word order and redundant fragments. Use 'work a lot in the early morning' to express duration and time. Suggestion: Simplify the sentence and place the time expression 'in the early morning' after the verb phrase. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× When I was a child, I, my parents and I often went for walks around our neighborhood and the nearby parks in early morning.

✓ When I was a child, my parents and I often went for walks around our neighborhood and the nearby parks in the early morning.

The original repeats the subject ('I, my parents and I') and omits the article before 'early morning.' Remove the extra 'I' and add 'the' before 'early morning' for correct collocation. Use past simple 'went' correctly. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× I usually spend about 20 minutes walking because we like to enjoy the fresh air and get some exercise.

✓ I usually spend about 20 minutes walking because I like to enjoy the fresh air and get some exercise.

Subject inconsistency: the sentence starts with 'I' but then uses 'we like.' Maintain subject 'I' throughout or change the start to 'We.' Here use 'I like' to match the subject. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× I think many people work in parks because seeing others exercising creates a motivating social atmosphere so it easier to keep going.

✓ I think many people exercise in parks because seeing others exercising creates a motivating social atmosphere so it is easier to keep going.

The verb 'work' is the wrong lexical choice; 'exercise' fits the context. Also 'so it easier' is missing the verb 'is.' Insert 'is' to form the correct clause 'so it is easier.' Grammar problem type ID: 8

× Also parsley people enjoy green space and fresher which helps reduce stress and improve mood.

✓ Also, many people enjoy green spaces and fresher air, which helps reduce stress and improve mood.

'Parsley' is a wrong word (looks like 'partly' or 'people'); replace with 'many.' 'Green space' should be plural 'green spaces' to match general meaning or keep singular with article. 'Fresher' is an adjective requiring a noun; use 'fresher air.' Add a comma before 'which' to introduce the non-defining relative clause. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× I would choose the Coastal Rd. in Danang. The freshly breeze and breathtaking views and awe inspiring sunsets would help me escape their hustle and bustle of the city.

✓ I would choose the Coastal Rd. in Danang. The fresh breeze, breathtaking views, and awe-inspiring sunsets would help me escape the hustle and bustle of the city.

Use 'fresh' instead of 'freshly' because 'fresh' is an adjective modifying 'breeze.' Add commas to separate items in a list. 'Awe inspiring' should be hyphenated 'awe-inspiring.' Use 'the hustle and bustle' not 'their' when referring to the city's noise; 'the city' is definite so use 'the.' Grammar problem type ID: 22

× I'm really stressed and as well as motivate me to take a long work especially in the morning.

✓ I'm really stressed, and taking a long walk, especially in the morning, would help motivate me.

Original mixes ideas and uses incorrect phrase 'take a long work' (should be 'take a long walk'). 'As well as' is misused; use a clear structure: subject + would help + verb. Reorder to 'taking a long walk... would help motivate me.' Grammar problem type ID: 16

× I usually go for a walk in their new park or the park near my house because the both are within walking distance.

✓ I usually go for a walk in the new park or the park near my house because both are within walking distance.

'Their new park' wrongly uses 'their' when referring to parks near speaker; use 'the new park' or 'a new park.' 'The both' is incorrect; use 'both' without 'the.' Grammar problem type ID: 12

× For example, I worked there last summer umm evening.

✓ For example, I walked there one evening last summer.

Verb 'worked' is wrong for the activity of walking; use 'walked.' Also reorder time expressions to 'one evening last summer' for natural English. Remove filler 'umm.' Grammar problem type ID: 5