Memory— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Avoid filler sounds like “uh” and unnecessary repetition (e.g., “memorize things” repeated). Use linking words such as “because” or “so” correctly and vary vocabulary (e.g., “retain information,” “revise,” “review”). Keep it to under five sentences.

Example: I’m not very good at memorising things. For example, I often forget my study material for exams, so I have to review it several times to retain it. Because I revise regularly, I usually manage to remember the key points before the test.

Suggestion: Make your answer grammatically correct and more specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific incident with brief consequences and feelings. Use correct verb forms and clearer vocabulary (e.g., “appliances” instead of “stuff”). Avoid rhetorical questions like “why I forgot…”.

Example: Yes, once I left the house without turning off the electrical appliances. Fortunately there was no fire, but I felt very scared and guilty because it was dangerous. Since then I double-check switches before I leave.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and then list specific items with brief explanation. Correct verb forms and use natural phrases like “study schedule” or “to-do list.” Use a linking phrase like “for example” or “such as.” Keep it concise.

Example: As a student, I need to remember my study schedule, assignment deadlines and exam outlines. For example, I keep a to-do list so I don’t miss homework and I plan revision sessions before exams.

Suggestion: Explain your method clearly and with correct vocabulary. Say what you do step by step using linking words (e.g., “first,” “then,” “finally”). Avoid vague phrases like “grab everything” and correct repetition and grammar. Be specific about tools (e.g., “notes,” “flashcards,” “revision cycles”).

Example: I use written notes and flashcards to remember important information. First I write key points on a sheet of paper, then I review them several times over a few days. Usually I repeat the review five or six times for crucial material and fewer times for routine tasks.

× Uh, I think I'm not very good at memorizing things because when I need to memorize my homework and my outline for the final exam, I often forget and so I need to revise a lot before I can memorize things easily.

✓ Uh, I think I'm not very good at memorizing things because when I need to memorize my homework and my outline for the final exam, I often forget, so I need to revise a lot before I can memorize things easily.

The original sentence is mostly correct in tense but has a punctuation and conjunction flow problem. Replacing 'and so' with 'so' and adding a comma improves sentence flow and clarity. Suggestion: use a comma before coordinating conjunctions that join independent clauses (e.g., '..., so ...').

× Yes, I sometimes forgot that something very important, for example when I forgot to turn off the stuff and go away.

✓ Yes, I sometimes forget very important things; for example, I once forgot to turn off some appliances before I left.

The student mixed present habitual meaning 'sometimes forget' with past tense 'forgot.' Use present simple 'forget' for habitual actions. 'Stuff' is informal and vague; 'appliances' or 'things' is clearer. 'Go away' is unnatural here; use 'leave.' Use a semicolon or period for clarity. Suggestion: match tense to intended meaning (habitual = present simple).

× Luckily my house not got on fire, but it made me very scared because why I forgot something that very important.

✓ Luckily my house did not catch fire, but it made me very scared because I couldn't understand why I had forgotten something so important.

Multiple issues: 'not got on fire' is ungrammatical; use 'did not catch fire.' The clause 'because why I forgot' is incorrect word order and tense; use 'because I couldn't understand why I had forgotten.' Use past perfect 'had forgotten' to show the earlier action. Also 'that very important' should be 'so important.' Suggestion: use correct verb phrases and proper clause order ('because I ...').

× Well, as a student, I have to remember my outline, my homework and my schedule task to make sure that I done every homework and revised carefully for my exam.

✓ Well, as a student, I have to remember my outline, my homework, and my schedule tasks to make sure that I do every homework assignment and revise carefully for my exams.

The original uses 'done' (past participle) incorrectly after 'make sure that'; use base form 'do.' 'Schedule task' should be plural 'schedule tasks.' 'Every homework' is better as 'every homework assignment.' Maintain present tense for habitual responsibilities. Suggestion: use base verb after 'make sure that' and keep noun forms consistent and plural where needed.

× When I have to remember important things like my outline or my homework, I often prepare a white paper and grab everything.

✓ When I have to remember important things like my outline or my homework, I often prepare a sheet of paper and write everything down.

'White paper' is unnatural for a note; 'sheet of paper' is clearer. 'Grab everything' is incorrect collocation for writing notes; use 'write everything down.' The correction keeps present tense and uses appropriate verb + object collocations. Suggestion: use common collocations ('write down') and precise nouns ('sheet of paper').

× Then I will do do it again and again.

✓ Then I do it again and again.

Using 'will' is unnecessary for habitual action; simple present 'do' expresses repeated behavior. Also remove the duplicated 'do.' Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions and avoid word repetition.

× It often take like 5 or 6 papers to remember important things and three for normals.

✓ It often takes about five or six sheets of paper for me to remember important things, and three for normal items.

Subject-verb agreement: 'take' should be 'takes' (singular 'it' + verb) — this also relates to subject-verb agreement but here fixed in present tense. Use 'about' instead of 'like' in formal speech. Use 'sheets of paper' not 'papers.' 'Normals' is incorrect; use 'normal items' or 'less important things.' Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with subject, use appropriate quantifier words, and choose correct nouns for clarity.