Reading— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid vague phrasing (e.g. "kind of"), correct collocations ("escape from reality"), and limit to 2–3 supporting sentences using linking words to improve coherence.

Example: Yes, I enjoy reading. It broadens my knowledge and helps me relax after a busy day. For example, fiction lets me escape from reality and explore different perspectives, while non-fiction expands my understanding of real-world issues.

Suggestion: Give a clear main idea then add one specific reason with a concise example. Use smoother linking words and correct minor grammar ("read on a screen"). Avoid repetition like "read a screen."

Example: I prefer reading on paper because it feels easier to navigate and annotate. For example, I can quickly flip through pages or highlight passages, whereas reading on a screen often strains my eyes after long periods.

Suggestion: Structure your answer: give a clear contrast between when careful reading is necessary and when it is not. Avoid vague pronouns and unclear phrases; be specific about examples and reasons. Keep sentences shorter and correct tense/grammar ("interventions I need to do as a nurse").

Example: I need to read very carefully when I'm studying medical information or instructions for patient care because mistakes could affect someone's health. Conversely, I don't read carefully when I'm skimming news headlines or light fiction for pleasure.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific reason and a brief example. Avoid repetition ("full overview" and "full grasp" are redundant) and use linking words like "because" or "so that."

Example: I prefer detailed reading because it helps me fully understand complex topics. For instance, when studying nursing procedures I read slowly and take notes so that I can remember the steps accurately.

× I kind of like reading because reading gives me a wider scope of knowledge and it allows me to create a new space for me and escape temporarily on the reality.

✓ I kind of like reading because it gives me a wider scope of knowledge and allows me to create a new space for myself and temporarily escape from reality.

Errors: 'for me' is unnecessary after 'create a new space' and 'myself' is the correct reflexive pronoun (Problem type 15 and 12 overlap, but main change fits preposition/reflexive). 'Escape temporarily on the reality' uses wrong preposition and word order. Use 'escape from reality' and place adverb 'temporarily' before the verb or phrase. Also remove redundant repetition 'reading' to improve fluency. Suggestion: use 'myself' for reflexive actions and 'escape from' for leaving a state; position adverbs close to the verb they modify.

× I prefer to read on paper because it allows me to have a full control over the pages that I read.

✓ I prefer to read on paper because it allows me to have full control over the pages I read.

Error: 'a full control' uses an unnecessary article; 'full control' is uncountable so no 'a' (Problem type 22 Article errors / 11 preposition). Also 'that I read' is wordy; reduced relative clause 'pages I read' is more natural. Suggestion: drop the article before uncountable nouns and simplify relative clauses.

× If I, for example, read a screen, it sometimes strains my eyes and it's very painful.

✓ If I, for example, read on a screen, it sometimes strains my eyes and is very painful.

Error: missing preposition 'on' before 'a screen' (Problem type 11). Also 'it's very painful' is acceptable but repetitive; 'is very painful' avoids informal contraction and matches the subject 'reading' implied. Suggestion: use 'read on a screen' and keep subject agreement consistent.

× I think I need to read carefully if I try to study about the health of people and as well as the interventions that I needed to do as a nurse because it consists of a life and that situation and I feel like I don't need to read carefully.

✓ I think I need to read carefully when I study people's health and the interventions I need to perform as a nurse, because these involve people's lives; otherwise, I feel I don't need to read as carefully.

Multiple errors: incorrect preposition 'study about' should be 'study' or 'study about' -> use 'study' (Problem type 11), tense inconsistency 'needed' should be present 'need' (Problem type 5 Past tense issue), awkward phrase 'it consists of a life and that situation' should be 'these involve people's lives' (Problem type 26 sentence structure). Also clarify contrast: reading carefully in clinical contexts but not in others. Suggestion: use 'when' instead of 'if' for habitual situations, use present tense for general statements about duties, and rephrase to clearly express contrast.

× I prefer detailed reading because it gives me the full overview or the full grasp on that certain topic.

✓ I prefer detailed reading because it gives me a full overview or a full grasp of that particular topic.

Errors: 'the full overview' and 'the full grasp' are awkward with 'the'; use 'a full overview' or 'a full grasp' (Problem type 22 Article errors). Preposition 'on' with 'grasp' is incorrect; use 'grasp of' (Problem type 11). 'That certain topic' is redundant and should be 'that particular topic' or 'a certain topic.' Suggestion: choose 'a' for one of many overviews and use correct preposition 'of' with 'grasp.'

× It also gives me the time to fully comprehend what I read.

✓ It also gives me time to fully comprehend what I read.

Minor issue: 'the time' is unnecessary; 'gives me time' is more natural (Problem type 20). The adverb placement 'fully comprehend' is fine. Suggestion: omit unnecessary articles for general statements and keep adverb next to the verb it modifies.