Singing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but a bit repetitive and unclear in parts. Try to avoid repeating phrases and use clearer expressions. Also, organize your ideas logically and use linking words to connect your thoughts.

Example: Yes, I like singing because it allows me to express my emotions. For example, when I feel sad, singing helps me release those feelings, which is beneficial for my mental health.

Suggestion: Your answer addresses the question but could be clearer and more concise. Avoid repeating words and try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, correct minor grammar mistakes for better clarity.

Example: No, I haven't learned how to sing yet. However, I am passionate about it, but I lack confidence because I find it difficult and I am shy. Maybe one day, I will look for singing classes to improve.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details. Use linking words to improve coherence.

Example: I would like to sing for everyone because I believe having a good voice is a special gift. Sharing my singing with others would bring me joy and hopefully make them happy too.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but a bit confusing and repetitive. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to connect your points. Also, provide specific examples to support your opinion.

Example: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because music expresses our emotions. For instance, when people are sad or happy, listening to different kinds of songs can help them feel better or celebrate their feelings.

× Yes, I do because I think singing can help you to show your feeling and you can UM, so sadness thinking about your feeling and it's very helpful for your mental health, I think.

✓ Yes, I do because I think singing can help you to show your feelings and you can, um, express sadness by thinking about your feelings and it's very helpful for your mental health, I think.

The original sentence misuses 'sadness thinking' which is unclear and incorrect. The verb form 'thinking' should be replaced with 'express' to correctly convey the action of showing sadness. Also, 'feeling' should be plural 'feelings' to match the context. Using 'um' as a filler is acceptable but should be separated by commas for clarity.

× No, I haven't learned about how to sing.

✓ No, I haven't learned how to sing.

The phrase 'learned about how to sing' is incorrect because 'learn' is directly followed by the infinitive 'how to sing' without 'about'. The preposition 'about' is unnecessary and incorrect here.

× But I I really passionate about it but also I don't have enough confidence to sing and I think it's very hard and I am shy.

✓ But I am really passionate about it, but I also don't have enough confidence to sing, and I think it's very hard and I am shy.

The original sentence is missing the verb 'am' after 'I' to form the correct present tense 'I am really passionate'. Also, the sentence lacks proper punctuation and conjunctions to separate ideas clearly.

× So maybe one day I start to look for different classes for it.

✓ So maybe one day I will start to look for different classes for it.

The phrase 'I start to look' is present tense and does not correctly express a future intention. Using 'will start' correctly indicates a future action.

× I really like singing and I think having good voice is a really great gift from God.

✓ I really like singing and I think having a good voice is a really great gift from God.

The noun 'voice' requires an article 'a' before it to be grammatically correct.

× So if I want to start singing, I really want to and think for everyone and I want to everyone hear my voice.

✓ So if I want to start singing, I really want to sing for everyone and I want everyone to hear my voice.

The original sentence has missing verbs and incorrect word order. 'Want to and think for everyone' is unclear and should be 'want to sing for everyone'. Also, 'I want to everyone hear' should be 'I want everyone to hear' to correctly use the infinitive form.

× Yes, I think because as I told you, I think I'm thinking can impress our emotions and.

✓ Yes, I think because, as I told you, I think singing can express our emotions.

The phrase 'I'm thinking can impress' is incorrect. The intended meaning is that singing can express emotions. 'Singing' is the correct gerund form to use here, not 'thinking'. Also, the sentence was incomplete and needed restructuring.

× Whenever you are sad or whenever you are happy, you can listen to different kind of music and you can feel about it.

✓ Whenever you are sad or happy, you can listen to different kinds of music and you can feel it.

The phrase 'different kind of music' should be pluralized to 'different kinds of music' to match the plural quantifier 'different'. Also, 'feel about it' is incorrect; 'feel it' is the proper expression.