Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Mejora la fluidez y la corrección gramatical eliminando repeticiones y usando conectores claros. Empieza con una oración directa que responda a la pregunta, luego añade un detalle específico sobre la rutina y finaliza con una oración contrastiva. Corrige errores como 'work' por 'walk', y evita frases repetidas como 'just then' o 'I will work several times'.

Example: I walk quite a lot on school days because I walk from my classroom to my dorm and then to the canteen several times. However, on weekends I usually stay in my dorm to study, so I don't walk much then.

Suggestion: Organiza la respuesta en oraciones claras y corrige tiempos verbales inconsistentes. Use conectores temporales como 'when' y 'now' para contrastar pasado y presente, y proporcione ejemplos concretos (lugares o actividades). Evite muletillas y repeticiones. Ajuste de tiempos: use pasado para experiencias de la infancia.

Example: Yes, I did. When I was a child I had plenty of free time, so my parents often took me on picnics and hiking trips on weekends. We enjoyed the fresh air and family time, but now I am busier and go out less often.

Suggestion: Corrige palabras inapropiadas ('working' → 'walking') y simplifica las oraciones largas usando conectores como 'because' y 'so'. Sea más preciso con el vocabulario (por ejemplo, 'surrounded by trees' y 'fresh air'). Mantenga la respuesta en máximo cinco oraciones y añada una razón concreta y breve.

Example: People like walking in parks because it helps them relax and reduce stress. Parks are often surrounded by trees and lakes, which provide fresh air and a peaceful atmosphere, so visitors can feel more energetic and calm.

Suggestion: Evite frases redundantes y mejora la precisión: 'the Himalayas' sin 'a'. Use condicional y coherencia: explique motivación y preparación brevemente. Evite expresiones poco naturales como 'demonstrate I'm a brave human being' y use alternativas naturales ('challenge myself' o 'test my limits').

Example: If I had the chance, I'd like to hike in the Himalayas because it would be a great mental and physical challenge. I would train beforehand to build my stamina and prove to myself that I can overcome a difficult adventure.

Suggestion: Haz la narración más concisa y corrige vocabulario: 'downtown' y 'near my home' redundantes; use 'go for a walk' and no 'work'. Mantén el relato en orden temporal y elimina muletillas. Añade un detalle específico (por ejemplo, what you saw or talked about) para enriquecer la respuesta.

Example: Recently I went for a walk in a park near my home. Last Saturday my mum and I finished dinner and decided to stroll around the lake; it was relaxing and enjoyable because we rarely have time to spend together.

× It depends on different situations.

✓ It depends on the situation.

The phrase 'different situations' is not wrong but sounds unnatural here. Use singular 'the situation' to match common English usage. Suggestion: say 'It depends on the situation.' to be more idiomatic.

× During the school days I really work a lot because I need to reverse from classroom to my dorm.

✓ During school days I walk a lot because I need to go from the classroom to my dormitory.

The student used 'work' and 'reverse' incorrectly. The context requires present simple for habitual action (walk). 'Reverse' is wrong verb; use 'go' or 'walk'. 'Dorm' should be 'dormitory' or 'dorm' is acceptable informally. Suggestion: use 'I walk' and 'go from the classroom to my dormitory.'

× Then I just then I need to go to the canteen from my dorm.

✓ Then I need to go to the canteen from my dorm.

There is a repeated 'then' causing redundancy. Remove the duplicate word. Maintain present simple for habitual actions.

× So uh, I will work several times like that, but on weekends I just stay in my homework dorm, so I don't work a lot.

✓ So I walk several times like that, but on weekends I just stay in my dorm to do homework, so I don't walk a lot.

The verb 'work' is used incorrectly; the context is walking. 'Homework dorm' is ungrammatical; change to 'stay in my dorm to do homework.' Use present simple for habits. Suggestion: replace 'work' with 'walk' and clarify purpose.

× Yes, of course, when I had, when I was a child, I have plenty of free time.

✓ Yes, of course. When I was a child, I had plenty of free time.

Tense mismatch: refer to past using past tense 'had' not present 'have.' Also remove hesitation and redundant phrasing. Suggestion: use 'When I was a child, I had plenty of free time.'

