Singing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific reasons with linking words. Avoid redundant phrases and unclear ending. Improve grammar (e.g., "I can't live without it").

Example: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it relaxes me and helps me express emotions. For example, I often sing while commuting or cooking, which makes mundane tasks more enjoyable. As a result, singing has become an important part of my daily routine.

Suggestion: Answer directly and fix vocabulary/grammar: use 'learn to sing' not 'learn to think.' Provide concise support: mention specific self-study methods and a brief result. Use linking words for clarity.

Example: No, I haven't had formal lessons, but I have taught myself by watching YouTube tutorials and practicing daily. For instance, I followed exercises from a vocal coach on YouTube and noticed better breath control after a few weeks.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and clarify meaning (replace 'thinking voice' with 'singing voice'). Explain reasons briefly and use linking words (e.g., 'because', 'so').

Example: I usually sing for myself because I'm self-conscious about my singing voice. For example, I worry that I might sound off-key in front of others, so I prefer practicing alone to build confidence.

Suggestion: Make a clear, coherent opinion and support it with brief reasons or examples. Use correct contrast words ('even if', 'however') and avoid confusing clauses.

Example: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because music can lift people's moods. Even if a song is sad, singing together often creates a sense of connection and comfort, which can make people feel better.

Suggestion: Express opinion politely and clearly. Replace vague or offensive phrases ('hate their voice', 'national people') with specific criteria (e.g., 'professional singers' or 'friends/family'). Provide a brief reason and linking word.

Example: I enjoy listening to professional singers because they have trained technique and clear tone. However, I also like hearing talented amateurs sometimes, especially when they sing with emotion.

Suggestion: Use correct tense and concise structure: start with a direct sentence then add brief supporting detail about methods and outcome. Avoid absolute claims like 'works every time.'

Example: No, I haven't taken formal singing classes; instead, I follow advice from vocal coaches on social media and practice their exercises daily. As a result, I've improved my pitch and breathing, though I still plan to take lessons for further progress.

× I like singing very much. It's just everyday life. It's my hobby. I can't live without it and here.

✓ I like singing very much. It's just part of my everyday life. It's my hobby. I can't live without it here.

The phrase 'everyday life' needs a determiner and 'part of' to be natural; 'and here' is misplaced. Use 'part of my everyday life' and place 'here' after 'without it' to form a correct idiom. Suggestion: 'It's just part of my everyday life' and 'I can't live without it here.'

× No, I officially didn't learn how to think, but by listening to songs, watching YouTube, Tik Toks and other social media I I started to have a determination to learn how to think and I know a few tricks to think.

✓ No, I haven't officially learned how to sing, but by listening to songs and watching YouTube, TikTok and other social media I started to feel determined to learn how to sing and I know a few tricks for singing.

Errors: wrong verb 'think' instead of 'sing' (word choice), incorrect past tense form 'didn't learn' vs present perfect 'haven't learned' for life experience, duplication 'I I', and awkward phrases 'have a determination' and 'tricks to think'. Use present perfect for experience not completed ('haven't officially learned'), 'learned' past participle, 'feel determined' is natural, and 'tricks for singing' is correct collocation. Suggestion: use correct verb 'sing', remove duplicates, and prefer present perfect when relevant.

× For myself, I hate my thinking voice. Actually, I'm worried about thinking, so I don't want other people to hear my singing. That's why I sing for myself.

✓ For myself, I hate my own singing voice. Actually, I'm self-conscious about singing, so I don't want other people to hear me sing. That's why I sing for myself.

Pronoun and word-choice issues: 'my thinking voice' is incorrect; use 'my own singing voice'. 'Worried about thinking' should be 'self-conscious about singing' or 'worried about singing'. 'Hear my singing' is acceptable but 'hear me sing' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'my own' for emphasis and choose the correct verb ('sing') instead of 'think'.

× Sad songs bring sadness to people in the even though they are happy just same as that have singing can bring people happiness and joy.

✓ Sad songs can make people feel sad even if they are usually happy, and likewise singing can bring people happiness and joy.

This sentence has unclear and disordered structure: redundant phrases ('bring sadness to people', 'in the even though'), incorrect connectors. Use clearer structure with 'even if' for contrast and 'likewise' to compare. Also ensure verb forms match ('can make', 'can bring'). Suggestion: split into two clauses and use appropriate conjunctions.

× I say I like hearing people singing, but just the professional people singing. I hate how national people singing and I hate their voice kinda. And that's just my afternoon.

✓ I would say I like hearing people sing, but only professional singers. I don't like how amateur singers sing, and I don't much like their voices. And that's just my preference.

Problems: tense and form - 'hearing people singing' is acceptable but 'hearing people sing' is simpler; 'just the professional people singing' is awkward, use 'only professional singers'. 'National people' likely wrong word for 'amateur' or 'local'; choose appropriate word. 'I hate their voice kinda' is informal and ungrammatical; use 'I don't much like their voices'. 'That's just my afternoon' is incorrect idiom; likely meant 'that's just my preference'. Suggestion: use correct noun forms ('singers') and clear phrasing.

× I haven't take a singing class once, I just took advice from strangers on the social media and tried the tricks they told me and it works every time.

✓ I've never taken a singing class; I just took advice from strangers on social media and tried the tricks they told me, and they work every time.

Errors: incorrect verb form 'haven't take' should be present perfect 'I've never taken' for life experience; 'once' is unnecessary. 'The social media' should be 'social media'. Subject agreement: 'it works' should be 'they work' referring to 'tricks'. Suggestion: use present perfect for experiences, correct past participle 'taken', and match plural subjects with plural verbs.