Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and give concise specific frequency. Use linking words to connect occasion and types of shoes. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I really enjoy buying shoes. I usually buy a new pair several times a year, especially for special occasions like weddings or birthdays. I also like to shop for different types, such as sneakers for daily wear and formal shoes for events.

Suggestion: Start with a clear yes/no and give a concise reason using linking words (because/so). Reduce hesitations and name specific websites or apps for precision. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, I often buy shoes online because my schedule is very hectic and I rarely have time to go shopping. So I usually order from well-known online stores such as Bata’s website or Amazon.

Suggestion: Give a clear typical amount or range and explain reason briefly and concretely. Avoid vague or confusing statements; correct grammar and units. Use linking words like because and for example.

Example: I usually spend a moderate amount, around ₹5,000 to ₹10,000 a year, because I train at a fitness center and need several good-quality pairs of trainers. For example, last year I spent about ₹8,000 on three pairs of running shoes.

Suggestion: Give a direct preference sentence, then briefly justify with specific reasons and an example. Use linking words such as because and for instance. Avoid repetition and hesitations.

Example: I prefer shoes that balance fashion and comfort because I want to look good without sacrificing support. For instance, I often choose stylish sneakers that provide cushioning for daily walking and still match my outfits.

× I am very keen to buy new shoes.

✓ I am very keen to buy new shoes.

No change needed; sentence is acceptable. Keep article usage as plural 'new shoes' without article.

× It depends on the occasion like if the marriage marriage occasion coming and the birthday party coming, then I'm good go to buying a new shoes and as well as the shoes as a different categories like sneakers and other things.

✓ It depends on the occasion; for example, if a wedding or a birthday party is coming, then I'm happy to go and buy a new pair of shoes, and I also buy shoes from different categories like sneakers and others.

Multiple errors: 'marriage marriage occasion' is repetitive and non-native; use 'a wedding' (countable) instead. 'Birthday party coming' needs an article and verb 'is coming' or rephrase. 'I'm good go to buying a new shoes' has several issues: incorrect modal/structure and article. Correct structure: 'I'm happy to go and buy a new pair of shoes.' Use 'pair of shoes' for singular purchase. 'the shoes as a different categories' should be 'shoes from different categories' (preposition and plural agreement). Suggestions: use 'a/an' before singular countable nouns, match singular/plural, and reorder to 'go and buy' rather than 'go to buying.'

× Yeah, I would, I would say that yes is a big yes.

✓ Yes, I would say that is a big yes.

'Would' is repeated unnecessarily; reduplication is colloquial. Also 'yes is a big yes' is awkward; better: 'Yes, I would say that is a big yes.' Use single 'would' for polite hedging and correct clause order.

× I am very keen to buy new shoes.

✓ I am very keen to buy new shoes.

Sentence is acceptable; no article required before plural 'new shoes.' This suggestion is to confirm correct usage.

× I have no window of uh, time to buy, to go for in the market and buy new shoes.

✓ I have no time to go to the market and buy new shoes.

Original has redundant words 'window of time' (acceptable idiom but awkward here) and incorrect preposition/order 'go for in the market.' Correct: 'go to the market.' Also remove unnecessary repetition 'to buy, to go for in the market and buy.' Keep present simple 'have' because routine/habit.

× Yeah, mostly I, I bought shoes uh, it's on the online platforms because uh, I, I am very, my routine is very hectic.

✓ Yes, mostly I buy shoes on online platforms because my routine is very hectic.

Student used past 'bought' but context is habitual; use present simple 'buy.' Also remove 'it's' which is incorrect here. Use 'on online platforms' or 'through online platforms.' Keep tense consistent with habits.

× So I uh, usually buy buy shoes from the online platform, online platforms like Bata and your.

✓ I usually buy shoes from online platforms like Bata and others.

Remove repetition 'buy buy.' 'the online platform, online platforms' inconsistent; use plural 'online platforms.' 'your' is unclear—use 'others.' Suggest clarity by naming examples and using plural where general.

× I spend a lot of money on shoes because I'm a fitness center, so I always wanted a new pair of shoes to to be a professional in that particular field.

✓ I spend a lot of money on shoes because I go to a fitness center, so I always want a new pair of shoes to be professional in that field.

Errors: 'I'm a fitness center' wrongly identifies the speaker as a place; correct to 'I go to a fitness center' or 'I am a fitness instructor' if intended. Tense mismatch: 'I always wanted' should be present simple 'I always want' for a habitual desire. Remove repeated 'to.' Ensure subject and noun roles are correct.

× So it's like from today I would have bought like 20 shows, which has worked over ₹1,00,000.

✓ So far I have bought about 20 pairs, which have cost over ₹1,00,000.

Many errors: 'from today' should be 'so far' or 'to date.' 'would have bought' incorrect modal for factual past—use present perfect 'have bought.' '20 shows' mispronunciation of 'shoes'; use '20 pairs' (each purchase counts as a pair). 'which has worked over' wrong verb; use 'which have cost over.' Ensure subject-verb agreement for plural 'pairs' with 'have.'

× So I would be, uh, the fashionable guy as well as the comfort, so, uh, comfort glass.

✓ I would be a fashionable person as well as someone who values comfort.

Original is incoherent: 'comfort glass' makes no sense. Use clear noun phrases: 'a fashionable person' and 'someone who values comfort.' Maintain parallel structure with 'as well as.' Avoid filler words and unclear nouns.

× So I would be, uh, go for a, uh, comfort shoes as well as fashionable.

✓ So I would go for comfortable shoes as well as fashionable ones.

Use adjective 'comfortable' to modify 'shoes' and plural 'ones' to avoid repeating 'shoes.' 'Comfort shoes' is nonstandard; use 'comfortable shoes.' Use 'go for' + noun phrase.

× So is going hand in hand. So these shoes are going to hand in hand.

✓ They go hand in hand.

Original uses passive-like and ungrammatical phrases 'is going hand in hand' and 'going to hand in hand.' The correct idiom is 'go hand in hand.' Use simple present for a general truth.

× Like I like both fashionable as well as, uh, comfort.

✓ I like both fashionable and comfortable styles.

'Both fashionable as well as comfort' incorrectly mixes adjective and noun; make parallel by using adjectives 'fashionable' and 'comfortable' or nouns 'fashion' and 'comfort.' Ensure parallel structure.

× So that's why I love sneakers.

✓ So that's why I love sneakers.

No change needed; sentence is correct.