Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, um), and limit to 2–4 sentences. Use a linking phrase to add specific detail (e.g., “for example” → give one concrete example) and correct small grammar errors (e.g., “they are versatile” → “that are versatile”).

Example: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, but only a few times a year. For example, I usually buy new shoes twice a year—one pair for work and one casual pair—choosing styles that are versatile and comfortable so they match many outfits.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer then support with specific reasons and correct word choices. Avoid hesitation and incorrect phrases (e.g., “without living home” → “without leaving home”; “compete brands” → “compare brands”; “buy by person” → “buy in person”). Use one linking word like “because” or “however.”

Example: Yes, I have bought shoes online, especially when I find a deal I can't get in stores. However, I prefer buying in person because I can try shoes on and compare brands and prices before I buy.

Suggestion: Give a clear numeric answer (use a standard currency) and explain briefly why. Remove vague or unclear phrases and fillers. Use correct collocations (e.g., “a pair of shoes,” “prefer quality over quantity”), and keep to 2–3 sentences.

Example: I usually spend about $100 on a pair of shoes. I prefer to invest a bit more in a quality pair rather than buy many cheap ones because they last longer and feel more comfortable.

Suggestion: Answer directly then give a concise reason and a brief balance statement. Fix awkward phrasing (e.g., “I should wear them for hours” → “I wear them for long periods”) and avoid unfinished sentences. Use linking words like “because” and “although.”

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes because I often wear them for long periods at work or events. Although I value comfort most, I also try to choose shoes that look stylish so I can feel confident.

× Yes, I really like buying shoes, but I wouldn't do it very often.

✓ Yes, I really like buying shoes, but I don't do it very often.

Subject-verb agreement and tense/modal misuse: 'wouldn't do' implies conditional or hypothetical, but speaker means a habitual action; use simple present 'don't do' for habits. Suggestion: Use simple present for routines (I don't do it very often).

× Sometimes, for example, twice a year, I uh, buy shoes uh, most of them when I need and I choose shoes that they are versatile and comfortable and I can work with different outfits.

✓ Sometimes, for example, twice a year, I buy shoes, mostly when I need them, and I choose shoes that are versatile and comfortable so I can wear them with different outfits.

Several issues: pronoun and plural reference, word choice and sentence structure. 'Most of them when I need' is unclear; use 'mostly when I need them' to match plural 'shoes'. Remove redundant 'they' before 'are'. Use 'wear them with' instead of 'work with'. Suggestion: Keep pronouns consistent with nouns and simplify clause order: 'I buy shoes mostly when I need them.'

× Uh, yes, probably, especially when I need shoes and I I find great deal that I cannot find in stores.

✓ Uh, yes, probably, especially when I need shoes and I find a great deal that I cannot find in stores.

Subject-verb agreement and article use: 'find great deal' needs an article 'a' before 'great deal'. Also duplicate 'I' removed. Suggestion: Use 'a great deal' and check for repeated words.

× It's a good way because without living home you can buy and compete brands and umm prices.

✓ It's a good way because, without leaving home, you can buy and compare brands and prices.

Word choice errors: 'living home' should be 'leaving home'; 'compete brands and prices' should be 'compare brands and prices'. Prepositional phrasing corrected. Suggestion: Use 'leave' for departing and 'compare' for evaluating options.

× But personally I prefer to buy by person.

✓ But personally I prefer to buy in person.

Incorrect prepositional phrase/pronoun: 'by person' is incorrect; use the idiom 'in person' to mean physically visiting a store. Suggestion: Use fixed expressions like 'in person' rather than literal word order.

× I usually spend around 2,000,000 tomorrow and umm.

✓ I usually spend around 2,000,000 tomans.

Tense and time-word mismatch and unclear currency reference: 'usually' requires a habitual amount; 'tomorrow' conflicts with 'usually'. Likely intended currency unit 'tomans' rather than 'tomorrow'. Suggestion: Use consistent time expressions: 'I usually spend around 2,000,000 tomans.' If referring to a future amount, use 'I will spend' and 'tomorrow'.

× I prefer to have an adorable shoes rather than the shoes I should wear.

✓ I prefer to have adorable shoes rather than shoes I have to wear.

Article and adjective-noun agreement: 'an adorable shoes' mixes singular article 'an' with plural 'shoes'; remove the article or make noun singular. Also 'should wear' is awkward; 'have to wear' expresses obligation. Suggestion: Match article to noun number: 'an adorable shoe' or 'adorable shoes'; and use 'have to' for necessity.

× I would quickly and I feel I don't want to pair a little more to have quality.

✓ I would rather not; I feel I don't want to pay a little more to get better quality.

Sentence structure and word choice errors: 'would quickly' is incorrect collocation; likely 'would rather not'. 'pair' is wrong word for 'pay'; 'have quality' should be 'get better quality'. Suggestion: Use correct collocations: 'would rather not', 'pay a little more', 'get better quality'.

× Actually I prefer comfortable shoes because I should wear them for hours and parties or at work, but I prefer to be stylish at the same time.

✓ Actually, I prefer comfortable shoes because I have to wear them for hours at parties or at work, but I prefer to be stylish at the same time.

Modal verb and preposition use: 'should wear' suggests obligation but context needs 'have to wear' for necessity; 'for hours and parties or at work' has misplaced prepositions—use 'for hours at parties or at work'. Suggestion: Use 'have to' for necessity and place time/location phrases clearly: 'for hours at parties or at work'.

× But I don't think they should be fashionable at.

✓ But I don't think they need to be fashionable.

Sentence structure and extraneous preposition: ending with 'at' is incorrect. 'Should be fashionable' implies obligation; 'need to be' fits better for preference. Suggestion: Remove unnecessary prepositions and choose appropriate modal verb for preference or necessity.