Memory— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific reason and a brief example. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "because", "so"). Avoid vague phrases like "many things going on" without detail.

Example: I used to be good at memorising things when I was younger, but now I find it harder because I have more responsibilities. For example, juggling work and family means I rely on notes rather than my memory.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then give one concise example and a short consequence. Avoid repetition ("key car key"). Use a linking word like "however" or "but" to contrast ideas.

Example: I rarely forget truly important things; however, I often forget small items. For example, I sometimes leave my car key at home when I take my children to nursery, which delays our morning routine.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence listing main daily memory tasks, then give two specific examples with linking words. Avoid filler and incomplete sentences. Be specific rather than saying "and so on."

Example: I need to remember several daily things, mainly my daughter's belongings and our schedule. For example, I make sure she brings a hand towel and a water bottle, and I also keep track of pick-up times and appointments.

Suggestion: Use present tense and a clear structure: topic sentence describing your main strategies, followed by a specific example and result. Avoid vague phrasing like "what happened today" and correct awkward expressions ("I tried" → "I try").

Example: I usually use my phone to remember important things: I take notes and set calendar reminders. For example, I set a reminder for hospital appointments so I don't forget to make or attend a reservation.

× I used to be very good at memorizing things when I was younger, but now it's getting harder for me to remember things.

✓ I used to be very good at memorizing things when I was younger, but now it is harder for me to remember things.

The original uses the progressive 'it's getting harder,' which is acceptable conversationally, but in this context a simple present 'it is harder' matches the general state described. Use of simple present is clearer for a current general condition rather than progressive for gradual change.

× Many things going on in my life and I avoid memorizing everything.

✓ Many things are going on in my life, and I avoid trying to memorize everything.

The original lacks a verb in the first clause ('Many things going on' is missing 'are') and the second clause is awkward. Add the auxiliary 'are' to complete the clause and use 'trying to memorize' for natural collocation. Use a comma before 'and' to join independent clauses.

× It's so rare for me to forget things really important, but I usually forget things like small things.

✓ It is very rare for me to forget really important things, but I usually forget small things.

Word order is incorrect: 'really important' should modify 'things' as 'important things'. Also 'so rare' is colloquial; 'very rare' is clearer. Remove redundancy 'things like small things' and simplify to 'small things'.

× For example, I usually forget my key car key at home when I take my children to nursery school.

✓ For example, I usually forget my car key at home when I take my children to nursery school.

Word order error and repetition: 'my key car key' is incorrect and repetitive. Correct phrase is 'my car key'.

× I need to keep in mind what belongings my daughter should bring to nursery school.

✓ I need to remember which belongings my daughter should bring to nursery school.

Use 'remember' rather than 'keep in mind' for this context and use 'which belongings' to introduce items she should bring. This improves naturalness and clarity.

× For example it's a hand towel and water bottles and so on.

✓ For example, she needs a hand towel, water bottles, and so on.

Original lacks commas and subject; add subject 'she' and list punctuation. Use commas to separate list items and include 'and' before final item.

× And also I need to. I need to know the schedule.

✓ I also need to know the schedule.

The fragment 'And also I need to.' is a sentence without a verb object and is incomplete. Combine into one complete sentence 'I also need to know the schedule.' Remove unnecessary 'And' at the start.

× I tried to take notes on my phone and I sometimes use reminders to remind me what happened today.

✓ I try to take notes on my phone, and I sometimes use reminders to tell me what to do today.

Mixed tense: 'I tried' (past) conflicts with habitual action 'I sometimes use'. Use present simple 'I try' for habitual behavior. Also 'remind me what happened today' is awkward; for planning use 'tell me what to do today' or 'remind me about today's events' depending on meaning.

× For example, the reservation date.

✓ For example, the reservation date.

This fragment lacks a verb and is a sentence fragment in isolation; however as a brief example it's acceptable in spoken answers. If full sentence is required, expand to 'For example, I set a reminder for the reservation date.'

× I usually forget to make reservation for my UH hospital.

✓ I usually forget to make a reservation for my UH hospital appointment.

Article missing before 'reservation' so add 'a reservation'. Also clarify 'UH hospital' by adding 'appointment' for natural phrasing. Use present simple 'I usually forget' is correct for habitual action.