Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise, correct grammar and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Pay attention to tense consistency (use present simple for habits) and natural collocations (e.g., “peace of mind”, “go for a walk”).

Example: Yes. I often go for a walk with my husband in the nearby park. We usually spend about an hour there, chatting as we walk, and I find the greenery and fresh air give me real peace of mind.

Suggestion: Clarify time references and tense. Avoid mixing past and present incorrectly. Give a clear topic sentence about childhood, then contrast with present habits using a linking word like “but” or “now”. Reduce filler words and repetition.

Example: No, I rarely walked outside as a child. However, now I walk for about 30 minutes every day because the fresh air and greenery help me relax and clear my mind.

Suggestion: Correct word choice and grammar (e.g., ‘walk in parks’, ‘fresh air’) and use linking words to structure your answer. Provide two clear specific reasons and one short example or result. Avoid vague phrases like ‘soothing vibes’ without explanation.

Example: People enjoy walking in parks because of the fresh air and abundant greenery, which help reduce stress. In addition, parks often have well-designed paths that make walking comfortable, so many people go there to exercise or unwind.

Suggestion: Fix repeated words and wrong vocabulary (e.g., ‘if I had the chance’, ‘walk by the seaside’). Be specific about what you like (sound of waves, sea breeze) and use one linking phrase like ‘because’ to give reasons. Keep it concise.

Example: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along the seaside because the sound of the waves and the sea breeze are very calming and help me relax.

Suggestion: Use correct past tense and avoid repetition. Start with a simple past topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words like ‘because’ or ‘so’ to explain the effects. Replace vague or repeated phrases with concise expressions.

Example: Last night I went for a walk in our neighborhood park. I like it because of the greenery and clean air, which help me relax and feel better after a stressful day.

× We used to spend one one hour there, uh, doing walk and talk.

✓ We used to spend about an hour there, walking and talking.

The phrase 'doing walk and talk' is incorrect. When referring to activities like walking and talking, use the gerund (verb + -ing) forms 'walking' and 'talking'. Also 'one one hour' is a duplication and should be 'about an hour' to sound natural.

× I it.

✓ I enjoyed it.

The original 'I it' is missing the verb. Use the verb 'enjoyed' to complete the sentence. The correct structure is Subject + Verb + Object.

× It really gives me Peace of Mind and relaxes my overall body.

✓ It really gives me peace of mind and relaxes my whole body.

'Peace of Mind' should be lowercased as 'peace of mind' (not a proper noun). 'Overall body' is unnatural; use 'whole body'. Also 'relaxes' correctly follows the subject 'it'.

× I really enjoyed there because of the greenery.

✓ I really enjoyed being there because of the greenery.

Use 'enjoyed being there' or 'enjoyed it there'. The verb 'enjoy' typically takes a noun or gerund; 'there' alone is not a direct object.

× No, I didn't go outside for a walk when I was a child, but now as an adult, I used to go out for a walk for about 30 minutes in a day.

✓ No, I didn't go outside for walks when I was a child, but now as an adult, I go out for a walk for about 30 minutes a day.

The first clause correctly uses past simple 'didn't go' for childhood. 'Used to' implies a past habit and conflicts with 'now as an adult'; replace 'used to' with present simple 'go' to indicate current habit. Also 'in a day' should be 'a day'.

× The greenery, the fresh air in the vibrant atmosphere gives me Peace of Mind and uh, relaxes my body.

✓ The greenery and the fresh air in the vibrant atmosphere give me peace of mind and relax my body.

When multiple subjects are joined by 'and', the verb should be plural: 'give' and 'relax' not 'gives' and 'relaxes'. Also 'Peace of Mind' should be lowercased.

× I really enjoyed to go out.

✓ I really enjoyed going out.

The verb 'enjoy' should be followed by a gerund ('going'), not an infinitive ('to go').

× People like to work in park due to the fresh atmosphere, greenery and the P and the overall fresh year.

✓ People like to walk in parks because of the fresh atmosphere, greenery and the overall fresh air.

'Work in park' is incorrect; context implies 'walk in parks'. Use plural 'parks' for general statements. 'Due to' is acceptable but 'because of' is more natural here. 'P' and 'year' appear to be typos; likely intended 'air'.

× It relaxes their mind and give soothing vibes.

✓ It relaxes their minds and gives soothing vibes.

Subject 'It' requires singular verbs: 'relaxes' and 'gives'. Also 'mind' should be plural 'minds' when referring to people in general.

× Also the ground and the pathway they used to design is for walking especially.

✓ Also the ground and the pathways are designed especially for walking.

The original has awkward passive/active mix and incorrect verb agreement. Use passive 'are designed' for general design purpose and plural 'pathways' to match 'the ground and the pathways'. Place 'especially' before or after the purpose phrase for clarity.

× If I if I had a junk, I would love to work on a seaside area because of the vibrant atmosphere, pressure and the sound of waves and soothing environment.

✓ If I had the chance, I would love to walk in a seaside area because of the vibrant atmosphere, fresh air, the sound of waves and the soothing environment.

'If I had a junk' is incorrect; likely meant 'the chance'. 'Work on a seaside area' should be 'walk in a seaside area'. 'Pressure' is incorrect in this context; 'fresh air' fits better. Improve parallelism and article use.

× It creates calmness and peaceful atmosphere.

✓ It creates calmness and a peaceful atmosphere.

Missing article 'a' before 'peaceful atmosphere' and better parallel structure with 'calmness and a peaceful atmosphere'.

× It helps me to relax my mind and feel.

✓ It helps me to relax my mind and feel calmer.

The original ends with 'feel' without an object or complement. Add an adjective like 'calmer' to complete the thought and match the meaning.

× Last night I go for a walk to our neighborhood park.

✓ Last night I went for a walk to our neighborhood park.

The event happened in the past, so use past simple 'went' not present 'go'.

× I really like to go there because of the greenery, fresh air and the overall cleanness of the area.

✓ I really like going there because of the greenery, fresh air and the overall cleanliness of the area.

Use gerund 'going' after 'like' for general preference. 'Cleanness' is less natural than 'cleanliness'.

× It gives me Peace of Mind and it relaxes my mind and it makes me feel relieved after a stressful day.

✓ It gives me peace of mind, relaxes my mind and makes me feel relieved after a stressful day.

Avoid repetitive 'it' by combining verbs: 'gives', 'relaxes' and 'makes' share the same subject. Lowercase 'peace of mind'. This improves fluency and concision.