Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more direct and natural: start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, avoid repetition and fillers, and give one or two specific supporting details (frequency and reason). Use linking words for coherence.

Example: I don't really enjoy buying shoes; I usually keep the pairs I already have. For example, my favorite pair was a gift from my aunt who brought them from Hong Kong, so I prefer to wear those instead of shopping often.

Suggestion: Give a concise topic sentence, reduce hesitation and repetition, and add a short specific detail about the buying process or brand to make the answer more informative. Use a linking word to connect reasons.

Example: Yes, I have bought shoes online. I ordered a pink pair because they were trendy and fit well; moreover, the color makes me feel confident when I wear them.

Suggestion: Answer directly with an approximate amount or range, avoid vague phrases like "a few or a penny," and give a clear reason with one linking word. Keep it to two sentences maximum.

Example: I usually spend very little on shoes, around $10–$30 for casual pairs. I prefer to keep wearing my old shoes because they still feel comfortable and I don't like spending much on new ones.

Suggestion: Good structure and clear contrast. Improve by removing hesitation, using correct noun forms, and adding a short linking phrase to strengthen comparison. Limit to three sentences.

Example: It depends on the situation: generally I prefer comfortable shoes for everyday activities. However, for special occasions like a Christmas party I choose fashionable shoes to match my outfit.

× No, I don't like my shoes.

✓ No, I don't like these shoes.

The student used 'my shoes' which implies ownership but context suggests referring to the shoes being discussed; 'these shoes' or 'that pair' is clearer. Use demonstrative pronoun to specify which shoes are meant. Suggestion: Use 'these shoes' for nearby items or 'that pair of shoes' for a specific pair.

× I prefer my shoe that was given by my auntie.

✓ I prefer the shoes that were given to me by my auntie.

The student mixed singular 'shoe' with plural context and used passive incorrectly. If aunt gave a pair, use plural 'shoes' and plural verb 'were'. Also use 'given to me' for correct object. Suggestion: Match noun number with verb and use correct indirect object phrasing.

× It was uh, brought in Hong Kong and uh, she gave it to me when she went home here in the Philippines and, uh.

✓ They were brought in Hong Kong, and she gave them to me when she went back home to the Philippines.

Use plural 'they' for shoes and plural past 'were brought'. 'Went back home to the Philippines' is clearer than 'went home here in the Philippines'. Maintain consistent past tense and correct preposition 'to'. Suggestion: Keep pronouns and verbs agreeing in number and use 'to' for movement toward a place.

× Yes, I bought a shoes online because of uh, it's, it's a trend and I like how it fits my uh, my feet.

✓ Yes, I bought a pair of shoes online because it's a trend, and I like how they fit my feet.

Use 'a pair of shoes' instead of 'a shoes' (singular/plural mismatch). Replace 'it's, it's' with 'it's' and ensure pronoun agreement: 'they fit' for plural 'shoes'. Suggestion: Use 'pair' when referring to footwear and match plural verbs/pronouns.

× I like it because it's pink.

✓ I like them because they're pink.

Refers to shoes (plural) so use plural pronoun 'them' and plural verb form 'they're'. Suggestion: Ensure adjectives apply to correct noun and pronouns agree in number.

× I love color pink and it makes me comfortable whenever I wear it.

✓ I love the color pink, and it makes me comfortable whenever I wear them.

Add article 'the' before 'color pink'. 'Wear' refers to shoes (plural), so use plural pronoun 'them'. Suggestion: Use 'the color pink' and maintain pronoun number agreement.

× I only spend a few or a penny for my shoes because I don't really like spending that much.

✓ I only spend a little or a few pennies on shoes because I don't really like spending that much.

Mix of 'a few' and 'a penny' is incorrect. For uncountable/small amounts use 'a little' or for countable small amounts use 'a few pennies'. Use preposition 'on' for spending money. Suggestion: Choose correct quantifier and preposition: 'spend a little on shoes' or 'spend a few pennies on shoes'.

× I'd rather use my previous shoes than buy another one because it it feels the same wearing the pair of shoes that I wore last month.

✓ I'd rather use my previous shoes than buy another pair because they feel the same as the pair I wore last month.

Redundant 'it it' removed. 'Another one' mismatches earlier 'shoes'—use 'another pair'. Pronoun 'they' for shoes (plural). Use comparison 'feel the same as' and simplify phrase. Suggestion: Ensure consistent number (pair/they) and remove repetition.

× I think it depends on the situation.

✓ I think it depends on the situation.

This sentence is correct; no grammatical correction needed. Keep as is.

× Whenever I go to meet my friends or do some casual dates, I will wear something that is more comfortable for me.

✓ Whenever I meet my friends or go on casual dates, I wear something more comfortable.

Using 'will' is unnecessary for habitual actions; simple present expresses routines. 'Do some casual dates' is awkward; use 'go on casual dates'. Suggestion: Use simple present for habits and correct collocations.

× However, during events like uh, Christmas party, I prefer wearing a fashionable shoes that is.

✓ However, during events like a Christmas party, I prefer wearing fashionable shoes.

Use article 'a' before 'Christmas party'. 'A fashionable shoes' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a' and 'that is' which is unnecessary. Suggestion: Use correct article-noun agreement and omit redundant clause.