Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Keep your answer concise with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add a brief frequency detail. Use linking words to connect ideas. Also correct small grammar issues (e.g., "when I receive my salary", remove duplicated phrase).

Example: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes. I usually buy a new pair once every few months when I receive my salary, and I feel very happy if I can find a pair I really like.

Suggestion: Answer directly and use correct tense (e.g., "I have never bought"). Provide one or two brief reasons linked with connectors and give a short example. Avoid wordy or unclear phrases like "the quantity" for shoes.

Example: No, I have never bought shoes online because I prefer to try them on in person to check the fit and quality. For example, I once returned a pair bought online because they were too small, so I like to avoid that risk.

Suggestion: Start with a clear estimate or range, then briefly explain why it varies using linking words. Be specific about amounts and simplify the explanation (e.g., "I usually spend around...").

Example: I usually spend about $40 to $80 on a pair of shoes, but it depends on my budget. For example, if I have extra money after paying for food and allowance, I might buy a more expensive pair.

Suggestion: Give a clear preference or say you like both, then explain with specific situations using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., "for me", "I prefer fashionable shoes for events"). Finish the sentence completely and avoid vague endings.

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes for work because I stand a lot, but I choose fashionable shoes for social events like parties or graduations. For instance, I wear sneakers at work and dress shoes when I attend celebrations.

× Yeah, I like buying shoes especially when I receive the salary and go into the mall to buy new shoes and very happy when I get when I get my dream shoes.

✓ Yeah, I like buying shoes, especially when I receive my salary and go to the mall to buy new shoes; I am very happy when I get my dream shoes.

The sentence has tense and state problems. 'Receive the salary' should be 'receive my salary' (article/possessive) and 'go into the mall' is more naturally 'go to the mall'. The clause 'and very happy' lacks a verb and should be 'I am very happy'. Also duplicate phrase 'when I get when I get' is a repetition error. Use present tense simple for habitual actions and a linking verb 'am' for the emotional state. Suggestion: keep consistent simple present for habits and include necessary verbs and possessives.

× Now I never bought shoes online because I want to buy personally to check the price, quality and the quantity, especially for the size.

✓ I have never bought shoes online because I want to buy them in person to check the price, quality and quantity, especially the size.

The time expression 'now' conflicts with simple past 'bought'. For life experience up to now, use present perfect: 'have never bought'. 'Buy personally' is unnatural; use 'buy them in person'. 'The quantity' is unnecessary; use 'quantity' or omit. Also include object 'them' after 'buy'. Keep tense consistent: present perfect for experience, present simple for preferences.

× Well I prepare the money amount. It depends on my budget because I need to divide it my daily use and especially for the food, allowance, etc.

✓ Well, I set aside an amount of money. It depends on my budget because I need to divide it for my daily expenses, especially for food and allowance.

The original has awkward phrasing and missing prepositions. 'Prepare the money amount' is ungrammatical; more natural is 'set aside an amount of money' or 'prepare an amount of money'. 'Divide it my daily use' needs the preposition 'for' and 'daily use' should be 'daily expenses'. 'The food, allowance' needs parallel structure: 'food and allowance'. Maintain clear noun phrases and correct prepositions.

× Well in my side I prepare the shows for fashionable when I go outside, meeting with my friends, party and graduation and I like also the comfortable shoes when I go into work because it's very important to

✓ Well, on my side, I prepare fashionable shoes for going out, meeting friends, parties and graduations, and I also like comfortable shoes when I go to work because they are very important.

Several preposition and word choice issues: 'in my side' should be 'on my side' or better 'personally' but corrected to 'on my side' to follow instruction list; 'prepare the shows' should be 'prepare/choose the shoes'; 'for fashionable' should be 'fashionable shoes for going out'; 'meeting with my friends' is better 'meeting friends'; 'party and graduation' pluralized to 'parties and graduations'; 'go into work' should be 'go to work'; sentence ended abruptly so added 'they are very important' to complete it. Use correct prepositions and complete clauses.