Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct small grammar issues. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., repeating 'lose some weight').

Example: Yes — I walk every day. For example, I aim for 10,000 steps to help lose weight and improve my mental health because my doctor recommended it, and I find brisk walking a simple way to exercise.

Suggestion: Use a clearer past-tense structure and a topic sentence. Give one specific example and link ideas smoothly. Avoid awkward phrases like 'very indeed' and mix of present tense.

Example: Yes, I did. I walked often with friends; for instance, we would stroll around the neighborhood to find places to eat, and sometimes we walked farther to visit parks or markets.

Suggestion: Clarify and complete your reasoning. Use correct grammar and linking words to present a clear cause-and-effect point. Provide one concrete benefit (e.g., fresh air, scenery, social contact) and avoid unfinished sentences.

Example: I think people enjoy walking in parks because of the fresh air and pleasant scenery, and also because parks offer social contact — for example, meeting neighbors or joining group activities that improve mood.

Suggestion: Use a clear conditional/topic sentence and correct collocations (e.g., 'go for a long walk in the mountains'). Give specific reasons and avoid repetition like 'meet meet'.

Example: If I had the chance, I'd go for a long walk in the mountains. Last year I aimed to hike a different mountain each month to enjoy varied scenery and meet fellow hikers.

Suggestion: Keep the answer concise and use consistent past or present tense. Start with a direct statement then add a brief specific detail about frequency or who you meet.

Example: Lately I have been walking in a nearby park or around my neighborhood because of work. I often chat with friends or colleagues I meet there, which makes the walks enjoyable.

× Yes I walk a lot.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot.

The sentence needs a comma after 'Yes' for natural punctuation; tense is correct (simple present) for habitual action. Improve by adding comma and optional contraction: 'Yes, I do walk a lot.' if emphasis is needed.

× I'm aiming at 10,000 steps every day to lose some weight and to improve also my mental health since my doctor suggested me to lose some weight.

✓ I'm aiming for 10,000 steps every day to lose some weight and also to improve my mental health, since my doctor suggested that I lose some weight.

Use 'aiming for' not 'aiming at' when referring to a target (preposition error overlapping present tense). Place 'also' before the verb phrase for natural word order. 'Suggested me to lose' is incorrect; use 'suggested that I lose' or 'advised me to lose'.

× So I am thinking of UMM walking as the exercise to lose weight.

✓ So I am thinking of walking as an exercise to lose weight.

Remove 'UMM' (filler) and use 'an exercise' rather than 'the exercise' for general reference. 'Thinking of walking' is correct phrase; original contained unclear filler and article misuse.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

Question is already correctly formed in past tense; no grammatical change required. Keep 'Did you often go' for habitual past actions.

× Yes, very indeed, because I do have many friends and our bonding time is to go somewhere and eat.

✓ Yes, indeed, because I have many friends and we usually spend time together going out to eat.

Use 'have' instead of 'do have' for neutral statement; 'very indeed' is unnatural—use 'indeed'. Rephrase 'our bonding time is to go somewhere and eat' to natural English: 'we usually spend time together going out to eat.' This corrects tense and improves idiomatic expression.

× So we really walk a lot around the neighborhood and even outside our neighborhood.

✓ So we really walk a lot around the neighborhood and even beyond it.

Rephrase 'outside our neighborhood' to 'beyond it' for concision and naturalness. Present tense 'walk' is appropriate for habitual action.

× I believe that people like to walk in parks because they see many people and some people likes to see some new environments, some new people rather than staying in their home and also scientifically seeing someone will make.

✓ I believe people like to walk in parks because they can see other people and new environments, rather than stay at home; studies also show that seeing others can improve mood.

Errors: 'some people likes' should be 'some people like' (subject-verb agreement). 'Some new environments' phrasing improved to 'new environments'. 'Staying in their home' -> 'stay at home' (preposition/article). The final fragment 'scientifically seeing someone will make' is incomplete; clarify to 'studies also show that seeing others can improve mood' to convey intended meaning.

× I really like to go to a long walk in the mountain.

✓ I really like to go for a long walk in the mountains.

Use 'go for a walk' not 'go to a walk'. Use plural 'mountains' or 'a mountain' with article 'a' and 'in the mountains' is more natural for hiking. Correct preposition and noun form.

× Actually last year I tried and targeted to walk once a month in a different mountain and in a different city so that I can see different sceneries and meet meet many people.

✓ Actually, last year I aimed to walk once a month on a different mountain and in a different city so that I could see different scenery and meet many people.

Use 'aimed to' or 'planned to' instead of 'tried and targeted to' (incorrect verb collocation). For past intention, use 'could' not 'can'. 'Scenery' is an uncountable noun, not 'sceneries'. Remove duplicate 'meet'.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where have you gone for a walk lately?

When asking about recent activities with 'lately', present perfect ('have you gone') is more appropriate than simple past ('did you go'). This matches the time frame implied by 'lately'.

× Lately, since I am very busy with my work, I just walk in a park nearby or just around the neighborhood and while walking I talk to my friends and other colleagues that I saw.

✓ Lately, since I have been very busy with work, I just walk in a nearby park or around the neighborhood, and while walking I talk to friends and colleagues I see.

Use present perfect continuous 'have been' to describe ongoing recent situation. 'A park nearby' -> 'a nearby park'. Use present simple 'see' for habitual encounters rather than past 'saw'. Remove redundant 'other' before 'colleagues' and unnecessary second 'just'.