Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and organize your answer: give a clear topic sentence stating whether you like buying shoes and how often, then add one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid filler phrases and repetition, and correct basic grammar (e.g., "this shoe looks cool", "I feel like I want it").

Example: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, but only occasionally — perhaps once every few months. For example, I usually buy when I see a pair that looks stylish and suits my style, because I feel happier wearing something that boosts my confidence.

Suggestion: Start with a direct answer (Yes/No), then give clear reasons and specific details. Use correct collocations and grammar: "buy shoes online", "I rely on the Internet", "official stores". Remove unclear fragments and hesitations. Use a linking word to connect reason (e.g., 'because' or 'so').

Example: Yes, I often buy shoes online because I find the official stores and customer reviews there, so I feel more confident about the quality. For instance, I recently ordered trainers from a brand’s official website after reading positive reviews.

Suggestion: Give a clear number and a brief reason, avoiding fillers and repetition. Use simple, correct grammar: "I usually spend up to $50" or "I usually spend around $30–$50". If you add an exception, state it clearly with a linking phrase like 'although' or 'occasionally'.

Example: I usually spend up to about $50 on a pair of shoes because I’m on a tight budget. However, occasionally I’ll spend a little more for a special pair if it’s worth it.

Suggestion: Answer directly which you prefer and explain briefly with specific reasons. Correct grammar and word choice: 'fashionable and comfortable', 'suits me', 'makes me feel confident'. Avoid irrelevant or unclear words ('tattoos'). Use a linking word (e.g., 'because' or 'but') to show contrast.

Example: I prefer shoes that are both fashionable and comfortable because they suit my style and let me walk without pain. If I had to choose, I’d pick comfort first, because I wear shoes for long hours, but I also like them to look stylish.

× I like buying shoes but not that often just sometimes when I feel like oh this shoe is pretty or this shoe is look cool so I prefer to buy it when I want.

✓ I like buying shoes, but not that often. Sometimes when I think a shoe is pretty or looks cool, I prefer to buy it.

The sentence uses incorrect adjective/adverb forms: 'this shoe is look cool' is ungrammatical; 'look' should be the verb form 'looks' and 'is' is unnecessary. Also the sentence is run-on; splitting into shorter sentences improves clarity. Suggestion: use 'looks cool' for third-person singular and remove redundant 'is'.

× I like feel very wanted so I just buy but some I don't usually buy shoes.

✓ I feel strongly that I want them, so I sometimes buy them, but other times I don't usually buy shoes.

There are singular/plural mismatches and awkward phrasing: 'I like feel very wanted' is ungrammatical and 'some I don't usually buy shoes' mixes singular/plural. Correct by using 'them' for shoes (plural) and 'sometimes' for frequency. Suggestion: keep noun/pronoun number consistent and use natural collocations: 'I feel like I want them' or 'I sometimes buy them'.

× Every time that I bought a new shoes by myself, I usually, uh, bought it from online or Internet because I real liable with Internet rather than in the shop.

✓ Every time I bought new shoes by myself, I usually bought them online because I feel more comfortable using the Internet than shopping in a store.

Problems include article and number ('a new shoes' should be 'new shoes'), pronoun agreement ('it' -> 'them'), and incorrect adjective 'real liable' which seems to mean 'more reliable' or 'more comfortable'. Use past simple consistently. Suggestion: use 'bought them online' and 'feel more comfortable using the Internet'.

× Because in Internet we can find the official stores.

✓ Because on the Internet we can find the official stores.

Preposition with 'Internet' should be 'on' not 'in'. Suggestion: use 'on the Internet' or 'online'.

× Maximum is around, uh, $50.00 because I don't have that much money, so I just like live with like not uh, more than $50.00, but sometimes it's more than a little bit, but it's just in case.

✓ I usually spend around $50 because I don't have that much money, so I try not to spend more than $50, although sometimes I spend a little more just in case.

Tense and phrasing are awkward: 'Maximum is around' lacks subject; 'I just like live with like not' is ungrammatical. Use present simple 'I usually spend' for habitual action and clear phrasing 'I try not to spend more than $50'. Suggestion: state habits with present simple and simplify phrases like 'a little more' and 'just in case'.

× I prefer a choose that fashionable and also comfortable for me, that suits for me and make me feel cooler or it's look like a beautiful girl.

✓ I prefer to choose shoes that are fashionable and comfortable for me, that suit me and make me feel cooler or look like a pretty girl.

Errors: 'a choose' should be 'to choose'; adjective agreement 'that fashionable and also comfortable' needs 'that are'; 'suits for me' should be 'suit me'; 'it's look like' is incorrect, use 'look like'. Suggestion: use infinitive 'to choose', include 'are' for plural 'shoes', and use 'look like a pretty girl' for natural phrasing.

× So I will prefer to buy some kind of tattoos but if I choose I would choose fashionable.

✓ So I would prefer to buy fashionable shoes; if I had to choose, I would choose fashionable ones.

Meaning is unclear and words are mixed up: 'buy some kind of tattoos' is irrelevant and likely incorrect word choice; modal verbs mix 'will prefer' and 'would choose'. Use conditional 'would prefer' and 'would choose' for hypothetical choice and 'fashionable ones' to refer to shoes. Suggestion: avoid incorrect vocabulary and keep modal usage consistent.