Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you like buying shoes and how often you do so. Reduce filler words (uh, umm) and correct grammar (e.g., "it give me" → "it gives me"). Use one or two specific reasons and a brief example. Keep responses to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like "because" or "for example."

Example: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because it lets me find comfortable pairs for long work days and stylish ones for special occasions. For example, I recently bought a pair of loafers that I wear to the office and a pair of sandals for weekend parties.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer and provide specific reasons with correct grammar. Avoid confusing phrases like "now that I opened recently." Use linking words such as "because" and add a short example or consequence to clarify your point. Keep it to 1–2 sentences if possible.

Example: No, I haven't bought shoes online because I don't trust many new online shops; pictures on their sites can be misleading. For example, a friend once received a different colour and poor quality shoes than shown online.

Suggestion: Give a clear, quantified answer and correct grammar. State a typical range and explain why, using linking words like "because" or "so." Avoid contradictory or repetitive statements. Be specific about preferences and habits within 2–3 sentences.

Example: I usually spend around $15–20 on a pair of shoes because I prefer buying several affordable pairs rather than one expensive pair. This way I can have different styles for work and weekends without spending too much.

Suggestion: Start with a concise topic sentence stating your preference and then give specific reasons and an example. Remove fillers and correct grammar (e.g., "trainees" → "trainers" or "athletic shoes"). Use linking words like "because" and avoid repetition. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes because I spend most of the day on my feet at work. For example, I usually choose trainers or athletic shoes that provide cushioning and support so I can stand and walk without pain.

× I like buying shoes because, uh, it give me the opportunity to find the, uh, comfortable pair for my, for example, long day at work or umm, doing the casual or stylish pair for my occasion from for example a party and I buy shoes, umm.

✓ I like buying shoes because it gives me the opportunity to find a comfortable pair for, for example, a long day at work or a casual or stylish pair for an occasion such as a party, so I buy shoes.

The main issue is subject-verb agreement with the verb 'give': the subject 'it' requires the third person singular form 'gives' (Grammar Problem Type ID 2 and 27). There are also word order and article issues: 'the comfortable pair for my, for example, long day' is awkward; use 'a comfortable pair for, for example, a long day at work'. Remove unnecessary fillers and redundant phrases to improve clarity. Suggestions: use 'gives' for third-person singular, place articles 'a' before singular countable nouns, and simplify the list of purposes (e.g., 'for work' and 'for an occasion such as a party').

× Actually not, because I don't really trust online stores, especially those stores now that I opened recently.

✓ Actually not, because I don't really trust online stores, especially those that have opened recently.

The phrase 'those stores now that I opened recently' is ungrammatical and confuses the subject and object. Use 'those that have opened recently' to refer to stores which opened recently (relative clause with correct verb form). This fixes pronoun/reference and tense clarity (Grammar Problem Type ID 12 and 6). Suggestion: use 'those that' + present perfect 'have opened' to indicate recent opening relevant to now.

× There is no guarantee that they will give you the exact shoes that's put it on their profile.

✓ There is no guarantee that they will give you the exact shoes shown on their profile.

Problems: 'that's put it on their profile' mixes pronouns and verb forms incorrectly. Use 'shown on their profile' (past participle used adjectivally) or 'that are shown on their profile'. This corrects pronoun misuse and verb form errors (Grammar Problem Type ID 12 and 9). Suggestion: use 'shown' or 'that are shown' to describe the shoes on a profile.

× Actually, not that much. The maximum amount I spend it was on $20.00 because I don't think that it really worth that.

✓ Actually, not that much. The maximum I have spent was $20.00 because I don't think it's really worth more than that.

Errors: 'The maximum amount I spend it was on $20.00' has extra pronoun 'it' and incorrect tense; use present perfect 'I have spent' or simple past 'I spent'. Also use 'it's really worth' to contract 'it is' and add 'more than' to complete the comparison. These are tense, pronoun and sentence structure problems (Grammar Problem Type IDs 5, 12, and 26). Suggestion: remove redundant pronouns, use correct tense ('have spent'), and complete comparative phrases.

× I spent too much money on shoes and I prefer buying different kinds of shoes.

✓ I used to spend too much money on shoes, but now I prefer buying different kinds of shoes.

The original mixes past 'I spent' with present 'I prefer' without clear time framing. Use 'used to spend' to indicate a past habit contrasted with the present preference, or add a connector 'but now' for clarity. This corrects tense inconsistency (Grammar Problem Type ID 6 and 5). Suggestion: make time contrast explicit when switching tenses.

× I do prefer comfortable shoes because umm, on my feet most of the day for work, so I usually prefer like trainees or athletic shoes that let me stand on my feet or walk only without pain and without because it's more comfortable and practical.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because I am on my feet most of the day for work, so I usually choose trainers or athletic shoes that let me stand or walk without pain because they are more comfortable and practical.

Multiple issues: 'I do prefer' is acceptable for emphasis but redundancy 'prefer... prefer' removed. 'On my feet most of the day' needs subject and verb: 'I am on my feet'. 'Trainees' is incorrect; use 'trainers'. 'Let me stand on my feet or walk only without pain and without' is ungrammatical and redundant. Use 'let me stand or walk without pain'. Also 'it's more comfortable' should agree in number with 'they' (shoes), so use 'they are more comfortable'. Corrections address third person singular forms, pronoun agreement, word choice, and sentence structure (Grammar Problem Type IDs 2, 12, 26). Suggestion: ensure subjects and verbs are present, choose correct noun ('trainers'), and keep agreement between plural nouns and verbs/adjectives.