Reading— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答は直接で良いですが、文法と語順の誤りが多く、理由の説明も曖昧です。より自然な表現と接続詞を使い、具体例を一つ加えると効果的です。発音や語の選択（例："reading"の前に冠詞は不要、"keep calm"は"calm"だけで十分）に注意してください。短くはっきりしたトピック文（1文）＋理由（1〜2文）を心がけてください。

Example: Yes, I enjoy reading. It helps me relax because I can focus on the text without visual distractions. For example, I often read fiction before bed to calm my mind.

Suggestion: 理由は述べていますが、文法と語の選び方が不自然で、文が途中で終わった印象です。明確な比較（advantages of screen vs paper）と具体例を入れ、接続語（for example, because, so）を使って論理を繋いでください。また冗長な表現を避け、最大5文以内にまとめてください。

Example: I prefer reading on a screen because it is more portable and stores many books in one device. For example, I can carry dozens of textbooks on my tablet, so I don’t have to carry heavy paper books.

Suggestion: 内容は具体的で適切ですが、言い回しと語順に改善の余地があります。“bureaucrat”など職業語は明確にし、理由を論理的に展開してください。つなぎ言葉（for example, because, therefore）を使い、短く明瞭に述べると更に良くなります。言い淀み（uh）は減らしましょう。

Example: I need to read very carefully when I review official documents for work because accuracy matters and numbers must be correct. On the other hand, I don’t read carefully when I’m browsing news or novels for relaxation.

Suggestion: 目的（why）と結果（what happens after）をもっと明確に述べてください。文法（冠詞や複数形）、接続詞、語順を改善し、最後に例を加えると説得力が増します。文を完結させ、冗長な語を削ること。

Example: I usually scan a text first to get its overall structure, because this helps me identify the main points quickly. After scanning, I read key sections in detail and can summarize the document for colleagues.

× A reading helps me to stay keep calm.

✓ Reading helps me to stay calm.

The noun 'reading' as a general activity is uncountable here, so the article 'A' is incorrect. Also 'stay keep calm' is redundant; use one verb 'stay' or 'keep'. Use 'stay calm' for correct collocation. Suggestion: Remove the indefinite article and choose one verb: 'Reading helps me stay calm.'

× Because there are no lights and the changes in visual we can read it without any disruption.

✓ Because there are no lights and no visual changes, we can read without any disruption.

'the changes in visual' is incorrect: 'visual changes' is the noun phrase and does not need 'the' here. 'no lights' is acceptable, and 'read it' is unnecessary—use 'read'. Reorder and add 'no' before 'visual changes' for parallelism. Suggestion: Use parallel negative structure: 'no lights and no visual changes'.

× because screen can easily transfer into anywhere and I need not to stress a lot of books in screen, but I can easily pick up something like.

✓ because screens can easily be taken anywhere, and I do not need to carry a lot of books on a screen, and I can easily pick up something to read.

Subject-verb agreement: 'screen' as a general noun should be plural 'screens' or use 'a screen'. Passive construction 'be taken anywhere' fits meaning. 'need not to' is incorrect; use 'do not need to' or 'need not'. 'in screen' should be 'on a screen' or 'on screens'. Also sentence fragment 'something like' is incomplete; complete to 'something to read'. Suggestion: Use plural/general noun and correct negation: 'screens can easily be taken anywhere' and 'do not need to carry a lot of books on a screen'.

× If I have to see documents as a bureaucrat, uh, from my professional perspective, the accuracy and honesty is very important because we use number or argument expression.

✓ If I have to review documents as a bureaucrat, from my professional perspective, accuracy and honesty are very important because we use numbers and argumentation.

'see documents' is unnatural; 'review documents' or 'read documents' fits. 'the accuracy and honesty is' has subject-verb agreement error: plural subject requires 'are'. 'number' should be plural 'numbers'. 'argument expression' is awkward; use 'argumentation' or 'arguments'. Suggestion: Use precise verbs and ensure subject-verb agreement: 'accuracy and honesty are'.

× I prefer to scan the book first as scanning document I can easily understand the total structure of document and I can tell someone the summary of the sentence as.

✓ I prefer to scan the book first because by scanning a document I can easily understand the overall structure and I can tell someone the summary of it.

'as scanning document' is ungrammatical; use 'by scanning a document' or 'when I scan a document'. 'total structure of document' should be 'overall structure of the document'. 'summary of the sentence as' is a fragment; use 'summary of it' or 'summary of the document'. Suggestion: Use gerund phrase with 'by' to show method and correct noun phrases: 'by scanning a document' and 'overall structure of the document'.