Memory— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, avoid contradictions and filler words, correct word choice (e.g. 'fascinated' not 'fabricated'), and limit to 3–4 sentences. Add one specific brief example of a memorable detail. Use linking words like 'for example' to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I am fairly good at memorising things. For example, I can still recall small details from my childhood, such as the stories my grandfather used to tell me and the songs we sang together. As a result, I often share these memories with my mother, who is amazed by how much I remember.

Suggestion: Improve grammar and sentence structure: begin with a clear simple sentence describing the incident, then briefly explain the consequence and what you learned. Use past tense consistently and fewer repetitions. Add a linking phrase such as 'as a result' or 'since then' to show outcome.

Example: Yes, once I forgot my exam ticket on the way to college. Fortunately, I called my father and he brought the ticket, so I was able to sit the exam. Since that incident, I have become much more organised and always check my bag the night before.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and specific examples with correct grammar; avoid informal contractions ('gonna') and filler. Use linking words like 'for example' and 'also' to list items. Limit to 3–4 sentences and be precise about routines or priorities.

Example: I need to remember various everyday tasks, especially practical items and household plans. For example, I always note where I place my keys and plan what to cook for dinner. Also, because I am not currently working, I focus more on household duties and looking after my husband.

Suggestion: Be concise and use precise language: state your main strategy first, then give two specific methods and a brief reason why they work. Avoid filler sounds and repetitive phrases. Use linking words like 'for instance' or 'therefore' to connect methods to benefits.

Example: I remember important things by writing them down, which helps me stay organised. For instance, I keep a paper to-do list for errands and use a notes app on my phone for appointments. This combination is flexible and ensures I complete tasks on time.

× I vividly remembered my childhood, especially all those beautiful memories with my grandfather.

✓ I vividly remember my childhood, especially all those beautiful memories with my grandfather.

The context is present-tense general ability; 'remembered' (past) conflicts with present statement 'I think I do have'; use simple present 'remember' to indicate ongoing memory. Use present when describing general facts or states.

× Even today I tell my mom about those things and she is really fabricated by how I remember things.

✓ Even today I tell my mom about those things and she is really amazed by how I remember things.

'Fabricated' is incorrect; it is a verb meaning 'made up'. The correct adjective expressing surprise is 'amazed'. Use adjectives that match the intended meaning.

× Uh, probably I'm not good at remembering, uh.

✓ Uh, maybe I'm not good at remembering everything sometimes.

Original sentence is vague and incomplete. 'Probably' can work but the clause lacks an object; adding 'everything sometimes' clarifies meaning and improves sentence structure.

× Actually forget my whole ticket while I was heading to my examination while I was a student.

✓ I actually forgot my ticket while I was heading to my exam when I was a student.

Missing subject 'I' and wrong verb form 'forget' should be past 'forgot' to match past-tense context. Also 'whole ticket' is unnatural; use 'my ticket' and 'examination' can be 'exam'. Reduce redundant 'while' phrases for clarity.

× Fortunately, I telephoned my father and he bought the whole ticket to my college so I was able to write the exam.

✓ Fortunately, I telephoned my father and he brought the ticket to my college so I was able to take the exam.

Use 'brought' (past of bring) not 'bought' (past of buy). 'Write the exam' is nonstandard in this variety of English; use 'take the exam'. Ensure verb choice matches intended meaning.

× Ever since then, I made sure that I was more organized.

✓ Ever since then, I have made sure that I am more organized.

'Ever since' requires present perfect for actions continuing to present: 'have made sure'. Also 'was' suggests past only; use 'am' to indicate current state.

× There are numerous thing I had to remember every single day.

✓ There are numerous things I have to remember every single day.

Mismatch: 'numerous' requires plural noun 'things'. Also use present tense 'have to' for habitual present rather than past 'had to'.

× Uh, starting from where I kept my keys to what I'm gonna make for my dinner.

✓ Starting from where I keep my keys to what I'm going to make for my dinner.

Use correct verb tense 'keep' for habitual present. Avoid informal 'gonna'; use 'going to' in formal correction. Maintain parallel structure with 'starting from ... to ...'.

× As I'm not working, I am more focused on household activities and taking care of my husband rather than my career related things.

✓ As I'm not working, I am more focused on household activities and taking care of my husband rather than on career-related matters.

Add preposition 'on' after 'rather than' when contrasting nouns. Hyphenate 'career-related' and use 'matters' for formality and clarity.

× Actually, I am quite an organized person, so I make sure that I write everything down and organise things in such a way that I am able to do it on time.

✓ Actually, I am quite an organized person, so I make sure that I write everything down and organize things in such a way that I can do them on time.

Use 'organize' spelling variant consistent with other English (either is acceptable but be consistent). Change 'am able to do it' to 'can do them' to agree in number with 'everything'/'things'. Ensure pronoun agreement.

× Uh, sometimes I write it down in a paper or I just do a journaling on my phone.

✓ Sometimes I write it down on a piece of paper or I just journal on my phone.

Use 'on a piece of paper' not 'in a paper'. 'Do a journaling' is incorrect; use the verb 'journal' or the noun phrase 'keep a journal'. Also remove filler 'Uh' for clarity.