Singing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Clarify meaning and correct vocabulary, be concise and natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two clear supporting reasons. Avoid errors like 'seeing' instead of 'singing' and awkward phrasing. Use linking words (because, so) to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I enjoy singing, especially in the shower, because the bathroom’s acoustics make my voice sound fuller. For example, the tiles create an echo that makes singing more fun and relaxing.

Suggestion: Give a clear direct answer then explain briefly with logical reasons. Correct grammar (learned, singing, hobby, stressful, formal lessons). Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use linking words (however, because, so) to improve coherence.

Example: No, I have never had formal singing lessons. However, I treat singing as a hobby and practice at home because taking formal lessons would make me feel stressed. So I prefer casual practice rather than structured classes.

Suggestion: Answer directly (name the person) then give specific reasons and an example. Correct vocabulary (singing, out of tune, pitch) and simplify sentences. Use linking words (because, so) for coherence.

Example: I would most like to sing for my boyfriend because he is not very good at keeping the right pitch. For example, I sometimes sing with him at home to help him hear the correct notes, and he enjoys listening to my voice.

Suggestion: This answer is generally coherent and relevant. Improve by using smoother linking phrases and more precise vocabulary (express emotions, convey feelings, spread joy). Provide one concise example and avoid repetition.

Example: Absolutely. Singing lets performers express emotions and can spread joy to listeners. For example, I’ve noticed that church choirs use singing to help people feel calm and uplifted.

Suggestion: Be more precise and correct in grammar (singers, Western solo singers, gifted). State preferences clearly and support with a specific reason or example. Use linking words (for example, because) and avoid vague phrases like 'limited in the true singer.'

Example: Yes, I enjoy listening to certain singers, especially K-pop artists and Western soloists because they have powerful, distinctive voices. For example, I admire Adele for her emotional delivery and impressive vocal range.

Suggestion: Provide a direct answer, correct grammar (haven't taken, lessons), and give concise, logical reasons with linking words (because, so). Avoid repetition and long unclear sentences.

Example: No, I haven’t taken any singing classes because I see singing as a hobby and formal lessons would make me feel stressed. So I prefer to practice casually at home and sing for fun.

× Yes, I often sing when I am showering because I think the voice of seeing is better when the bathroom is filled with hot.

✓ Yes, I often sing when I am showering because I think the sound of singing is better when the bathroom is filled with steam.

The student used 'seeing' instead of 'singing' (wrong pronoun/word) and 'hot' as a noun. Replace 'seeing' with 'singing' and 'hot' with 'steam' to convey the intended meaning. Also 'voice of singing' is awkward; 'sound of singing' is natural.

× No, I haven't learned how to sing before.

✓ No, I haven't learned how to sing.

Using 'before' with present perfect is redundant. 'I haven't learned how to sing' is sufficient and grammatically correct for a past experience up to now.

× However, I think that seeing is one of my favorite hobby so I would treat singing like as I do it daily rather than treat it very seriously since I think that everything when everything goes into.

✓ However, I think that singing is one of my favorite hobbies, so I treat it as a daily pastime rather than taking it very seriously.

Errors: 'seeing' should be 'singing'; 'favorite hobby' needs plural 'hobbies' after 'one of'; 'like as I do it daily' is incorrect phrase — use 'as a daily pastime' or 'as something I do daily'; remove the unclear trailing clause. This fixes noun forms and idiomatic expression.

× Something that I have to learn.

✓ I feel that if I had to study singing formally, it would be too stressful for me.

Original is a sentence fragment lacking clear subject and verb. Rewriting connects meaning to previous ideas and creates a complete sentence explaining the speaker's feeling.

× It became more stress stressful for me, so I would not like to get a formal lessons.

✓ It would become more stressful for me, so I would not like to take formal lessons.

'Stress' used incorrectly; use adjective 'stressful'. 'Would not like to get a formal lessons' mixes verbs and number: use 'take formal lessons' and remove article 'a' before plural 'lessons'.

