Singing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make the answer more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific reason with a brief example. Avoid filler words like “umm” and repeating the same idea.

Example: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relieve stress and express my emotions. For example, after a long day at university I often sing a favorite song to relax and lift my mood.

Suggestion: Give a clear direct response first, then add one or two specific details about training. Use linking words (for example, because) and avoid vague phrases like “lots” or “inside.”

Example: Yes. I trained in musical theatre and received professional coaching. For example, I learned how to use chest and head voice techniques during performances and weekly lessons, which improved my control.

Suggestion: Make the response more specific and personal. Start with a direct topic sentence naming the people, then explain why with one concrete example. Avoid repeating the same idea.

Example: I would like to sing for close friends and family because music helps me convey feelings that are hard to say in words. For instance, if I feel sad, I might sing a quiet song to help them understand how I feel.

Suggestion: Answer directly and include a clear reason and specific example. Avoid repeating the same phrase. Use linking words such as “because” or “for example.”

Example: Yes, I think singing can make people happy because it creates emotional connection. For example, K-pop idols often cheer up fans with upbeat performances, and a friend of mine felt comforted after hearing a favorite song.

Suggestion: Give a concise topic sentence and one specific reason with an example. Avoid unclear expressions like “Seeing means” and grammatical errors (e.g., “loves”).

Example: Yes, I enjoy listening to others sing because it lets me understand their emotions and stories. For instance, listening to a friend’s acoustic performance once helped me see why they were feeling nostalgic.

Suggestion: Answer directly (yes/no) and then give specific details about the type and duration of training. Use clear linking words and correct tense/form. Remove redundant phrases.

Example: Yes, I had professional singing coaching while studying musical theatre. For example, I took weekly voice lessons for two years to learn breath control and vocal placement.

× I think singing is a method for you to release stress and also express what you have in mind right now.

✓ I think singing is a way for you to release stress and to express what you have in mind right now.

Using 'method' is not incorrect but 'way' is more natural here; the main issue is parallel structure: use 'to release' and 'to express' (both infinitives) for consistency. Maintain the present form 'have' to match 'right now'.

× Have you ever learnt how to sing?

✓ Have you ever learned how to sing?

Both 'learnt' and 'learned' are past participles used with present perfect. In American English 'learned' is preferred; keep present perfect 'have you ever' to ask about past experience. Change to 'learned' for standard US usage.

× To be frank, I adore musical theater, and I participated in lots of musical theater traditions and some performances.

✓ To be frank, I adore musical theater, and I have participated in many musical theater productions and performances.

Use present perfect 'have participated' with 'to be frank' and 'I adore' to link past experiences with current preference. 'Lots of' is informal; 'many' is more appropriate. 'Traditions' is incorrect collocation; 'productions' fits theatrical contexts.

× And inside, I've learned how to use my voice, like as an example, chest voice or head voice for singing.

✓ And in it, I've learned how to use my voice, for example chest voice and head voice for singing.

'Inside' is incorrect preposition here; use 'in it' or 'through it'. 'Like as an example' is redundant—use 'for example'. Use parallel nouns 'chest voice and head voice'. Present perfect 'I've learned' is fine.

× I want to sing for someone who wants to know what I'm thinking of because I think singing is a method to let them know your emotions, such as when you are sad.

✓ I want to sing for someone who wants to know what I'm thinking because I think singing is a way to let them know their emotions, such as when they are sad.

Pronoun inconsistency: sentence switches between 'someone' (singular) and 'them'/'your'/'you'. Use 'them' with 'someone' (singular they) or change to plural. Also replace 'method' with 'way' and remove 'of' after 'thinking'. Maintain pronoun agreement by using 'their' and 'they'.

× You may want to tell somebody by singing, so I want to sing for them.

✓ You may want to tell somebody by singing, so I want to sing for them.

Original sentence is acceptable; no grammar change needed. Provided to show it's correct and maintain pronoun consistency with previous correction.

× Of course, as an example, K pop idols, they sing for their fans to let their fans feel pleasant.

✓ Of course, for example, K-pop idols sing for their fans to make them feel happy.

Remove redundant comma and pronoun 'they' after the noun. Use 'for example' to introduce example. Hyphenate 'K-pop'. 'Let their fans feel pleasant' is awkward; use 'make them feel happy'.

× So I do think singing can bring happiness to people.

✓ So I do think singing can bring happiness to people.

Sentence is grammatically correct; 'do' is used for emphasis with present tense and is appropriate. No change required.

× Of course I'm listening to others. Seeing means that I am experiencing what they want to tell us, what they have in mind, and I can learn their story or listen to them, listen to their inner voice.

✓ Of course I like listening to others. Listening means that I am experiencing what they want to tell us, what they have in mind, and I can learn their story or hear their inner voice.

'I'm listening to others' sounds odd as a general preference; 'I like listening' fits better. 'Seeing' is incorrect word choice; use 'listening'. Repetition 'listen to them, listen to' is redundant—use 'hear their inner voice'. Maintain parallel structure.

× So I really loves to listen, to understand.

✓ So I really love to listen, to understand.

'Loves' disagrees with subject 'I'; use 'love'. Keep infinitive 'to listen' and 'to understand' parallel.

× I have never taken the same class, but I do have some professional singing coaching before because I studied in musical theater and I have to learn and inside I have to learn how to use my voice, how to control my voice.

✓ I have never taken the same class, but I have had some professional singing coaching before because I studied musical theater, and I had to learn how to use and control my voice.

Use present perfect 'have had' to indicate past experience before now. 'Do have' is unnecessary. 'Studied in' should be 'studied musical theater' or 'studied in musical theater programs'; use simple past 'had to learn' to describe required training during that period. Remove repeated phrases and correct word order for clarity.