Reading— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct minor grammar issues. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating similar ideas (e.g. "excited" and "elated").

Example: Yes, I enjoy reading, especially romantic comedies and thrillers. For example, I like thrillers for their unexpected plot twists, while romantic comedies lift my mood with lighthearted dialogue and happy endings.

Suggestion: Make the comparison clearer and correct small errors. Use a topic sentence that states your preference, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words (e.g. "because", "however"). Avoid unnecessary long explanations about bags.

Example: I prefer reading on a screen because it is more convenient and portable. For example, I often read on my phone when commuting, whereas physical books are heavier and harder to carry around.

Suggestion: Improve grammar and clarity. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then contrast the two situations using linking words (e.g. "whereas", "because"). Be specific about what "work connected to my patient" means (e.g. medical records) and avoid vague endings.

Example: I need to read very carefully in formal situations, for example when reviewing medical records at work, because accuracy is critical. In contrast, I read casually in my free time, such as skimming novels for enjoyment.

Suggestion: Clarify and correct grammar, and avoid informal phrases like "to be honest" unless needed. Use linking words to show sequence (e.g. "first... then..."). Provide a specific example of when you would switch to detailed reading.

Example: I usually scan a book first to get an overview, and then read it in detail if the plot or characters interest me. For instance, I skim the first two chapters and then continue carefully if I find an intriguing plot twist.

× Yes, I do like reading, especially when during my free time I love reading romantic comedy or thriller genres.

✓ Yes, I do like reading, especially during my free time; I love reading romantic comedies or thrillers.

The phrase 'when during my free time' is redundant and awkward; use 'during my free time'. 'Romantic comedy or thriller genres' should be pluralized and simplified to 'romantic comedies or thrillers' to match count and natural usage. Also use a semicolon or separate clauses for clarity.

× It makes me excited for the plot and it makes my mood elated.

✓ They excite me because of the plot and lift my mood.

The subject is plural (books/genres), so use plural verbs and pronouns like 'they'. 'Excited for the plot' is unnatural; say 'excite me because of the plot'. 'Makes my mood elated' is awkward; use 'lift my mood'.

× I do prefer reading on a screen, but during my high school years I usually read on my phone because it is convenient and you can bring it anywhere, unlike the paper where you need a big bag to bring.

✓ I prefer reading on a screen, but during my high school years I usually read on my phone because it was convenient and you could take it anywhere, unlike paper, which requires a big bag to carry.

Use consistent tense: 'during my high school years' requires past tense 'was' and 'could'. 'You can bring it anywhere' should be 'you could take it anywhere' to match past context. Use 'paper' without 'the' and 'which requires a big bag to carry' is clearer than 'where you need a big bag to bring'. Also drop redundant 'do' in 'I do prefer'.

× I need to read carefully during on formal occasions like in school or in my work that is connected to my patient, but I can read informally during my free time when I don't.

✓ I need to read carefully on formal occasions, such as at school or at work when it involves my patients, but I can read informally during my free time.

Do not use 'during on'; use 'on' or 'during' but not both. Use 'at school' and 'at work' for locations. 'My work that is connected to my patient' is awkward; 'work when it involves my patients' is clearer and plural 'patients' matches typical usage. The trailing 'when I don't' is incomplete and removed.

× To be honest, I prefer to scan the pages first then I will read it in detailed when I got the plot twist that I wanted to read.

✓ To be honest, I prefer to scan the pages first, then I read them in detail when I get the plot twists I want to see.

Use parallel and consistent tense: avoid mixing 'prefer to scan' with 'I will read' and 'got'. Use simple present 'I read' and 'get' for habitual actions. 'Read it in detailed' is incorrect — use 'read them in detail'. 'Plot twist' pluralized to 'plot twists' and 'that I wanted to read' becomes 'I want to see' for clarity.

× I don't read the book if I don't like the genre and the twist on it.

✓ I don't read a book if I don't like the genre or its twists.

Sentence structure is awkward. Use 'a book' for general statements, and use 'or' to link reasons. 'The twist on it' is unnatural; 'its twists' is concise and clear.