Singing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat natural but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "in the outer word" and "keep it it into my zone." Try to use clearer and more natural expressions. Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating similar ideas. For example, you can say you enjoy singing privately because you feel your voice is not strong enough for public singing, and you prefer listening to music. Keep your answer concise and coherent.

Example: I enjoy singing, but mostly when I'm alone because I don't think my voice is strong enough for others. So, I usually sing in private and prefer listening to music more than singing out loud.

Suggestion: Your answer has some unclear phrases and grammatical mistakes, such as "Great Six" and "as a one day in the whole week." Try to be more precise and use correct tenses. Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. For example, mention when you learned some music and clarify that you haven't studied singing extensively.

Example: Yes, I learned a little about music when I was in grade six, as we had a music class once a week. However, I haven't had much formal training in singing before or since then.

Suggestion: Your answer repeats similar ideas and has some awkward phrasing like "fulfillment of desire of having singing." Try to express your ideas more naturally and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, explain that you prefer singing alone for personal enjoyment and comfort.

Example: I usually sing only for myself when I'm alone because it helps me relax and enjoy the moment in my own comfort zone.

Suggestion: Your answer conveys the main idea but is somewhat repetitive and contains grammatical errors. Try to use clearer sentences and avoid repeating the same points. Use linking words to organize your answer logically. For example, state that singing is a joyful hobby for many people and personally helps you relax and feel happy.

Example: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness to many people because it's a fun hobby. Personally, I find that singing alone helps me relax and lifts my mood.

× I consider myself as a bathroom singer.

✓ I consider myself a bathroom singer.

The verb 'consider' is followed directly by the noun without the preposition 'as'. Using 'as' here is incorrect. The correct structure is 'consider myself a bathroom singer'. This is a common mistake with the verb 'consider'.

× I believe that my voice is not really good to sing out in the outer word, so I just keep it it into my zone.

✓ I believe that my voice is not really good to sing out in the outer world, so I just keep it in my zone.

The phrase 'keep it it into my zone' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'in' to indicate location or area. Also, 'outer word' is a typo and should be 'outer world'.

× However, I prefer listening music rather than singing music.

✓ However, I prefer listening to music rather than singing music.

The verb 'prefer' when followed by a gerund requires the preposition 'to' before the object. So, it should be 'listening to music'.

× I clearly remember when I was in the Great Six, we were introduced the subject music as a one day in the whole week as a fun activity class.

✓ I clearly remember when I was in the Great Six, we were introduced to the subject music for one day in the whole week as a fun activity class.

The verb 'introduced' requires the preposition 'to' before the object. Also, 'as a one day' is incorrect; it should be 'for one day'.

× we were introduced the subject music as a one day in the whole week as a fun activity class.

✓ we were introduced to the subject music for one day in the whole week as a fun activity class.

The phrase 'a one day' is incorrect; 'one day' does not need an article 'a'.

× Only there was a time when I learn a little bit about music.

✓ Only there was a time when I learned a little bit about music.

The verb 'learn' should be in the past tense 'learned' to match the past time reference 'there was a time'.

× Other than that, in the future or in the past, I haven't explored much in this field.

✓ Other than that, in the future or in the past, I haven't explored much in this field.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No correction needed.

× Whenever I am alone, I tried to feel my satisfaction and fulfillment of desire of having singing at just my own comfort zone.

✓ Whenever I am alone, I try to feel my satisfaction and fulfillment of desire of singing in my own comfort zone.

The verb 'tried' is past tense but the sentence context is present habitual action, so it should be 'try'. Also, 'having singing' is awkward; 'singing' alone is better. 'At just my own comfort zone' should be 'in my own comfort zone'.

× Whenever I am alone, I tried to feel my satisfaction and fulfillment of desire of having singing at just my own comfort zone.

✓ Whenever I am alone, I try to feel my satisfaction and fulfillment of desire of singing in my own comfort zone.

The preposition 'at' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'in' when referring to a zone or area.

× Yes, singing can bring joy to people as I prefer it as a hobby for people.

✓ Yes, singing can bring joy to people as I prefer it as a hobby for people.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No correction needed.

× For me personally, as I mentioned, I love to sing when I am alone so it definitely works to feel you relaxed and bring joy and it worked for people to bring them happiness.

✓ For me personally, as I mentioned, I love to sing when I am alone, so it definitely helps you feel relaxed and brings joy, and it works for people to bring them happiness.

The phrase 'works to feel you relaxed' is incorrect. The correct structure is 'helps you feel relaxed'. Also, 'bring joy' should be 'brings joy' to agree with singular subject 'it'. 'It worked' should be 'it works' to maintain present tense consistency.