Singing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct small grammatical errors (e.g., 'real relax' -> 'really relax'). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details and a brief example. Avoid repeating the same idea.

Example: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and improves my mood. For example, I often sing while cooking or cleaning at home, which makes routine chores more enjoyable. Even without a perfect voice, singing lets me express my feelings.

Suggestion: Correct pronunciation and filler words, and watch sentence completeness (e.g., 'Ioneve' and ending 'a serious' unfinished). Use linking words to structure: state main point, then explain with specific example and result.

Example: No, I haven't had formal singing lessons. Instead, I've learned by listening to recordings and practicing songs repeatedly until I can follow the melody and lyrics accurately. As a result, I can sing a few songs confidently, although it's only a hobby.

Suggestion: Avoid repetition ('my my') and finish thoughts fully. Give one clear reason and a concise example. Use a linking phrase to connect the reason and example.

Example: I'd sing for my family and close friends because I feel comfortable with them. For example, at a small family gathering I would happily perform a song, knowing they would be supportive even if I made a mistake.

Suggestion: Finish sentences and avoid vague phrasing ('for the while and'). Use specific effects and a short concluding statement. Link cause and effect clearly.

Example: Absolutely. Singing together can lift people's spirits and create a friendly atmosphere. For example, group singing at a birthday party often makes guests more cheerful and engaged, helping them forget their worries for a while.

Suggestion: Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement: 'who has' -> 'who have'; plural/singular consistency), remove trailing fragments, and be specific about why live performances appeal to you. Use linking words and one concrete example.

Example: Yes, I do. I particularly enjoy singers with expressive voices because they convey emotion effectively. For example, when I'm relaxing I watch live performances on YouTube, which feel more natural and emotionally engaging than studio versions.

Suggestion: Clear, well-structured answer — just refine coherence and add a brief reason why breathing is important. Keep it concise and use linking words to show interest in future learning.

Example: No, I haven't taken formal classes because singing has been a casual hobby for me. I usually improve by practicing at home with recordings, but I would like to take lessons in the future to learn proper breathing and improve my vocal control.

× I usually sing when I'm alone or doing something around the house because it helps me real relax and lifts my mood.

✓ I usually sing when I'm alone or doing something around the house because it helps me really relax and lifts my mood.

The adverb 'real' is informal and incorrect here; the correct adverb is 'really' to modify the verb 'relax'. Use adverbs (often ending in -ly) to modify verbs. Suggestion: replace 'real' with 'really'.

× Not professionally, Ioneve never had formal vocal training, so most of what I know has come from listening to songs and singing along with them.

✓ Not professionally; I have never had formal vocal training, so most of what I know has come from listening to songs and singing along with them.

The original has a typo 'Ioneve' and punctuation issues. 'Ioneve' should be 'I have never' or contracted 'I've never'. Also 'Not professionally' is better joined with a semicolon or as part of the clause. Suggestion: fix the typo and adjust punctuation to make the sentence clear and grammatically correct.

× It's just a hobby for me rather than a serious.

✓ It's just a hobby for me rather than a serious one.

The noun 'one' is needed to complete the comparison after 'serious'. Without it, the sentence is missing a noun or pronoun. Suggestion: add 'one' to make the comparison complete.

× I'd probably sing for my family and my my close friends because I feel comfortable around them.

✓ I'd probably sing for my family and my close friends because I feel comfortable around them.

There is a duplicated word 'my my' which is a typographical error. Remove the duplicate to correct the pronoun phrase. Suggestion: proofread for repeated words.

× I wouldn't feel too embarrassed if I made a mistake because they know me well and would.

✓ I wouldn't feel too embarrassed if I made a mistake because they know me well and would understand.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'would', leaving the verb implicit. Add the verb 'understand' to complete the idea. Suggestion: include the expected verb after auxiliary verbs to avoid hanging clauses.

× It can also help people forget their worries for the while and.

✓ It can also help people forget their worries for a while.

The phrase 'for the while and' is ungrammatical and incomplete. Use 'for a while' to indicate a short period and remove the trailing 'and'. Suggestion: replace with 'for a while' and ensure no dangling conjunction remains.

× I especially enjoy listening to people who has expressive voices because I can really feel the emotion behind this song.

✓ I especially enjoy listening to people who have expressive voices because I can really feel the emotion behind the song.

The relative clause subject 'people' is plural, so the verb must be 'have' not 'has' (subject-verb agreement). Also 'this song' should be 'the song' to refer generally. Suggestion: use 'have' with plural 'people' and use appropriate article 'the'.

× For example, when I'm studying or relaxing, I sometimes listen to live performance on YouTube.

✓ For example, when I'm studying or relaxing, I sometimes listen to live performances on YouTube.

'Performance' should be plural 'performances' when speaking generally, and it needs the plural to agree with 'listen to'. Also 'live performance' without an article sounds unnatural here. Suggestion: use 'live performances'.

× I find them more natural and emotionally.

✓ I find them more natural and emotional.

'Emotionally' is an adverb and does not correctly modify 'them' (a noun); the adjective 'emotional' should be used. Suggestion: use adjective 'emotional' to describe 'them' (performances).

× No, I haven't. I've never taken a formal singing class because I've mainly treated singing as a casual hobby.

✓ No, I haven't. I've never taken a formal singing class because I have mainly treated singing as a casual hobby.

'I've' is acceptable, but using two contractions close together can be informal; however, grammatically it's not incorrect. Changed 'I've mainly treated' to 'I have mainly treated' for clarity and parallelism with the previous sentence. Suggestion: avoid excessive contractions in formal responses.

× However, I'd be interested in taking a class someday to learn proper breathing.

✓ However, I'd be interested in taking a class someday to learn proper breathing techniques.

The original is mostly correct but 'breathing' as a noun phrase is vague; adding 'techniques' clarifies the object of learning. Suggestion: use 'breathing techniques' for clarity.