Singing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason with a linking word. Avoid repetition and fix tense/word-order errors (e.g., “because when I was younger I attended music school, and being in a choir felt traumatic”).

Example: I enjoy listening to singing, but I don't like to sing myself. When I was younger I attended music school and had to join a choir, which felt stressful, so singing became uncomfortable for me.

Suggestion: Provide a direct answer then one clear supporting detail. Correct grammar and use linking words (e.g., “Yes. I learned basic singing in a choir because it was compulsory; for example, we had monthly sight‑singing tests.”). Avoid vague phrases like “sync in the right generation.”

Example: Yes. I learned singing at music school because choir participation was compulsory. For example, we had monthly tests where the teacher played notes and we had to match pitch and rhythm exactly.

Suggestion: Keep it natural and concise: start with a direct response, then give two specific reasons using linking words. Reduce repetition of “hate” and correct small grammar issues.

Example: No, I wouldn't want to sing for anyone. I'm uncomfortable with karaoke and public singing because I'm insecure about my voice, and I prefer playing instruments like the piano instead.

Suggestion: Answer directly and give one clear example with linking words. Clean up grammar and redundancies (e.g., “Yes, for some people. For example, my friend lights up when she sings at a restaurant with a band”).

Example: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to many people. For example, my friend who sings with a band at a restaurant always looks excited and more confident afterwards.

Suggestion: Be clearer and use concise comparisons. State your opinion, then explain with a specific reason and example. Avoid hesitations and unclear words like “ascertaining.”

Example: Yes, I enjoy listening to singing, but I prefer original performances to covers. Covers rarely match the energy of my favourite artists, so I find live performances by established singers more exciting.

Suggestion: Give a concise direct answer and one or two specific supporting details with clear linking words. Correct redundancies and awkward phrasing (e.g., “I don't recall it fondly”).

Example: Yes, I took singing classes at music school because they were mandatory. I didn't enjoy them and don't recall them fondly, but I accepted them as something necessary for my education.

× I like to hear other people sing, but personally I do not like singing and I think it is because I when I was younger I attended music school and being a part of a choir was necessary and it's some kind of a trauma for me.

✓ I like to hear other people sing, but personally I do not like singing because when I was younger I attended music school and being part of a choir was mandatory, so it became something of a trauma for me.

Error type 10: 'being a part of a choir was necessary' is awkward because 'being' here should integrate smoothly; use 'being part of a choir was mandatory' or rephrase to 'so it became something of a trauma' for natural English. Also remove the extra 'I' after 'because' and replace 'necessary' with 'mandatory' or restructure for clarity. Suggestion: keep past context 'when I was younger' and use clear connectors like 'because' and 'so'.

× Yes, attending a choir, well, it was necessary to pass like monthly exams when the teacher played you some notes and you have to sync in the right generation and everything.

✓ Yes, attending choir was required; we had monthly exams where the teacher played notes and we had to sing in the right register.

Error type 9: 'played you some notes' and 'sync in the right generation' misuse verbs and forms. Use passive/active correctly: 'the teacher played notes' or 'the teacher played you some notes' is informal; better: 'the teacher played notes' and 'we had to sing in the right register'. 'Sync' is incorrect here; use 'sing' and 'register' instead of 'generation'. Maintain past tense 'had to'.

× And I do not like, I didn't like it and it was not for me for sure.

✓ I do not like it; I didn't like it then, and it definitely wasn't for me.

Error type 6: Tense mixing and awkward repetition. Keep present and past contrasts clear: 'I do not like it' (present) and 'I didn't like it then' (past). Use 'wasn't' for natural negation and 'definitely' instead of 'for sure' for formality. Maintain verb presence and agreement.

× I do not like to sing for anyone. I'm a karaoke hater, I hate it and I don't like parties when I have to sing something.

✓ I do not like to sing for anyone. I'm a karaoke hater; I hate it and I don't like parties where I have to sing.

Error type 12: 'when I have to sing something' is awkward; use 'where' to refer to parties and drop 'something' which is vague. Also punctuation change (semicolon) improves clarity. Pronoun use 'it' refers to karaoke correctly; refine clause connectors.

× I'm really insecure about my voice when I'm singing and I better stick to playing piano or other instruments, but singing is a big no for me.

✓ I'm really insecure about my voice when I sing, and I'd rather stick to playing the piano or other instruments; singing is a big no for me.

Error type 6: Use simple present 'when I sing' rather than present continuous 'when I'm singing' for habitual statement. Use conditional preference 'I'd rather' instead of 'I better' and include article 'the piano' for general instrument playing. These changes match register and grammar.

× For some people, yes, for sure we can see singers that and people that turn this passion into whole career there for sure seems to be happy.

✓ For some people, yes. We can see singers and people who turn this passion into a whole career; they certainly seem to be happy.

Error type 13: Incorrect clause connectors and relative pronouns. Use 'who' for people, add 'a' before 'whole career', and restructure sentence to avoid 'there for sure seems to be'. Use adverb 'certainly' and proper punctuation to clarify meaning.

× And I have a friend, she's not a professional singer yet, but I see how happy she is when she's she has the opportunity to sing even at the restaurant with band.

✓ I have a friend who is not a professional singer yet, but I can see how happy she is when she has the opportunity to sing, even at a restaurant with a band.

Error type 12: Redundant pronoun 'she's she' is incorrect. Use 'who' to introduce relative clause, and fix articles: 'a restaurant' and 'a band'. Keep consistent verb 'has the opportunity'.

× I do, but I have to say that I'm not a big fan of people covering other artists.

✓ I do, but I have to say that I'm not a big fan of people covering other artists.

Error type 10: Original sentence is grammatically acceptable; no change needed. Provided here for completeness: 'covering' is correct as present participle after 'fan of'. No further action required.

× It's it's not, it's I. I don't want to say it's boring for me, but I don't think that is.

✓ It's not that I find it boring, but I don't think it is as satisfying as seeing original artists perform.

Error type 26: Repetition 'It's it's' and fragmented 'it's I' are unclear. Reconstruct sentence to express intended meaning: contrast personal taste without calling it 'boring' and compare satisfaction level. Use clear comparative structure.

× It is as much ascertaining as seeing actual artists like my favorite singers perform.

✓ It is not as gratifying as seeing actual artists, like my favorite singers, perform.

Error type 13: 'ascertaining' is incorrect adjective here; use 'gratifying' or 'satisfying'. Add negation 'not as' to form correct comparison and commas for clarity.

× Yes, as I previously said I did. It was mandatory at my music school and I do not recall it with a smile and warm in my heart unfortunately.

✓ Yes, as I previously said, I did. It was mandatory at my music school and unfortunately I do not remember it with a smile and warmth in my heart.

Error type 5: 'recall it with a smile and warm in my heart' mixes noun/adjective forms. Use 'remember' and noun 'warmth' and position 'unfortunately' before clause for natural flow. Maintain past reference 'was mandatory'.

× But I accepted it was a part of of things I had to do and not always have to do things that we we like.

✓ But I accepted that it was part of the things I had to do, and you don't always get to do only the things you like.

Error type 26: Repetition 'of of' and 'we we' and awkward phrasing. Insert 'that' after 'accepted', correct repetitions, and rephrase second clause to natural spoken English: 'you don't always get to do only the things you like'. Maintain past perspective where appropriate.