Singing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like "curriculum"; use the correct word (e.g., "karaoke"). Use linking words like "however" to contrast.

Example: I don't enjoy singing or performing in front of people. However, I sometimes go to karaoke with friends and sing casually after we've had a few drinks, because it's more relaxed and fun.

Suggestion: Provide a direct topic sentence and one clear, specific reason. Correct informal contractions and reduce repetition. Use linking words such as "but" or "although" to connect ideas.

Example: No, I have never taken singing lessons, but I would like to if I had the chance because I want to train my voice and learn how to hit high notes with proper technique.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence and support it with a concise example. Fix grammar errors ("performing" → "perform"), and avoid unnecessary phrases like "if I had to"—say "if I chose to". Add a linking word to connect ideas.

Example: I prefer not to sing in public, but if I chose to sing I would perform for friends or family. For example, I might sing at a small party while presenting a special gift to someone.

Suggestion: Answer directly and give a clear, specific example. Remove hesitations and correct grammar (e.g., "when I'm doing household chores"). Use linking words such as "for example" correctly and limit to two sentences.

Example: Yes, I think singing can make people happier because it lifts your energy. For example, when I'm doing household chores like cooking or cleaning I often hum or sing to myself and it improves my mood.

Suggestion: Give a direct response and add one specific supporting detail without filler words. Replace hesitations with smooth linking phrase like "for example" or "for instance."

Example: Yes, I enjoy listening to other people sing. For instance, one of my friends is a very good singer, so I often go to karaoke with her to hear her perform.

Suggestion: This repeats an earlier answer—try to vary phrasing and be concise. State the fact clearly then give one specific reason using correct grammar and fewer repetitions. Use linking words such as "but" or "so".

Example: No, I've never taken singing classes, but I would if I had the chance because I want to train my voice and learn proper techniques for hitting high notes.

× No, I don't like singing so I I don't like performing it in front of people, but I sometimes go to a curriculum with my friends to belt out some songs after having a few drinks.

✓ No, I don't like singing, so I don't like performing in front of people, but I sometimes go to karaoke with my friends to belt out some songs after having a few drinks.

The sentence has redundancy ('I I don't'), wrong noun choice ('curriculum' is incorrect for a social place), and awkward phrasing ('performing it in front of people'). Use 'performing' without 'it' and replace 'curriculum' with 'karaoke' or 'a karaoke room'. Also add a comma after the first clause to separate ideas.

× No, I have never taken singing classes before but if I had the opportunity to learn I would love to train my voice and I wanna learn how how to hit high pitched tones properly.

✓ No, I have never taken singing classes, but if I had the opportunity to learn, I would love to train my voice and I want to learn how to hit high-pitched tones properly.

Use consistent formal forms: 'wanna' is informal and should be 'want to'. Remove duplicate 'how'. Hyphenate 'high-pitched'. Add commas to separate clauses. The verbs 'have never taken' and 'would love' are correct; errors are word choice and punctuation.

× I don't like singing in public, but if I had to, I would sing for my friends or family. It would be amazing to performing it at a party along with a special gift.

✓ I don't like singing in public, but if I had to, I would sing for my friends or family. It would be amazing to perform at a party and receive a special gift.

Use the infinitive 'to perform' rather than 'to performing'. 'Performing it' is awkward; simply 'perform' suffices. 'Along with a special gift' is unclear; 'and receive a special gift' makes the meaning clear.

× Yes, without a doubt it makes me feel much more energetic. For example, if I having if I having a house call household course like cooking or cleaning, I I like to sing, sing or hum for to myself.

✓ Yes, without a doubt it makes me feel much more energetic. For example, when I have household chores like cooking or cleaning, I like to sing or hum to myself.

Multiple issues: repetition ('if I having if I having', 'I I like to sing, sing'), wrong phrases ('house call household course' should be 'household chores'), and incorrect preposition 'for to myself' should be 'to myself'. Use 'when I have' to introduce habitual situations.

× Yes, I like listening to singing. Uh, one of my friends, she's good at singing, so I, I love to go to a karaoke room with her.

✓ Yes, I like listening to others sing. One of my friends is good at singing, so I love to go to a karaoke room with her.

Avoid 'listening to singing'; use 'listening to others sing' or 'listening to singing performances'. Remove unnecessary hesitation and comma splices, and simplify 'one of my friends, she's' to 'one of my friends is' to maintain correct clause structure.

× No, I've never taken singing classes before but if I had the opportunity to learn I would love to train my voice and I want to learn how how how hit high pitched tones properly.

✓ No, I've never taken singing classes before, but if I had the opportunity to learn, I would love to train my voice and I want to learn how to hit high-pitched tones properly.

Remove repeated 'how how how', hyphenate 'high-pitched', and add commas to separate clauses. The verbs 'have never taken' and 'would love' are correctly used; errors are repetition and punctuation.