× So whenever it's weekends, my parents will Take Me Out for a picnic or hiking trip.

✓ So whenever it was the weekend, my parents took me out for a picnic or a hiking trip.

Talking about childhood requires past tense. 'Whenever it's weekends' is incorrect; use 'whenever it was the weekend' or 'on weekends.' 'Will take me out' should be past 'took me out.' Capitalization error 'Take Me Out' fixed. Suggestion: use consistent past tense.

× So, umm, at the time, we enjoy the time we spend together and we, uh, breath so much fresh air.

✓ At that time, we enjoyed the time we spent together and we breathed a lot of fresh air.

Past context requires past tense verbs 'enjoyed' and 'breathed.' 'Breath' is a noun; verb form is 'breathe' (past 'breathed'). Suggestion: use past tense and correct verb forms.

× But as I've grown up, become busier, I didn't, I don't have a lot of chance to go out.

✓ But as I grew up and became busier, I didn't have many chances to go out.

Tense inconsistency: use past 'grew up' and 'became' to match 'didn't have.' Use plural 'chances' not 'chance' and avoid mixing present and past. Suggestion: keep all verbs in past when referring to change over time.

× From my perspective, working in parks can help people to refresh their mind and release their stress because parks are always covered by trees or around by a lake, lake where it's always full of oxygen, that can help people to become energetic again.

✓ From my perspective, walking in parks can help people refresh their minds and relieve their stress because parks are often filled with trees or are near a lake, where the air is fresh and oxygen-rich, which helps people feel energetic again.

Multiple errors: 'working in parks' should be 'walking in parks.' 'Refresh their mind' needs plural 'minds.' 'Release their stress' should be 'relieve their stress.' Prepositions 'covered by trees' is awkward; use 'filled with trees' or 'surrounded by trees.' 'Around by a lake' incorrect; use 'near a lake.' Sentence was long and needs restructuring. Suggestion: simplify and correct collocations.

× If I got a chance, I'd like to climb the mountains like a Himalayas because it's really challenging for both mentally and physically.

✓ If I got a chance, I'd like to climb the Himalayas because it's really challenging both mentally and physically.

Article error: 'the mountains like a Himalayas' is incorrect. Use 'the Himalayas' (proper noun) without 'a.' Also 'for both mentally and physically' should be 'both mentally and physically.' Suggestion: use correct article with mountain range names and correct adverb placement.

× If I really got a chance, I think I will get enough exercise and practice for it, then just climb the Himalayas to demonstrate I'm a brave human being.

✓ If I really got a chance, I think I would get enough exercise and practice for it, and then climb the Himalayas to show that I'm brave.

Conditional sentence: use 'would' in the main clause when the if-clause is past ('If I got a chance'). 'I will' is inconsistent. 'Demonstrate I'm a brave human being' is wordy; use 'show that I'm brave.' Suggestion: use second conditional structure and more natural phrasing.

× Recently I went to a park in downtown near my home because it's really nearby.

✓ Recently I went to a park downtown near my home because it is very close.

'In downtown' is incorrect preposition; use 'downtown.' 'It's really nearby' is awkward; use 'it is very close.' Tense 'recently I went' is correct. Suggestion: use 'downtown' without 'in' and prefer 'very close' or 'nearby.'

× So last Saturday my mum and I finished our dinner. Then we just, uh, decided to have a random, uh, walk around the lake And uh, that was really, uh, exciting and also enjoyable because we didn't, because we don't have a lot of chance to, uh, work like that together.

✓ So last Saturday my mum and I finished our dinner. Then we decided to take a spontaneous walk around the lake, and that was really exciting and enjoyable because we don't often have many opportunities to do that together.

Clean up hesitations and redundancies. Use 'take a spontaneous walk' or 'go for a spontaneous walk.' Maintain tense: 'finished' (past) then explanation about habitual lack of opportunities uses present 'don't often have.' Use 'many opportunities' not 'a lot of chance.' 'Work like that' is wrong; use 'do that.' Suggestion: remove filler words and choose correct collocations.