Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct, concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Reduce hesitation words (uh, um) and correct grammar (use present simple or present continuous consistently). For example, say how often in clear terms (e.g. "I like buying shoes, but I only buy them during sales") and give a brief reason with a linking word (because/so), not a long explanation.

Example: I like buying shoes, but I usually only do so during sales because I’m on a tight budget. For instance, I wait for seasonal discounts and buy a pair every few months when the price is reduced.

Suggestion: Answer directly and use correct tense and concise supporting detail. Use a linking word to connect reason and example (for example, so). Remove filler words and maintain clear sequence (I choose, then I order).

Example: Yes, I have. I buy shoes online when I don’t have time to visit shops, because it’s faster and I can compare styles and prices. For example, I usually select a few options and read reviews before placing an order.

Suggestion: Be precise and avoid vague phrases like "depends on my mood" unless you explain. Start with a clear topic sentence stating a typical amount, then give one specific condition that might change it, using linking words (however, if). Avoid fillers and grammar errors (It depends, not It's depends).

Example: I usually spend around 2,000 Nepalese rupees on a pair of shoes. However, if I need higher quality or for a special event, I might pay more.

Suggestion: Give a clear preference first, then briefly explain with a specific reason and example. Use correct grammar (It depends, I usually buy comfortable shoes). Replace vague phrases like "gives us the comfort zone" with precise descriptions (they are easier to walk in/less tiring). Limit to two sentences.

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes because they’re easier to walk in and don’t hurt my feet. If I’m attending a formal event where appearance matters, I might choose a more fashionable pair instead.

× Want to talk about this question.

✓ I want to talk about this question.

The original sentence lacks a subject; this is a sentence structure error (type 26). Add the subject 'I' to form a complete sentence: 'I want to talk about this question.' This makes it clear who wants to speak.

× Yes, of course I do like buying shoes whenever there is some discount and sales because my financial condition was not good to uh, buying shoes from exact amount of the service.

✓ Yes, of course I like buying shoes whenever there are discounts and sales because my financial condition is not good enough to buy shoes at full price.

Multiple present tense and agreement issues (type 6 and 1). Use simple present 'I like' rather than 'do like' for natural speech, plural 'discounts and sales' requires 'are'. 'Was not good' should be present 'is not good' to match current habitual action. Replace incorrect verb form 'buying shoes from exact amount of the service' with 'buy shoes at full price' for clear meaning.

× Yes, of course, I bought the shoes on online when I don't have a time to look at the physical store and I uh, I ordered the uh, shoes from online after choosing one better one.

✓ Yes, of course. I bought shoes online when I didn't have time to visit physical stores, and I ordered them online after choosing the best one.

This sentence contains tense inconsistency and awkward structure (type 26 and 5/6). Use past tense 'bought' and 'didn't have' to match the past action. Use 'shoes online' (not 'on online') and 'visit physical stores' for natural phrasing. Replace 'from online' with 'online' and 'choosing one better one' with 'choosing the best one'.

× It's depends on my mood and the shoes quality also.

✓ It depends on my mood and the quality of the shoes as well.

This is an article and verb form issue (type 22 and 6). Use 'It depends' (not 'It's depends') and the noun phrase 'the quality of the shoes' rather than 'the shoes quality' for natural word order.

× But uh, usually I spend money on shoes uh, like uh, uh, 2000 Nepali rupees.

✓ But usually I spend about 2000 Nepali rupees on shoes.

Awkward word order and filler words make the sentence unclear (type 26). Place the amount near the verb and use 'about' for approximation. Remove unnecessary fillers 'uh' for clarity.

× Well, to talk about this question, it's depends on the race or the events I had to attend.

✓ Well, to answer this question, it depends on the race or the events I have to attend.

Verb tense and form errors (type 6). Use 'it depends' (not 'it's depends') and present perfect/simple present 'I have to attend' to indicate planned events. 'To talk about' is better as 'to answer' in this context.

× Uh, uh, by the way, I usually, uh, bought the shoes, uh, comfortable one because it gives us the comfort zone and feels good.

✓ By the way, I usually buy comfortable shoes because they are comfortable and feel good.

Tense and agreement errors (type 5 and 27). 'Usually' requires present simple 'buy' not past 'bought'. Use plural/pronoun agreement: 'comfortable shoes' and 'they are' rather than 'the shoes, comfortable one'. Avoid 'gives us the comfort zone'—use 'are comfortable' or 'provide comfort'.