Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammar, clarity and conciseness. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct verb forms and word choice (e.g., "I walk every morning"). Provide one or two specific supporting details and use linking words (e.g., "because" or "so") to make it coherent.

Example: I walk every morning. I do this because getting fresh air and light helps my physical health and improves my mood, so I usually feel more energetic for the day.

Suggestion: Give a clear direct answer and fix sentence structure. Use past tense correctly and avoid repetition. Mention one specific detail (e.g., distance or duration) and a linking word to explain.

Example: Yes, I often walked when I was a child. My elementary school was close to my home, so I walked there every day and it usually took about ten minutes each way.

Suggestion: Provide a concise, organized answer with clear reasons using linking words (first, second, finally). Use appropriate vocabulary ("benefits" instead of "utility"). Give specific examples of benefits.

Example: People like walking in parks because there are several benefits. First, walking improves physical fitness; second, green spaces reduce stress and improve mental well-being; finally, parks are peaceful and pleasant places to exercise.

Suggestion: Answer directly naming a location and give clear reasons. Use correct vocabulary and avoid unclear phrases. State one or two specific details (type of place, activities) and link them with reasons.

Example: If I had the chance, I'd like to take a long walk along a coastal promenade or in a scenic countryside. I prefer these places because the fresh sea breeze and open views make long walks more enjoyable, and I often aim to reach 10,000 steps when I walk.

Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for a recent event and correct phrases. Give one clear fact (distance/steps) and briefly explain why it was enjoyable or beneficial using a linking word.

Example: Yesterday morning I strolled near my dormitory for exercise. I walked about eight kilometres, which was nearly 12,000 steps, and it made me feel healthier and more awake for the day.

× Yes I do, I will walk out every morning.

✓ Yes, I do. I walk out every morning.

The student used 'will' incorrectly for a habitual action. Use simple present for regular habits (I walk) instead of 'will' which indicates future intent.

× I think outdoor work everyday might make my physics be healthier and also my mental health healthier.

✓ I think outdoor exercise every day might make my physical health and my mental health better.

Incorrect words: 'work' should be 'exercise' or 'walking' for outdoor activity; 'physics' is wrong form, use 'physical health'; 'everyday' (adjective) should be 'every day' (adverbial phrase) in this context; 'healthier' repeated awkwardly — use 'better'. Use parallel structure for 'physical health and mental health'.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside for a walk when you were a child?

The original is mostly correct but 'to have a walk' is unnatural; use 'for a walk'. The past tense question 'Did you... when you were a child?' is appropriate.

× In my elementary school because my elementary school nears with my home, so every day I went to school.

✓ When I was in elementary school, because my elementary school was near my home, I walked to school every day.

Problems: missing clause order and connectors. Use 'When I was in elementary school' and 'was near' (not 'nears with'); 'near' takes no preposition. Combine clauses without redundant 'so'. Use 'walked to school' for clarity.

× With my feet and I walk every day exactly we can.

✓ I walked to school on foot every day.

The sentence is ungrammatical and redundant. 'With my feet' is unnecessary; 'I walk every day exactly we can' is incoherent. Use clear structure: subject + past verb + adverbial phrase: 'I walked to school on foot every day.'

× I think because working has many utility or something that make someone first healthier, second make the mental well-being establish and the third is very effective because when you go to the.

✓ I think walking has many benefits: first, it makes someone physically healthier; second, it improves mental well-being; and third, it is very effective for relaxation and exercise.

Original uses incorrect nouns ('utility'), wrong verb forms and incomplete clause at the end. Replace 'working' with 'walking', 'utility' with 'benefits', use parallel structure for the list, and complete the third idea.

× I hope that I can work in a course place specifically when I would like to the cafe that is very var.

✓ I hope I can go to a quiet course place, specifically a cafe that is very calm.

Original is ungrammatical: 'work in a course place' and 'would like to the cafe that is very var' are incorrect. Use 'go to' and 'a quiet cafe' or 'calm' for intended meaning. Keep sentence concise.

× I think that world can be one of the thing that I can prefer to do because I like walking around such as more than 10,000 steps.

✓ I think that would be one of the places I prefer because I like walking around and doing more than 10,000 steps.

Problems: 'world' incorrect, should be 'that would'; 'one of the thing' should be 'one of the places'; 'prefer to do' -> 'prefer'; clarify 'such as more than 10,000 steps' to 'doing more than 10,000 steps'.

× I think that the.

✓ I think that would be great.

Original is an incomplete sentence. Add a complete clause to express the idea. Provide a suitable ending like 'that would be great.'

× I hope that I can work in a course place specifically when I would like to the cafe that is very var. I think that world can be one of the thing that I can prefer to do because I like walking around such as more than 10,000 steps. I think that the.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk in a quiet cafe area or nearby park where I can walk more than 10,000 steps.

Combine and correct multiple fragments into a conditional future sentence. Use 'If I had the chance, I would like...' for hypothetical preference. Fix noun choices and sentence completeness.

× Last morning I strolled around near my dormitory to just ought to do brakes walking.

✓ This morning I strolled around near my dormitory just to take a break and walk.

Use 'this morning' instead of 'last morning' for recent morning. The phrase 'ought to do brakes walking' is incorrect. Use 'just to take a break and walk.' Maintain simple past 'strolled'.

× I walk around 8 kilometer and it's almost 12,000 steps.

✓ I walked around 8 kilometers and it was almost 12,000 steps.

Use plural 'kilometers' for plural distance; match past tense 'walked' with earlier past context; 'it's' should be 'it was' to keep tense consistent.

× I really like walking because it makes it healthier.

✓ I really like walking because it makes me healthier.

'it makes it healthier' is incorrect pronoun usage. The activity 'walking' makes the person healthier, so use 'me' as the object. Also ensure clarity: 'walking makes me healthier.'