Machine— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence ('My favourite machine is my dishwasher.'), avoid filler words (uh), and give one or two specific reasons with linking words (for example, because / when). Keep to 2–3 sentences and use precise vocabulary (dishwasher, miss).

Example: My favourite machine is my dishwasher. I especially appreciate it because I lived in London where dishwashers were uncommon, so I missed the convenience of quickly cleaning dishes after meals.

Suggestion: Provide a clear opinion with coherent supporting details and avoid vague phrases and fillers. Use linking words (because, so) and give concrete examples of benefits (save time for work or family). Limit to 2–3 sentences and correct odd phrasing (e.g., 'more lecture times' is unclear).

Example: Yes, I think they are very important because they save people a lot of time. For example, using a washing machine and a vacuum cleaner lets me spend more time working or relaxing with family.

Suggestion: Start with a direct topic sentence and give clear, concise reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and awkward phrases. Mention a specific example of when instructions helped to strengthen the answer.

Example: Yes, I usually read the instructions before using a machine because otherwise I might misuse it and damage it. For instance, when I bought a new coffee maker I followed the manual and avoided common mistakes.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence then one or two specific reasons with linking words and a concrete example. Avoid grammatical errors (remove 'and' after 'if') and redundancy.

Example: Yes, I believe reading instructions is important because it prevents mistakes that could damage the product and cost time and money to fix. For example, reading the warranty and setup guide saved me from voiding the warranty on a new blender.

× My dish for sure is my favorite machine at my house, uh, because I was living in London for a while and, uh, having a dishwasher is not a common thing, so I missed my dishwasher when I was living there.

✓ My dishwasher for sure is my favorite machine in my house, because I lived in London for a while and having a dishwasher was not common there, so I missed mine while I was living there.

Error: 'My dish' is incorrect and ambiguous; the correct noun is 'dishwasher' (singular). Also 'at my house' is better as 'in my house'. Tense consistency: 'I was living' can be simplified to 'I lived' and 'is not a common thing' should be 'was not common' to match past reference. Suggestion: Use the correct noun 'dishwasher', use 'in' for being inside a house, and keep past tense consistent for past situations.

× Yes, they are extremely important nowadays because the modern world gave those incredible technologies to us, so we need to use them to have more time to, you know.

✓ Yes, they are extremely important nowadays because the modern world gives us these incredible technologies, so we need to use them to have more time for other things.

Error: 'gave those incredible technologies to us' uses past tense 'gave' which conflicts with 'nowadays'; use present tense 'gives'. Also 'those' and 'to us' are wordy; 'these' and 'us' are clearer. The phrase 'to have more time to, you know. More lecture times.' is incomplete and awkward; specify purpose such as 'for other things'. Suggestion: Maintain present tense when referring to current realities and complete the phrase with a clear object.

× More lecture times.

✓ More time for other activities.

Error: Fragment 'More lecture times.' is not a full sentence and 'lecture times' is unclear. Use a noun phrase that completes the idea, e.g., 'more time for other activities'. Suggestion: Avoid sentence fragments and provide a clear object for 'more time'.

× Yes, I usually do that because if I have to read I don't know the instructions, I can't use that machine properly and I can break it.

✓ Yes, I usually do because if I don't read the instructions, I won't know how to use the machine properly and I might break it.

Errors: Incorrect condition structure 'if I have to read I don't know the instructions' is illogical. Use 'if I don't read the instructions' for the condition. Modal verbs: 'I can break it' is possible but 'I might break it' or 'I could break it' is more natural. Also use 'won't know' for result of not reading. Suggestion: Structure conditional sentences with clear if-clause and result clause, and choose appropriate modal verbs to indicate possibility.

× So to avoid that I read instructions usually.

✓ So to avoid that, I usually read the instructions.

Error: Word order and adverb placement are awkward: 'read instructions usually' should be 'usually read the instructions'. Also article 'the' is needed before 'instructions' when referring to specific instructions for a machine. Suggestion: Place frequency adverbs (usually) before the main verb and include 'the' for specific instructions.

× Yes, I think they are extremely important because if you don't read them and you will make a mistake, it can cause a replacement which can cause more money and time.

✓ Yes, I think they are extremely important because if you don't read them and make a mistake, it can lead to a replacement, which will cost more money and time.

Errors: Redundant 'you' in 'and you will make a mistake' — use 'and make a mistake' after 'if'. 'Can cause a replacement which can cause more money and time' is unclear; better: 'lead to a replacement, which will cost more money and time.' Use 'cost' for money and time consequences. Suggestion: Avoid redundant pronouns, use concise result clauses after 'if', and choose verbs that clearly express consequences (e.g., 'lead to', 'cost').