Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Bạn trả lời đã trực tiếp nhưng câu không tự nhiên và có lỗi ngữ pháp/ý nghĩa ("buy my store"). Cần mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sửa lỗi từ vựng, và tránh dài dòng không cần thiết. Thêm thông tin cụ thể về tần suất (ví dụ: "once a year") và lý do ngắn gọn. Hãy dùng tối đa 3–4 câu, nối bằng liên từ khi cần.

Example: Yes, I do like buying shoes. I usually buy new shoes about once a year because I am a student and have a limited budget. However, if I find a good sale I might buy an extra pair. Overall, I shop for shoes infrequently to save money.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và có ngữ pháp không đúng (lặp từ, "night suit" không phù hợp cho giày, mệnh đề thời gian mơ hồ). Nên trả lời trực tiếp, nêu rõ bạn đã mua gì và mô tả trải nghiệm bằng cấu trúc rõ ràng với liên từ hoặc trạng từ (e.g., "and", "then"). Sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp ("pair of shoes", "delivery").

Example: Yes, I have bought shoes online. I once ordered a pair of sneakers from an international website, and after a few days the delivery arrived. The shoes fit well and the shopping process was very convenient, so I was satisfied.

Suggestion: Bạn trả lời cụ thể nhưng cần chính xác hơn về đơn vị và làm câu gọn gàng. Tránh tiếng lắp ("Um") và cải thiện cấu trúc: dùng câu chủ đề rồi giải thích lý do. Có thể so sánh hoặc nêu khoảng giá nếu cần. Giữ trong 2–3 câu.

Example: I usually spend about 100,000 Vietnamese dong on a pair of shoes. Because I am a high school student with a limited budget, that price feels quite expensive for me, so I tend to choose cheaper options.

Suggestion: Ý chính rõ ràng nhưng câu lặp và cấu trúc yếu ("for several reasons" nhưng chỉ nêu một lý do, 'it's very beautiful' không cụ thể). Hãy nêu rõ ưu tiên, cung cấp 1–2 lý do cụ thể với liên từ (e.g., "because", "so") và tránh dùng câu mơ hồ như "show up".

Example: I prefer fashionable shoes because I like how they look and they help me express my personal style. Also, wearing stylish shoes makes me feel more confident when I meet my friends, although I still try to balance style with comfort.

× I buy my store once a year, however I don't have too much money so I don't buy it very often.

✓ I buy from my favorite store once a year; however, I don't have much money so I don't buy shoes very often.

Original sentence uses incorrect noun phrases: 'I buy my store' is wrong — you buy from a store, not the store itself. 'Too much money' is acceptable but 'too much' with a negative sense is unnatural here; use 'much money' in negative sentences. Also 'it' is vague; replace with 'shoes'. Suggestion: use correct verb-object structure ('buy from a store'), use 'much' with negatives, and refer clearly to the item ('shoes').

× If my memory serves me right, yes I have. I I bought a night suit on shopping and after a while I wait. I feel very comfortable and convenient.

✓ If my memory serves me right, yes I have. I bought a night suit while shopping and after a while I waited. I felt very comfortable and it was convenient.

Mistakes: 'on shopping' is incorrect preposition and phrase; use 'while shopping' or 'when shopping' (preposition error -> type 11 but also phrasing). 'I wait' is present tense; should be past 'I waited' to match 'bought'. 'I feel' should agree with past context ('I felt'). 'Convenient' describes situations, not feelings; say 'it was convenient'. Suggestions: use 'while shopping', keep consistent past tense for completed actions, and attribute 'convenient' to the purchase or experience ('it was convenient').

× I usually spend about 100,000 Vietnamese though. Um I think it's quite expensive for me because I am a high school student so I don't have too much money to buy expensive shoes.

✓ I usually spend about 100,000 Vietnamese dong. I think that's quite expensive for me because I am a high school student, so I don't have much money to buy expensive shoes.

Issues: missing currency unit 'dong' (clarity). 'Too much money' is less natural in negative sentences; use 'much money'. Also split into clearer sentences and replace 'though. Um' with smoother phrasing. Suggestion: use 'much' with negatives and include proper currency term; keep sentence structure concise for clarity.

× Well, I prefer fashionable shoes for several reasons, although my reason is that it's very beautiful and I can show up with my friends.

✓ Well, I prefer fashionable shoes for several reasons; one reason is that they are very attractive and I can show them off to my friends.

Problems: pronoun agreement and reference: 'it's very beautiful' incorrectly uses singular pronoun for plural 'shoes' — use 'they are' or 'they're'. 'Show up with my friends' is incorrect collocation; 'show them off to my friends' expresses displaying shoes. Suggestion: match pronoun number to noun, use correct verb phrase 'show off' and preposition 'to' for audience.