Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use linking words to add variety. Correct small grammatical errors and clarify color preference phrasing. Also keep answers under five sentences.

Example: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes; I usually purchase new pairs about every three months. Typically I prefer white or blue shoes, and sometimes I choose sporty or casual styles depending on the occasion.

Suggestion: Organize reasons clearly with linking words and correct grammar. Use specific examples (e.g., measurements, return policy) and avoid fragmented sentences. Keep it within five sentences.

Example: No, I haven’t bought shoes online because I’m unsure about my exact size, and I worry they might not fit. Therefore, I prefer trying shoes on in a shop so I can check comfort and fit. Also, colors sometimes look different online, which makes me hesitant to purchase without seeing them in person.

Suggestion: Be precise about currency and use clearer sentence structure. Start with a topic sentence stating the amount, then give two concise reasons with linking words. Avoid informal numerals and unclear phrasing.

Example: I usually spend around 300 dollars when I buy branded shoes. I invest in more expensive shoes because they are often more comfortable and better for my feet, and they tend to last longer than cheaper alternatives.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons and a linking word. Correct unclear expressions and numbers, and avoid irrelevant details. Keep it concise and natural-sounding.

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones, especially now that I’m 35. For example, I’m willing to pay more for shoes that provide good support and durability rather than choosing trendy but uncomfortable pairs.

× I usually buy every three months.

✓ I usually buy shoes every three months.

The original sentence is missing the object of the verb 'buy'. Add 'shoes' to make the sentence complete and clear. Ensure the present simple 'usually buy' is used for habitual action.

× I like to wear white with blue shoes and sometimes I I like to wear sporty shoes or casual.

✓ I like to wear white and blue shoes, and sometimes I like to wear sporty or casual shoes.

The sentence had duplicated 'I' and incorrect word order 'white with blue shoes'. Use 'white and blue shoes' to list colors. Also place 'sporty or casual' before 'shoes' for natural adjective order. Remove the extra 'I'.

× No I haven't because I'm not sure about my feet size and I'm afraid if I buy small or big sizes so I prefer to go to the shop and try it out myself then I can buy the one I like.

✓ No, I haven't because I'm not sure about my foot size and I'm afraid I might buy shoes that are too small or too big, so I prefer to go to the shop and try them on myself, then I can buy the ones I like.

Use 'foot size' (singular) instead of 'feet size'. Replace 'afraid if I buy' with 'afraid I might buy' to express possibility (modal). Use 'shoes that are too small or too big' for clarity. 'Try them on' is the correct phrasal verb for testing shoes. Use plural 'ones' to match 'shoes'.

× Another reason would be sometimes they design the. Color are not the same if I touch the choose myself.

✓ Another reason is that sometimes the design or color is not the same as it appears online when I see it in person.

Original had fragmented clause and wrong nouns ('choose' for 'shoe'). Use 'is that' to introduce the reason. 'Design or color is not the same' corrects subject-verb agreement and word choice. Replace 'if I touch the choose myself' with 'when I see it in person' to convey comparing online and real items.

× I usually spend around 300 every time I go to buy a new brand shoes and the reason why I buy expensive 1 is that I want to take shoes that are healthy and comfortable for my feet and also the one that can last longer.

✓ I usually spend around 300 every time I buy a new pair of shoes, and the reason I buy more expensive ones is that I want shoes that are healthy and comfortable for my feet and that will last longer.

Use 'a new pair of shoes' rather than 'a new brand shoes'. Use 'ones' to refer back to 'shoes'. 'Buy more expensive ones' is clearer. 'Want shoes that are healthy and comfortable for my feet and that will last longer' fixes word order and adds relative clause for durability.

× I would prefer the comfortable shoes especially I'm getting older right now 35 so I would rather choose and buy more expensive fuse than just buying 21.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes, especially now that I'm 35 and getting older, so I would rather choose and buy more expensive ones than just buying cheap ones.

Use 'prefer' instead of 'would prefer' for a general preference; both are acceptable but present simple is natural. Insert 'now that' to connect age and reasoning. Replace 'fuse' and '21' (typos) with 'ones' and 'cheap ones' to convey contrast. Ensure adjective order and comparatives are clear.