Singing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details using linking words. For example, avoid repeating 'group singing group' and ensure sentences are complete and coherent.

Example: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express myself. For instance, I used to participate in group singing competitions at my school, which was both fun and rewarding.

Suggestion: Provide a clear and complete answer with proper sentence structure and specific details. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, clarify any unclear terms or names to make your answer more understandable.

Example: Yes, I started learning how to sing when I was 10 years old. My parents enrolled me in a music academy where I took lessons from a professional instructor, which helped me improve my skills.

Suggestion: Focus on clear and grammatically correct sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons why you want to sing for your mother. Avoid unclear phrases and ensure your message is coherent.

Example: I want to sing for my mother because she has always supported me and sacrificed a lot for our family. She is my role model and the strongest woman I know.

Suggestion: Make sure your answer is grammatically correct and complete. Use linking words to explain your opinion clearly and provide specific reasons or examples to support your answer.

Example: Of course, I believe singing brings happiness to people because it helps them relax and enjoy themselves. For example, singing can lift one's mood and reduce stress.

× I used to take part in some of the group singing group competition there in my school and it makes me feel. Relax and it's also my hobby, so that's why I like singing.

✓ I used to take part in some group singing competitions at my school and it makes me feel relaxed. It's also my hobby, so that's why I like singing.

The original sentence incorrectly splits 'feel relaxed' into two parts and uses 'group singing group competition' redundantly. 'Feel relaxed' should be together as 'feel relaxed' with 'relaxed' as the past participle acting as an adjective. Also, 'group singing group competition' is repetitive; 'group singing competitions' is clearer and plural to match 'some'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and proper verb form usage.

× Yes, when I was 10 years old my parents let me join Academy where I used to learn singing from one of my masters and so in jipmer.

✓ Yes, when I was 10 years old, my parents let me join an academy where I used to learn singing from one of my teachers at JIPMER.

The sentence needed an article before 'academy' ('an academy') and 'masters' is better replaced with 'teachers' for clarity. 'JIPMER' should be capitalized as it is a proper noun. The phrase 'and so in jipmer' is unclear and corrected to 'at JIPMER' to indicate location. The past tense 'used to learn' is appropriate here.

× I want to sing for my mother because she's the one who just not sure. And give us everything for their life. And she is not alone model and she's the strongest woman I have.

✓ I want to sing for my mother because she's the one who is always there for us and gives us everything in her life. She is not only a role model but also the strongest woman I know.

The original sentence has unclear pronoun references and incorrect phrasing. 'Just not sure' is unclear and replaced with 'is always there for us' to convey support. 'Give us everything for their life' is corrected to 'gives us everything in her life' for subject-verb agreement and correct pronoun use. 'Not alone model' is corrected to 'not only a role model' for meaning and grammar. 'I have' is changed to 'I know' for natural English expression.

× Of course, thinking is obviously bring happiness to people because when people sing, the dis feel relaxed, enjoy, yeah.

✓ Of course, singing obviously brings happiness to people because when people sing, they feel relaxed and enjoy themselves.

'Thinking' is a typo and should be 'singing' to match context. 'Bring' should be 'brings' to agree with singular subject 'singing' (third person singular). 'The dis' is unclear and corrected to 'they' referring to people. 'Enjoy' needs an object or reflexive pronoun, so 'enjoy themselves' is used. The sentence is corrected for subject-verb agreement and clarity.