Rules— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 문법과 어휘 선택, 문장 구조를 명확히 해야 합니다. 주어와 동사의 일치 문제가 있으며 ‘Mostly Commodore’와 같은 표현은 부자연스럽습니다. 질문에는 학교 규칙의 존재 여부와 간단한 설명으로 직접 답한 뒤, 반드시 연결어를 사용해 추가 정보를 덧붙이세요. 예를 들어 ‘Yes, students must wear a uniform every day’로 시작하고 그 이유와 결과(학생들이 규칙을 어기는 이유)를 구체적으로 설명하세요.

Example: Yes, students must wear a uniform every day at my school. However, the uniform is uncomfortable, so many students try to avoid following the rule by loosening it or not wearing certain items. As a result, teachers often remind students to comply with the dress code.

Suggestion: 답변이 직접적이지만 표현이 어색하고 문법 오류가 있습니다. ‘Uncomfortable and irritating’ 대신 자연스러운 표현을 사용하고 이유를 하나만 명확히 제시하세요. 연결어(For example, Therefore)를 사용해 논리를 전개하면 더 설득력 있습니다.

Example: No, I don't think more rules would help students. More regulations would make students feel restricted and stressed; for example, strict curfews could interfere with study groups and extracurricular activities.

Suggestion: 문장 구조와 동사 사용이 부정확합니다. ‘freshman of high school’ 대신 ‘a freshman in high school’가 자연스럽고, ‘she really her student who seek or had a problem’은 의미 불분명합니다. 선생님의 행동을 구체적으로 설명하는 문장을 하나 또는 두 개로 명확히 구성하세요.

Example: Yes. When I was a freshman in high school, I had a teacher who was very passionate. She always stayed after class to help students who had problems, and she gave personal advice to anyone struggling with homework.

Suggestion: 문법과 어휘 선택이 부정확하고 문장이 끝나지 않았습니다. ‘listing smartphone’가 무슨 뜻인지 명확히 해야 합니다(아마 ‘banning smartphones’). 주제문으로 시작해 이유와 구체적 예시를 제시하세요. 문장을 완결형으로 유지하고 연결어를 사용하세요.

Example: I prefer fewer rules at school. For instance, when I was a senior, teachers introduced many extra rules like banning smartphones during breaks, which felt excessive and reduced students' motivation to socialize or relax.

Suggestion: 의미 전달이 거의 되지 않으므로 문장 재구성이 필요합니다. ‘realistic’ 대신 ‘strict’ 또는 ‘disciplinarian’ 등의 적절한 형용사를 사용하고, ‘she bad’ 같은 비문을 고치세요. 선생님의 행동 예시(점수 감점, 엄격한 규칙 등)를 구체적으로 서술하면 좋습니다.

Example: Yes, I had a very strict teacher in high school. She enforced many rules, gave frequent detentions for late homework, and expected complete silence during class, which made the atmosphere tense.

Suggestion: 의견은 분명하지만 어법과 문장 연결이 부자연스럽습니다. ‘No rules will make schools atmosphere distracted’ 대신 ‘A lack of rules would make the school environment chaotic’처럼 자연스럽게 표현하세요. 균형 잡힌 이유(규칙의 필요성과 과도한 규칙의 문제)를 두 문장으로 명확히 제시하세요.

Example: I wouldn't want to work in a rule-free school because a lack of rules would make the environment chaotic and distract students. However, I believe some reasonable rules are necessary to maintain order and support learning, while excessive rules can be counterproductive.

× The Mostly Commodore is wearing a school uniform every day.

✓ Most students wear a school uniform every day.

Use 'Most students' instead of 'The Mostly Commodore'; 'Most' is a quantifier and 'students' is plural. Also use simple present 'wear' for habitual action. Keep article 'a' before 'school uniform' because it is a singular count noun. Suggestion: say 'Most students wear a school uniform every day.'

× It is so uncomfortable that there are many students who don't follow the rules.

✓ It is so uncomfortable that many students don't follow the rules.

Redundant 'there are' is unnecessary and can make agreement awkward. Removing 'there are' makes subject 'many students' directly linked to verb 'don't follow'. Use contraction 'don't' appropriately. Suggestion: 'It is so uncomfortable that many students don't follow the rules.'

× MMM I don't think that because more rules make students feel uncomfortable and irritating.

✓ I don't think so because more rules make students feel uncomfortable and irritated.

Use 'I don't think so' to respond to the preceding question. 'Make students feel irritating' is incorrect: 'irritating' describes a cause, 'irritated' describes students' feelings. Use past participle/adjective 'irritated'. Suggestion: 'I don't think so because more rules make students feel uncomfortable and irritated.'

× Yes, when I was a freshman of high school, the teacher was really passionate and she really her student who seek or had a problem.

✓ Yes, when I was a high school freshman, the teacher was really passionate and she really helped students who sought or had a problem.

Use 'a high school freshman' or 'a freshman in high school' for natural phrasing. The verb 'helped' is needed; 'help' with past tense requires 'helped'. 'Seek' should be past tense 'sought' to match 'when I was'. Also use 'students' plural and clear relative clause 'students who sought help or had a problem.' Suggestion: 'Yes, when I was a high school freshman, the teacher was really passionate and she really helped students who sought help or had a problem.'

× I don't prefer the more rules in school because when I was a senior in high school the teacher made a lot of rules over the basic rules such as listing smartphone.

✓ I don't prefer more rules in school because when I was a senior in high school the teacher made many extra rules beyond the basic ones, such as banning smartphones.

Do not use 'the' before 'more rules' here. Use 'many extra rules' or 'more rules'. 'Made a lot of rules over the basic rules' is awkward; use 'extra rules beyond the basic ones'. 'Listing smartphone' is incorrect; likely intended 'banning smartphones'. Use plural 'smartphones'. Suggestion: 'I don't prefer more rules in school because when I was a senior in high school the teacher made many extra rules beyond the basic ones, such as banning smartphones.'

× Yes, as I mentioned before, the high school teacher was realistic. Even her subject is rules. She was really strict and she bad.

✓ Yes, as I mentioned before, the high school teacher was strict. Even her subject classes focused on rules. She was really strict and tough.

'Realistic' is the wrong adjective for describing a strict teacher; use 'strict' or 'tough'. 'Even her subject is rules' is ungrammatical; clarify with 'her classes focused on rules' or 'she emphasized rules in her subject'. 'She bad' is incomplete; use adjective 'tough' or 'strict'. Suggestion: 'Yes, as I mentioned before, the high school teacher was strict. Her classes focused on rules. She was really strict and tough.'

× No rules will make schools atmosphere distracted.

✓ No rules will make the school atmosphere chaotic.

Use 'the school atmosphere' with definite article. 'Distracted' describes people, not atmosphere; use 'chaotic' or 'distracting'. Suggestion: 'No rules will make the school atmosphere chaotic.'

× So I think rules are needed, but too much rules are bad.

✓ So I think rules are needed, but too many rules are bad.

Use 'many' with countable plural nouns: 'too many rules', not 'too much rules'. 'Too much' is for uncountable nouns. Suggestion: 'So I think rules are needed, but too many rules are bad.'