Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 문법과 동사 형태 사용을 고쳐야 합니다. 현재 문장에서 'works'와 같은 오용이 반복되어 자연스럽지 않습니다. 또한 응답은 구조화되어야 합니다: 주제문으로 직접 답하고, 이유와 빈도를 연결어로 덧붙이세요. 예시: 'Yes, I walk regularly.'라는 주제문을 말한 다음, 'because'나 'so' 대신 'because'로 이유를 명확히 하고, 주당 빈도(once a week)와 언제(weekends)를 연결하여 자연스럽게 설명하세요.

Example: Yes, I walk regularly because it keeps me healthy and helps me relax. I usually go for a walk once a week, especially on weekends, when I have more free time.

Suggestion: 문장과 시제, 어휘 선택을 고쳐야 합니다. 'in my child' 대신 'when I was a child', 'went to school for working'은 의미가 불분명합니다. 구체적으로 과거 습관을 말할 때는 'I used to'를 사용하고, 이유는 명확하게 연결어로 설명하세요. 예: 교통 수단이 없었기 때문에 많이 걸었다고 말하세요.

Example: Yes, when I was a child I used to walk a lot. My hometown was a small rural area, so there were few transport options and walking was the only way to get to school.

Suggestion: 문장 구성과 어휘 선택을 개선하세요. 'park is a very good working spot'는 의미가 불명확합니다. 이유를 제시할 때는 연결어(for example, because, also)와 구체적 묘사(wide paths, greenery, presence of pets)를 사용해 논리적으로 말하세요. 반복을 피하고 문장을 완성형으로 만드세요.

Example: I think people like walking in parks because they offer wide paths and lots of greenery, which make walking pleasant. Also, parks are popular with pet owners, so the atmosphere feels friendly and relaxed.

Suggestion: 명확한 주제문과 연결어 사용을 연습하세요. 'I hope to go forest' 대신 'I'd like to walk in a forest'처럼 자연스럽게 말하고, 이유는 'because'로 연결하세요. 또한 형용사 사용에서 복수/단수와 어순을 정확히 하세요 (peaceful and clean -> peaceful and clean surroundings).

Example: I'd like to take a long walk in a forest because it's peaceful and clean, and the quiet environment would help me relax.

Suggestion: 과거 시제 문장을 명확히 하고, 명사와 형용사의 사용을 고치세요. 'in weekend' -> 'at the weekend' 또는 'last weekend'. 'There are spacious'은 문법적으로 틀렸으니 'It is spacious' 또는 'There is plenty of space'로 고치세요. 공기와 분위기를 묘사할 때는 주어를 일관되게 사용하세요 ('The air was fresh and the atmosphere was peaceful').

Example: I went to Lake Park in my city about two weeks ago on the weekend. It is very spacious and there were many people, but the air felt fresh and the atmosphere was peaceful.

× Yes, I usually works around because it makes me healthier and relaxing so I works once a week, especially weekend.

✓ Yes, I usually walk around because it makes me healthier and relaxed, so I walk once a week, especially on weekends.

The verb must agree with the subject: use 'walk' not 'works'. 'Relaxing' should be 'relaxed' to describe a state. Also add 'on' before 'weekends' and use plural 'weekends' for habitual actions.

× Yes, in in my child I went to school for working because my hometown was countryside size so I my transportation was only working.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I walked to school because my hometown was in the countryside and my only transportation was walking.

Use 'when I was a child' instead of 'in in my child'. Use past tense 'walked' to match 'went' meaning habitual past action. 'Countryside' needs article and preposition 'in the countryside'. 'My only transportation' is the correct word order and 'walking' is the noun form for the mode of transport.

× I think park. Is very good working spot because. There are wide, there are wide, and lots of pets.

✓ I think parks are very good places to walk because they are wide and there are lots of pets.

Combine fragments into full sentences. Use plural 'parks' or 'the park' consistently. 'Working spot' is incorrect; 'place to walk' is appropriate. 'There are wide' is ungrammatical; use 'they are wide'.

× I hope to go forest, there are peaceful and clean so I want to relax.

✓ I hope to go to the forest; it is peaceful and clean, so I want to relax there.

Add preposition 'to' before 'the forest'. Use 'it is' to refer to the forest (singular). Add 'there' for clarity about where to relax.

× I went to Lake Park in my city about two weeks ago in weekend. There are spacious and lots of people. Their air is fresh and mood is peaceful.

✓ I went to Lake Park in my city about two weeks ago on the weekend. It was spacious and there were lots of people. The air was fresh and the atmosphere was peaceful.

Use 'on the weekend' and past tense consistently ('was', 'there were'). 'There are spacious' is wrong; use 'it was spacious'. 'Their air' is incorrect pronoun use; use 'the air' and 'atmosphere' or 'mood'.