Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, then give two brief supporting reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrasing.

Example: Yes, I walk a lot. Firstly, my job as a registered nurse requires me to walk between patients’ rooms frequently. Secondly, I enjoy walking with my brother and other family members for exercise and conversation.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence and add one specific detail with correct tense and smoother phrasing. Use a linking word to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I often went for walks with my parents when I was a child. Because we lived in a village in India, we used to stroll along quiet paths and enjoy the fresh air.

Suggestion: Begin with a general statement, then give two clear reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Be specific and avoid vague phrases.

Example: People like walking in parks for several reasons. For example, many find it relaxing after a busy day, and others enjoy the scenery and watching children play on the playground.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence naming the place, then briefly explain why with a specific detail and use past reference correctly. Avoid repetition.

Example: I would like to take a long walk along the Colorado River. I walked there with my boyfriend last year and enjoyed the scenic riverside path, so I would love to return for a longer stroll.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear past-tense sentence, include one or two specific details, and avoid hesitations and repetitions. Correct vocabulary (e.g., 'CN Tower').

Example: Lately I went for a long walk along Lake Ontario with my parents and brother. It was very scenic, and we could even see the CN Tower from our side of the city.

× Yes, I do walk a lot.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot.

The auxiliary 'do' is unnecessary in a simple present affirmative sentence. Use the base verb 'walk' with 'I' to form the present simple: 'I walk a lot.' Avoid adding 'do' unless forming a question or emphasizing. Suggestion: Use 'I walk a lot' for a natural affirmative response.

× The one for two reasons.

✓ There are two reasons.

The original is ungrammatical and unclear. Use the existential 'there are' to state the number of reasons. This corrects sentence structure and makes the meaning clear. Suggestion: Start with 'There are' when listing reasons.

× One thing is one reason is because of my job as I'm a registered nurse for taking care of my patient.

✓ One reason is my job, because I am a registered nurse who takes care of my patients.

The original repeats 'one' and has awkward clauses. Rephrase to 'One reason is my job' and use a relative clause 'who takes care of my patients' to describe the nurse role. Use plural 'patients' for generality. Suggestion: Keep one clear main clause and use a relative clause to describe the job.

× It requires a lot of walk to go door to door.

✓ It requires a lot of walking to go door to door.

After 'requires' we use a noun or gerund. 'Walking' functions as a noun here. 'A lot of walking' is the correct collocation. Suggestion: Use 'walking' after 'a lot of' in this context.

× And the other thing is that I love to do walking along with my brother and my family members.

✓ The other reason is that I love walking with my brother and other family members.

Use the gerund 'walking' rather than 'to do walking.' Also 'love walking with' is more natural. 'Family members' can be 'other family members' for fluency. Suggestion: Use 'love walking with' for natural expression.

× Yes, I remember that when I was child I used to go for a walk along with my parents.

✓ Yes, I remember that when I was a child I used to go for a walk with my parents.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'child' is incorrect. Also 'along with' is acceptable but 'with' is more natural. 'Used to' correctly indicates past habitual action. Suggestion: Include 'a' before singular nouns like 'child'.

× Uh, as in India we used to live in a village area, so we did often go for a walk.

✓ When we lived in India in a village, we often went for walks.

'As in India' is awkward; use 'When we lived in India' to set context. 'Village area' is better as 'a village.' For past habitual actions, 'used to' or 'often went' are correct; avoid 'did often go' which is unnatural. Suggestion: Use 'we often went for walks' or 'we used to go for walks' for past habits.

× It's dependent on person to person.

✓ It depends on the person.

'Dependent on' is acceptable but 'It depends on the person' is the natural English expression. 'Person to person' is incorrect; use 'person to person' only in different contexts (idiomatically) but here singular 'the person' works. Suggestion: Use 'It depends on the person' to express variability.

× Some people feel relaxed when they are walking in parks.

✓ Some people feel relaxed when they walk in parks.

Both forms are possible, but for general habits the simple present 'walk' is preferred. 'They are walking' implies a specific ongoing action; use 'walk' to describe what people in general do. Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual actions: 'they walk'.

× Some people loves to enjoy the scenes, love to enjoy the child's playing together over there.

✓ Some people love enjoying the scenery and watching children play together there.

'People' is plural, so the verb should be 'love' not 'loves.' 'Enjoy the scenes' is awkward; 'enjoying the scenery' is natural. 'Child's playing' is incorrect; use 'children play' and 'watching' or similar. Suggestion: Match plural subject with plural verb and use natural collocations: 'enjoy the scenery' and 'children play.'

× That's why.

✓ That's why.

This sentence is acceptable as a short spoken response. No grammatical correction needed beyond the preceding sentence fixes. Suggestion: Keep as a brief concluding remark.

× I would like to take a long walk along with the side of Colorado River.

✓ I would like to take a long walk along the side of the Colorado River.

Missing article 'the' before 'Colorado River' and incorrect preposition 'along with the side of' should be 'along the side of' or simply 'along the Colorado River.' Also add 'the' before river name. Suggestion: Use 'along the Colorado River' for natural phrasing.

× I went there with my boyfriend last year.

✓ I went there with my boyfriend last year.

This sentence is grammatically correct in past tense and needs no change. Suggestion: No change required.

× It was a really scenic walking path over there.

✓ It was a really scenic walking path.

'Over there' is redundant when context already established; sentence is otherwise correct in past tense. Removing 'over there' makes it concise. Suggestion: Keep concise by omitting unnecessary locatives.

× That's why I would love to go over there to do a walk.

✓ That's why I would love to go there for a walk.

Use 'for a walk' rather than 'to do a walk.' 'Go there' is sufficient; 'over' is unnecessary. 'Would love to go there for a walk' is natural. Suggestion: Use 'go for a walk' as the common collocation.

× I went for a walk, I went for a long walk along with my mom and dad and my brother alongside the Lake Ontario.

✓ I went for a long walk with my mom, dad, and brother along Lake Ontario.

Reduce repetition 'I went for a walk, I went for a long walk'; combine into one clause. Use 'with' instead of 'along with' for conciseness and 'along Lake Ontario' or 'along the shore of Lake Ontario' is more natural. Commas in list of family members improve clarity. Suggestion: Avoid repeating the same clause and use natural prepositions like 'along' or 'along the shore of'.

× It's really scenic. You uh, I can see. We did see see in tower as well from my side of the city.

✓ It's really scenic. We could even see the CN Tower from my side of the city.

Original is disfluent and ungrammatical. 'We did see see in tower' is incorrect. 'We could see the CN Tower' (or 'a tower' if unspecified) is correct; include article 'the' before 'CN Tower.' 'From my side of the city' is acceptable. Suggestion: Use 'we could see the CN Tower' or 'we could even see the tower' and avoid filler words like 'uh' in formal answers.