Reading— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Reduce hesitations and repetition, start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two concise supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid filler words (e.g., “actually”, repeated phrases, “I tend to”).

Example: Yes, I enjoy reading. I have been an avid reader since childhood because my father encouraged me, and I especially enjoy historical nonfiction since it helps me understand real events and people.

Suggestion: Organize the response: give a clear preference, then explain briefly with specific reason. Remove fillers and repeat information concisely. Use linking words like “because” or “so” to connect cause and effect.

Example: I prefer reading on paper because I have vision problems; screens often make my eyes sore and cause dizziness, so my doctor advised me to limit screen time.

Suggestion: Provide a direct topic sentence and clearer supporting details. Avoid vague or incorrect phrasing. Use linking words (e.g., “for example”, “when”, “because”) and give specific situations when careful reading is needed and when it is not.

Example: I read carefully when a text includes important facts or instructions, for example legal documents, study materials, or complicated explanations. In contrast, I skim light material like news headlines or casual social media posts when I only need a general idea.

Suggestion: State your preference clearly, then give a concise reason with better vocabulary and no repetition. Replace fillers and correct word choice (e.g., use “skimming” not “scheming”).

Example: I prefer detailed reading because I worry about missing important information when I skim. For instance, when studying or researching, I read slowly to understand nuances and facts.

× Yes, I do actually actually enjoy reading.

✓ Yes, I actually enjoy reading.

The sentence contains an unnecessary repetition of the adverb 'actually'. This is a sentence structure/redundancy issue. Remove the duplicate 'actually' to make the sentence natural and concise. Suggestion: read the sentence aloud to spot repeated words and delete extras.

× I've been an avid reader since my childhood and this passion has been instilled in me by my father and I tend to I gravitate towards historical nonfiction books.

✓ I've been an avid reader since my childhood; this passion was instilled in me by my father, and I tend to gravitate towards historical nonfiction books.

Multiple issues: run-on sentence and awkward phrasing ('instilled in me by my father and I tend to I gravitate' has extra 'I' and missing punctuation). Break into clearer clauses, use past simple 'was instilled' for a past action that started in childhood, remove the extra 'I', and add appropriate punctuation. Suggestion: divide long sentences into clauses with commas or semicolons and check for stray words.

× I tend to buy paper versions of books.

✓ I tend to buy paper versions of books.

No grammatical error found relative to the provided list; sentence is acceptable. (Included for completeness.)

× This is mainly due to my illness.

✓ This is mainly due to my eyesight problems.

'My illness' is vague and slightly unnatural in context. Since the student mentions vision difficulties next, a more precise noun phrase like 'eyesight problems' or 'a vision problem' fits better. Use specific vocabulary to improve clarity.

× I have vision difficulties and it may umm and it may cause dizziness and sore eyes and the doctor advised me to reduce screen time.

✓ I have vision difficulties, which can cause dizziness and sore eyes, and the doctor advised me to reduce my screen time.

Combine clauses to avoid repetition ('it may' repeated) and use 'which can cause' to link the condition to its effects. 'May' is okay but 'can' is more natural for general effects. Add 'my' before 'screen time' for specificity. Remove filler 'umm'.

× I usually tend to take time when I arrive to important passages that have very useful information, or when it contains events that private the.

✓ I usually take time when I come across important passages that contain very useful information, or when they describe private events.

Multiple issues: 'tend to take time' is redundant—'usually take time' is clearer. 'Arrive to' is incorrect preposition; use 'come across'. 'That have very useful information' is acceptable but 'that contain very useful information' is more natural. The clause 'when it contains events that private the' is ungrammatical and unclear—likely meant 'when they describe private events'; change 'it' to 'they' to agree with 'passages'. Ensure correct subject-verb agreement and word order.

× Most of the time I tend to I tend to to detailed reading because I'm afraid to miss some important information by scheming or scanning, and that's not the, uh, subjective reading itself.

✓ Most of the time I tend to do detailed reading because I'm afraid of missing important information by skimming or scanning, and that's not the same as subjective reading itself.

Multiple problems: repeated phrases ('tend to I tend to to'), infinitive/verb form errors ('to detailed reading' should be 'do detailed reading'), wrong preposition/verb ('afraid to miss' should be 'afraid of missing'), wrong verb 'scheming' should be 'skimming', and unclear final clause—'that's not the same as subjective reading itself' clarifies meaning. Remove filler 'uh'. Suggestions: avoid repetition, use correct collocations ('afraid of + -ing'), and check vocabulary ('skimming').