Singing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer should be more coherent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific reasons using linking words. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases. For example, explain why you like singing and specify what kind of music you prefer with reasons.

Example: Yes, I like singing because it helps me express my emotions. I often sing Western music since it is more energetic and suits my taste. Moreover, Western music reflects current trends, which makes it more appealing to me.

Suggestion: Your answer needs to be clearer and grammatically correct. Begin with a direct response, then provide specific details about your learning experience using linking words. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear phrases.

Example: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was in third grade. I took lessons from a music teacher who lived near my house. I studied singing for about four months, but then I had to stop due to personal reasons.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add specific reasons with linking words. Make sure to use correct vocabulary and sentence structure.

Example: I would like to sing for Taylor Swift because she is one of my favorite singers. Her voice is sweet and dreamy, and her songs always express deep emotions. I admire how she connects with her audience through music.

Suggestion: Your answer should be more structured and clear. Begin with a direct statement, then support it with specific reasons using linking words. Avoid unclear phrases and grammatical mistakes.

Example: In my opinion, singing can bring happiness to many people. It helps to reduce loneliness and stress. Many people enjoy singing or listening to songs during their free time, which makes them feel joyful and relaxed.

× I often sing some songs and I'm really into best in music.

✓ I often sing some songs and I'm really into the best music.

The phrase 'best in music' is incorrect because 'best' is a superlative adjective and needs a definite article 'the' before it to specify the noun it modifies. So, 'the best music' is correct.

× I would like to listen western music more because it's a change according to current trends and generation, so I prefer western.

✓ I would like to listen to western music more because it's a change according to current trends and generation, so I prefer western.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by the object. Therefore, 'listen to western music' is correct.

× I learned how to sing while I was in my third standard.

✓ I learned how to sing when I was in my third standard.

The phrase 'while I was in my third standard' is acceptable but 'when I was in my third standard' is more appropriate to indicate the time when the learning happened.

× I visited A musician near my house and he was a music teacher.

✓ I visited a musician near my house who was a music teacher.

The sentence needs to connect the two clauses properly. Using 'who' instead of 'and' makes the sentence clearer and grammatically correct.

× He teach me a lot about music and I studied music for some time.

✓ He taught me a lot about music and I studied music for some time.

The verb 'teach' in past tense for third person singular is 'taught'. Using 'teach' is incorrect here.

× Or 4 month after that I had to break that 'cause of my.

✓ After 4 months, I had to stop because of my reasons.

The phrase 'Or 4 month after that' is incorrect. It should be 'After 4 months'. Also, 'break that' is incorrect; 'stop' or 'quit' is appropriate. The sentence is incomplete and corrected accordingly.

× I really want to sing for three ago Shell.

✓ I really want to sing for Taylor Swift.

The phrase 'three ago Shell' is unclear and seems to be a mishearing or typo. Assuming the intended name is 'Taylor Swift', the correction is made accordingly.

× Her voice is like so sweet and dreamy.

✓ Her voice is so sweet and dreamy.

The phrase 'like so sweet' is incorrect. 'Like' is unnecessary here; 'so sweet' is sufficient to describe the voice.

× Most of her songs is my favorite song and I really like his sauce.

✓ Most of her songs are my favorite songs and I really like her songs.

'Songs' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. Also, 'his sauce' is incorrect; it should be 'her songs'.

× She seems really well and have feel or emotion to the music.

✓ She seems really well and has feeling or emotion in the music.

'Have' should be 'has' for third person singular. Also, 'feel' should be 'feeling' and 'to the music' should be 'in the music'.

× In my perspective, I see that singing makes most of the people happy.

✓ From my perspective, I see that singing makes most people happy.

'Most of the people' is better expressed as 'most people' for natural English. Also, 'In my perspective' should be 'From my perspective'.

× Even singing and listening makes our loneliness fadeaway.

✓ Even singing and listening make our loneliness fade away.

The compound subject 'singing and listening' is plural, so the verb should be 'make' not 'makes'. Also, 'fadeaway' should be two words: 'fade away'.

× Lot of people are keen. Into singing songs as a part of their daily Korea's or while batting an all.

✓ A lot of people are keen on singing songs as a part of their daily chores or while bathing in a mall.

'Keen' is followed by the preposition 'on'. 'Lot of people' should be 'A lot of people'. 'Korea's' seems to be a mishearing of 'chores'. 'Batting an all' is unclear; assuming 'bathing in a mall' or 'bathing at home' is intended.

× So in our leisure time we would like to sing songs.

✓ So in our leisure time, we like to sing songs.

The phrase 'would like to' implies a wish, but here it is better to use 'like to' to express habitual action. Also, a comma after 'leisure time' improves clarity.