× This question is hard to answer however the first people that came to my mind is my boyfriend since he was not good at seeing and he always not on the key point.

✓ This question is hard to answer; however, the first person who came to my mind is my boyfriend, since he is not good at singing and he is often off key.

Errors: 'people' should be singular 'person' because 'the first' refers to one; 'that' better as 'who' for people; tense agreement: use present 'is' rather than 'was'; 'seeing' should be 'singing'; 'always not on the key point' is ungrammatical — use 'often off key'.

× I would like to sing a song to him to let him know what the correct pitch is and he likes listening to my voice too so we. So sometimes practice singing at home together.

✓ I would like to sing to him to show the correct pitch, and he likes listening to my voice, so sometimes we practice singing at home together.

Original contains sentence fragments and misplaced clauses. Combine ideas into complete sentences, remove redundant 'a song' after 'sing', and correct word order to 'we practice singing'.

× Absolutely. Singing is a kind of creation from the singer.

✓ Absolutely. Singing is a form of creative expression by the singer.

'A kind of creation from the singer' is awkward; 'form of creative expression' is a natural phrasing.

× So if the singer can express his emotion and also his feeling toward the public by singing, I think it may become a means to spread the happiness and also I, in my opinion, an observation.

✓ If a singer can express their emotions and feelings toward the public by singing, it can become a way to spread happiness. In my observation,

Use 'their' as gender-neutral singular pronoun; 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions'; 'spread the happiness' should be 'spread happiness'; original ends awkwardly — split into two clearer sentences and finish the observation in context.

× I found out that church also always sings song to let the people feel more calm and more fulfilled.

✓ I have found that churches often sing songs to help people feel calmer and more fulfilled.

Use plural 'churches' or 'the church' contextually, 'always sings song' is incorrect — use 'often sing songs'; 'feel more calm' -> 'feel calmer'; maintain present perfect for experience 'I have found'.

× Yes, however it is limited in the true singer.

✓ Yes, however I mainly enjoy listening to real singers.

'It is limited in the true singer' is unclear and ungrammatical. Rephrase to express that the speaker prefers genuine/real singers.

× I like listening to the K pop singer and also some of the West solo singer song and those singer have a really nice voice which is give a gift gifted.

✓ I like listening to K-pop singers and some Western solo artists, and those singers have really nice voices and are very talented.

Pluralize 'singer(s)'; 'West' -> 'Western'; 'song' misplaced; 'which is give a gift gifted' is ungrammatical — replace with 'are very talented'.

× For example, like Adele, she is one of the most talented singer in my opinion and she can sing a very high pitch in his specific way which makes me proud of.

✓ For example, Adele is one of the most talented singers in my opinion, and she can sing very high pitches in her unique way, which I admire.

Remove redundant 'like' before name; use plural 'singers'; pronoun 'his' wrong for Adele — use 'her'; 'proud of' should be 'I admire' or 'I am proud of her'.

× No, I haven't take any singing class before since I treat singing as a kind of hobby to express my emotion.

✓ No, I haven't taken any singing classes before since I treat singing as a hobby to express my emotions.

Present perfect requires past participle 'taken' not 'take'; plural 'classes' matches general meaning; 'a kind of hobby' -> 'a hobby'; 'emotion' -> plural 'emotions'.

× I would definitely not take a formal lesson to learn singing because when things goes to the formal way it will make me more stressful and feel not comfortable when singing.

✓ I would definitely not take formal lessons to learn singing because when things become formal it makes me more stressed and uncomfortable when singing.

'Take a formal lesson' pluralize to 'lessons' or keep singular consistently; 'things goes' should be 'things become' or 'it goes'; 'more stressful' -> 'more stressed' to describe feelings; 'feel not comfortable' -> 'uncomfortable'.

× So in my opinion. I will practice singing casually at home rather than go to a formal lessons.

✓ So, in my opinion, I will practice singing casually at home rather than go to formal lessons.

Combine fragments into one sentence with proper commas; remove article 'a' before plural 'lessons'; keep infinitive 'go' consistent with 'rather than'.