Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make your response more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (frequency and reason). Avoid redundancy and long runs. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to connect ideas. Also correct minor grammar (e.g., "prices increasing" → "rising prices").

Example: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes. I usually buy a new pair about once a month because I like trying different styles, but recently I’ve cut back because prices have been rising, so I only buy when I really need them.

Suggestion: Begin with a direct answer, then give one clear, specific example and a brief result. Reduce repetition and correct phrasing ("far way far way" → "far too small"). Use a linking word to show result (so, therefore).

Example: Yes, but only once. I ordered my usual size 39, but the shoes were far too small, so I returned them and haven’t felt confident buying shoes online since.

Suggestion: Give a clear estimate (a range or typical amount) and explain conditions briefly. Avoid unclear words and filler; choose precise vocabulary ("branded", "second-hand", "thrifted"). Remove confusing phrases and use linking words to clarify contrast (for example, however).

Example: It depends: I usually spend around $40–$80 on everyday shoes, but for branded pairs I might pay $100–$150. However, I often buy second-hand or thrifted shoes to save money, which lets me afford higher-quality brands occasionally.

Suggestion: Start with a concise personal preference, then add one specific reason and an example. Keep sentences short and avoid repetition ("prefer" used many times). Use linking words (but, when, because).

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes for everyday use because I walk a lot, but I keep a fashionable pair for special occasions. For example, I wear sneakers to work and dress shoes for parties when I won’t be walking much.

× I do like buying shoes quite often and it's my favorite piece of clothing to buy and I always look for shoes when I'm in a shopping center.

✓ I like buying shoes quite often; they're my favorite item of clothing to buy, and I always look for shoes when I'm in a shopping center.

The original used 'do like' which is acceptable for emphasis but sounds unnatural here; 'piece of clothing' is awkward for shoes so 'item of clothing' is better; use plural 'they're' to agree with 'shoes'. Combine clauses with appropriate punctuation for clarity.

× I buy shoes around once a month.

✓ I buy shoes about once a month.

Use 'about' rather than 'around' for frequency and keep present simple for habitual action; 'around once a month' is not incorrect but 'about once a month' is more natural.

× I try not to buy them as much as I used to because of the prices increasing.

✓ I try not to buy them as much as I used to because prices have increased.

Use present perfect 'have increased' to connect past price rises to the present; 'because of the prices increasing' is a noun phrase that is awkward here—rephrase to 'because prices have increased'.

× I've only bought shoes online once.

✓ I've only bought shoes online once.

The original sentence is grammatically acceptable (present perfect for life experience). No change needed.

× It was the quite bizarre experience because of how ridiculous the sizes were.

✓ It was quite a bizarre experience because of how ridiculous the sizes were.

Correct article placement: 'quite a bizarre experience' is the natural word order; 'the quite bizarre' is incorrect.

× I'm normally a size 39.

✓ I'm normally size 39.

Both forms are acceptable, but 'normally size 39' is slightly more natural; 'a size 39' is also correct—this is a minor stylistic preference rather than a strict grammar error.

× I bought a size 39 and it was far way far way too small for me so I didn't buy shoes online again.

✓ I bought size 39 and it was far, far too small for me, so I didn't buy shoes online again.

Remove extra article before sizes ('size 39' not 'a size 39' is acceptable both ways); 'far way far way' is a repetition and should be 'far, far'; add commas for clarity and correct coordination with 'so'.

× It seriously depends if it's a brand or not.

✓ It seriously depends on whether it's a brand or not.

Use 'depends on whether' rather than 'depends if' for standard formal English; 'seriously' is colloquial but acceptable.

× And I sometimes treat them as well which really cuts off from the money and I can buy brand shoes far away cheaper that way.

✓ I sometimes treat myself, which does reduce the money I have, and I can buy branded shoes much more cheaply that way.

'Treat them' is unclear—use 'treat myself' for the speaker; 'cuts off from the money' is ungrammatical—rephrase to 'reduces the money I have' or 'uses up my money'; 'brand shoes' should be 'branded shoes'; use comparative adverb 'more cheaply'.

× So I usually prefer them to thrift.

✓ So I usually prefer to buy second-hand items.

'Prefer them to thrift' is ungrammatical and unclear. Use 'prefer to buy second-hand items' or 'prefer thrift shopping' to convey meaning.

× But it's a hard it's a bit hard to follow the hegeon of the thrifting.

✓ But it's a bit hard to follow the etiquette of thrifting.

The original repeats 'it's a hard' and uses an unclear word 'hegeon'. Likely intended 'regimen' or 'etiquette'—use 'etiquette of thrifting' for clarity and correct the repetition.

× I think everyone should have at least one fashionable and one comfortable shoes.

✓ I think everyone should have at least one pair of fashionable shoes and one pair of comfortable shoes.

'One ... shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and needs 'pair' when counting; use 'one pair of ... shoes'.

× I prefer comfortable shoes on my daily life, but when I'm in a special occasion I prefer fashionable shoes.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes in my daily life, but on special occasions I prefer fashionable shoes.

Use 'in my daily life' not 'on'; 'on a special occasion' should be 'on special occasions' or 'for a special occasion' depending on meaning; pluralize for general statement.

× I sometimes wear fashionable shoes depending on my outfit to outside as well if I'm not going to walk as much as I usually do.

✓ I sometimes wear fashionable shoes depending on my outfit when I go out, if I'm not going to walk as much as usual.

'To outside' is incorrect—use 'when I go out' or 'outside'; 'as I usually do' can be shortened to 'as usual'; reorder for natural flow.