Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise and avoid hesitations and repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail about frequency. For example, state how often using natural phrasing and reduce fillers like “umm” and repeated words.

Example: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes. I usually buy new pairs about twice a year, mainly at the start of each season when I need to refresh my wardrobe.

Suggestion: Give a complete, coherent answer with linking words and specific details. Remove filler sounds and finish your sentence. Explain why you prefer online shopping and describe one step you take (e.g., compare prices or read reviews).

Example: Yes, I have. I find online shopping more convenient and often cheaper; for example, I compare prices across several stores and read customer reviews before I decide which pair to buy.

Suggestion: Be realistic and clear with figures and avoid rambling. Start with a direct statement about your budget and then explain why you spend that amount (comfort, style). If the number was a mistake, correct it. Keep it to two sentences max.

Example: As a student I usually spend around $50 to $100 on a pair of shoes, because I want something comfortable yet reasonably fashionable for everyday use.

Suggestion: Answer directly and give a clear reason with one supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid repetitions and hesitations. State your preference (balance or one over the other) and explain with an example or consequence.

Example: I try to strike a balance between fashion and comfort because I want shoes that look good but that I can also wear all day; for instance, I choose stylish sneakers that have good cushioning so I can be comfortable at school.

× Personally I'm keen on I'm quite keen on footwear so I enjoy buying shoes but umm I spend umm 2 time for buying shoes every year.

✓ Personally, I'm quite keen on footwear, so I enjoy buying shoes, but I buy shoes about twice a year.

The original sentence has redundancy and incorrect expression '2 time for buying shoes' which should be 'twice a year'. Use simple present 'I buy' for habitual actions. Remove repeated phrases and filler words. Suggestion: say 'I buy shoes about twice a year.'

× Yes, I have uh, I find it more convenient and uh spending less. MMM. I usually compare the price between uh, many shop uh, and uh. Finally, I choose the.

✓ Yes, I have. I find it more convenient and less expensive. I usually compare prices between many shops, and finally I choose one.

Mixed and incomplete verb forms: 'spending less' is incorrect; use adjective phrase 'less expensive' or 'cheaper'. 'Compare the price between' should be 'compare prices between shops' and 'Finally, I choose the' is incomplete; add 'one'. Use consistent present simple for habitual actions.

× Well I'm a student but I'm also keen on footwear so I usually spend about $500,000 for a pair of shoes to be to have a comfortable and fashionable ones and and two.

✓ Well, I'm a student, but I'm also keen on footwear, so I usually spend about $500,000 on a pair of shoes to have comfortable and fashionable ones.

Use 'spend on' not 'spend for'. Remove extra words 'to be to' and duplicate 'and and two'. 'A pair' is singular so 'ones' is redundant; keep 'comfortable and fashionable ones' or better 'comfortable and fashionable shoes'. Ensure noun-number agreement and correct preposition.

× Ideally, I strike to strike a balance between them. Uh, why? Why, uh, a fashionable appeal is important to me. Uh, comfortable, uh, more. Why?

✓ Ideally, I try to strike a balance between them. A fashionable appearance is important to me, but comfort matters more.

Incorrect verb phrase 'strike to strike' should be 'try to strike'. 'Fashionable appeal' is awkward; 'fashionable appearance' or 'style' is better. 'Comfortable, uh, more' is ungrammatical; express contrast with 'but comfort matters more.' Use clear clauses and correct comparative structure.