Memory— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more direct and clear. Start with a concise topic sentence stating whether you are good at memorising, then give one or two specific supporting details with correct grammar and logical linking. Avoid unclear phrases like “born to the show” and reduce repetition. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I'm reasonably good at memorising things. For example, I can still recall events from years ago because I pay attention to details and form strong mental images. Also, when I need to remember something important I make quick notes, which helps me recall it later.

Suggestion: Answer directly and give a brief reason or a short example. Avoid excessive fillers and repetition. Use linking words (because, so) to make the reason clear, and correct tense and phrasing (e.g., “I’ve never forgotten” not “never happened in my life”). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Example: I’ve never forgotten anything very important because I always write it down. For instance, if I’m given a deadline at school I immediately note it in my phone so I don’t miss it.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence about the main things you must remember as a student, then give specific examples (class times, assignments, appointments). Use correct phrases (e.g., “I need to set an alarm” not “reserve a clock”) and linking words (for example, such as). Keep it to 2–3 well-formed sentences.

Example: As a student, I need to remember my class schedule and assignment deadlines. For example, I set alarms for morning lectures and note due dates in my planner so I don't miss classes or hand-ins.

Suggestion: Be concise and clear. Give one main method and a brief reason or comparison. Fix unclear or incorrect phrases (e.g., “buy the song singing” is unclear). Mention the two methods (notebook and phone memo) succinctly and use linking words like “or” and “because.” Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Example: I usually write important notes in a small pocket notebook or type them into my phone’s memo app. I prefer my phone because it’s more convenient and I can set reminders so I don’t forget.

× Update And maybe a little because I'm born to the show and for example, I can still remember the thing that happened years ago whenever I met in the situation, I were recorded very fast. So I I got this kind of talent to remember some typical things that happened.

✓ Maybe a little because I was born for the show, and for example, I can still remember things that happened years ago; whenever I am in that situation, I remember very quickly. So I have this kind of talent for remembering certain events.

Multiple issues: 'I'm born' should be past passive 'I was born' (past tense), 'born to the show' is unnatural and corrected to 'born for the show', 'the thing that happened' becomes plural 'things that happened' to match context (singular/plural), 'whenever I met in the situation' is ungrammatical — intended meaning is present habitual 'whenever I am in that situation', and 'I were recorded very fast' mixes past tense and passive incorrectly; corrected to 'I remember very quickly'. Also 'I I got' becomes present perfect/simple present 'I have this kind of talent' to express a current ability. Suggestion: use consistent tenses, ensure subject-verb agreement and choose natural idiomatic expressions.

× No, it, it never happened in my life because when I want to, when I pay special attention to something that's really important to me, I will take note, take, take a note and, uh, when I prefer to do it, when I'm asked to do it, I will record it very fast.

✓ No, it has never happened in my life because when I want to remember something important, I pay special attention and I take a note. Also, when I need to do it or when I'm asked to, I will record it quickly.

Errors: 'it, it never happened' should be 'it has never happened' to express life experience (present perfect). 'When I want to, when I pay special attention' is redundant; streamlined to 'when I want to remember something important, I pay special attention'. 'Take note' repeated unnecessarily; use 'take a note' or better 'take a note'/'make a note'. 'When I prefer to do it' is unclear — changed to 'when I need to do it'. 'Record it very fast' changed to 'record it quickly' (adverb placement and word choice). Suggestion: use present perfect for life experiences, avoid repetition, and choose appropriate adverbs.

× All well because I'm a student right now so I'm really need to pay extra attention to what I'm going to do in the afternoon or in the morning because I have a few lessons to attend in a certain time so I need to reserve a clock.

✓ All is well because I'm a student right now, so I really need to pay extra attention to what I'm going to do in the afternoon or in the morning. I have a few lessons at specific times, so I need to set an alarm.

Errors: 'All well' should be 'All is well' (missing verb). 'I'm really need' is incorrect — remove 'I'm' and use 'I really need' (subject-verb agreement). 'In a certain time' unnatural; use 'at specific times'. 'Reserve a clock' is incorrect collocation — correct to 'set an alarm' or 'use a clock'. Suggestion: include verbs, watch auxiliary usage, and use natural collocations for timekeeping.

× Well, I prefer to buy the song singing really important to me on my notebook, uh, a small hand sized notebook. I will write something important on it or I just, uh, for convenience, I will, uh, just type it down on my phone's memo. It's very convenient to me. I don't need another notebook.

✓ Well, I prefer to write the things that are really important to me in my notebook, a small hand-sized notebook. I write important things in it, or for convenience I just type them into my phone's memo. It's very convenient for me; I don't need another notebook.

Errors: 'prefer to buy the song singing' is nonsensical — likely meant 'prefer to write the things'. 'On my notebook' corrected to 'in my notebook' (preposition). 'Hand sized' should be 'hand-sized' (compound adjective). 'Type it down on my phone's memo' corrected to 'type them into my phone's memo' (pronoun agreement and preposition). 'Convenient to me' better as 'convenient for me'. Suggestion: choose correct verbs for actions (write/type), use proper prepositions 'in' for notebooks and 'into' for memos, ensure pronoun number agreement, and hyphenate compound adjectives.