Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence then add one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Be more specific about frequency (e.g., once a year, every few months) and give a brief reason. Avoid redundancy and keep it under five sentences.

Example: Yes, I like buying shoes, but I don’t do it very often. In fact, I only buy new pairs about once a year because most of my shoes are gifts from my sisters and I prefer to replace items only when they wear out.

Suggestion: Open with a direct statement, then use linking words to list specific points about the purchase (brand, fit, comfort, price). Be careful with grammar (singular/plural) and avoid repeating obvious ideas. Keep it concise and natural.

Example: Yes, I recently bought a pair of Anta shoes online. They are pink, very comfortable, and, most importantly, affordable and well made, so I was pleased with the purchase.

Suggestion: Give a clear numeric range in one fluent sentence, then briefly explain the reason using a linking word. Use consistent currency expression and avoid repetition. One or two sentences are enough.

Example: I usually spend around $100 to $150 on a pair of shoes because I try not to splurge; instead, I look for budget-friendly options that still feel comfortable.

Suggestion: Begin with a clear preference, then support it with two concise reasons using linking words. You can add a brief example to show awareness of current styles. Keep the answer natural and within three sentences.

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because they let me walk confidently and prevent pain. However, increasingly many designs combine comfort and style, so I often choose shoes that offer both.

× It's color pink, comfortable and what I like the most is that it is very affordable and of good quality.

✓ Its color is pink, it is comfortable, and what I like most is that it is very affordable and of good quality.

The sentence has several issues: use of 'It's' (it is) with 'color' requires the possessive adjective 'Its' (article error/possessive) and the verb 'is' after the noun to form a complete clause (sentence structure). The items in the list need parallel structure with full clauses or coordinated noun phrases; adding 'it is' before 'comfortable' keeps parallelism. 'What I like the most' is wordy; 'what I like most' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'Its color is pink, it is comfortable, and what I like most is that it is very affordable and of good quality.' This fixes possessive form, provides required verbs, and improves parallel structure.

× I usually spend about 100 to $150 on shoes.

✓ I usually spend about $100 to $150 on shoes.

The original mixes a bare numeral '100' with a dollar amount '$150' causing inconsistency. Use the dollar sign for both amounts or write both as numerals without symbols. Also 'about' with a range is acceptable; ensure both endpoints are formatted consistently. Suggestion: write '$100 to $150' or '100 to 150 dollars.'