Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more grammatical, avoid repetition, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one supporting detail. Use correct verbs and prepositions (e.g. 'walk from school to home', 'not far'). Keep within 2–3 sentences and include a linking word if adding a reason.

Example: Yes, I walk a lot because my home is close to my school, so I walk there almost every day. In addition, walking helps me stay healthy and I usually reach about 5,000 steps when I do that.

Suggestion: Produce a single clear sentence about frequency and one specific supporting detail. Correct tense and word choice: use 'when I was a child', 'I often went for walks', and explain reason simply. Avoid confusing phrases and pronoun errors.

Example: Yes, when I was a child I often went for walks, especially with my parents, because walking was a good way to relax and take a break from homework.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence and give two concise, linked reasons using correct grammar. Use linking words ('first', 'second', 'because', 'so') and be specific (e.g. 'fresh air', 'safer than roads'). Avoid filler words and repetition.

Example: People like walking in parks for two main reasons. First, the air is fresher, so it feels healthier, and second, parks are safer and less busy than roads, especially for families and joggers.

Suggestion: Good structure: conditional + reason. Improve naturalness by making the reason more relevant to the hypothetical (scenery, fresh air, challenge) rather than proximity to school. Use concise phrasing and avoid redundancy ('accessible to go there' unnecessary).

Example: If I had the chance, I'd take a long walk in Central Mountain Park because it has beautiful scenery and peaceful trails, which would make for a refreshing and challenging hike.

Suggestion: Give a clear past-tense answer: say where, when, who you were with and why, in 2–3 sentences. Remove hesitations and correct prepositions ('went to the mountain', 'with my friends', 'because we had finished our graduation').

Example: Recently I went for a walk on Central Mountain with some friends. We went there to celebrate finishing our graduation and enjoyed the trails and views.

× Yes, I almost everyday work from my school to my home.

✓ Yes, I almost every day walk from my school to my home.

The sentence uses 'work' incorrectly when describing walking; also 'almost everyday' should be 'almost every day' (adverb phrase). Use the simple present 'walk' for habitual actions. Suggestion: use 'I almost every day walk' or more naturally 'I walk almost every day from school to home.'

× OK so my home is not distant from my school, so I often work to school.

✓ OK, my home is not far from my school, so I often walk to school.

'Distant from' is formal; 'not far from' is more natural. 'Work to school' is wrong preposition and verb choice; use 'walk to school.' Preposition 'to' should follow 'walk'.

× Besides, I think this exercise can boost my health and exercise that 5000 steps in.

✓ Besides, I think this exercise can boost my health and help me reach 5,000 steps.

The phrase 'exercise that 5000 steps in' is ungrammatical. Use 'help me reach 5,000 steps' or 'help me get 5,000 steps.' Also include comma for clarity and format number as '5,000.'

× Yes, when when I was in childhood I often did go out, went outside to have a walk or especially with my parents because working with them offer them your opportunity to relieve myself from homework and the chance to relax.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I often went out for a walk, especially with my parents, because being with them gave me an opportunity to get away from homework and relax.

Several issues: 'when I was in childhood' should be 'when I was a child.' Use simple past 'went' (not 'did go out' which is emphatic and unnecessary). 'Working with them offer them your opportunity' is incorrect; intended meaning is 'being with them gave me an opportunity.' Use past tense 'gave' to match 'was' and 'went.' 'Relieve myself from homework' should be 'get away from homework' or 'be relieved of homework.'

× I think there are two main reasons why people like to walk in parks. The first reason is that the air in parks are very fresh.

✓ I think there are two main reasons why people like to walk in parks. The first reason is that the air in parks is very fresh.

Subject 'air' is singular so verb should be 'is' not 'are.' Maintain subject-verb agreement: 'the air ... is very fresh.'

× People can forget their uh don't work.

✓ People can forget about their work.

The fragment 'forget their uh don't work' is ungrammatical. The correct expression is 'forget about their work' or 'forget their worries.' Use 'forget about' followed by noun phrase.

× Second, uh, park walk in parks, uh can be safe can be safe and any working in lanes in the road.

✓ Second, walking in parks can be safer, and they are safer than walking on roadside lanes.

Original is repetitive and unclear. Use a clear comparative: 'walking in parks can be safer' and compare with 'walking on roadside lanes.' Ensure correct form 'walking' (gerund) and comparative 'safer.'

× If I had the opportunity to take a long walk, I would like to go to a mountain, for example, Central Mountain Park, because our school is very close to this park and it's accessible to go there.

✓ If I had the opportunity to take a long walk, I would like to go to a mountain, for example Central Mountain Park, because our school is very close to the park and it is easy to get there.

'It's accessible to go there' is awkward; use 'it is easy to get there.' Keep gerund/infinitive forms consistent. Also omit comma before 'Central Mountain Park' and use 'the park' for clarity.

× Recently I went to for work in on the mountain called Central Mountain.

✓ Recently I went for a walk on the mountain called Central Mountain.

Multiple preposition errors: 'went to for work in on' is incorrect. Use 'went for a walk on the mountain' to express purpose and location. 'For a walk' indicates activity; 'on the mountain' indicates location.

× A way, uh, I wouldn't, uh, I went to this mountain with my friends 'cause we have finished our, uh, graduation, uh, things.

✓ Anyway, I went to this mountain with my friends because we had finished our graduation activities.

Use past perfect 'had finished' or simple past 'finished' depending on sequence; here past perfect 'had finished' clarifies that finishing graduation preceded the trip. Also 'graduation things' is informal; use 'graduation activities' or 'graduation ceremonies.' Remove contractions and filler words.