Hometown— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammar and clarity: use correct verb forms and article usage, correct place names, and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the hometown and its location, then give two specific supporting details (climate and attractions) with linking words. Keep answers to 2–4 sentences and use accurate vocabulary (e.g., "seasons," "hot"/"cold").

Example: I come from Buckling, in northern Vietnam. The area has four distinct seasons, with hot summers and cold winters. Also, it has many beautiful viewpoints and pagodas where people go to take photos and pray for health and happiness.

Suggestion: Clarify main idea and give specific reasons: state one clear favourite aspect (for example, the friendly people or scenery) and support it with concrete details or examples. Avoid vague or unrelated words ("film friendly," "hospital") unless explained. Use linking words like "because" or "for example."

Example: What I like most about my hometown is the friendly people. For example, neighbours often help each other during festivals and visitors are always welcomed, which makes the town feel safe and warm.

Suggestion: Be concise and avoid repetition: give a direct answer with a clear timeframe, then add one specific reason with supporting detail. Remove repeated words and improve phrasing ("save memories" → "create lasting memories"). Use linking words like "because" or "since."

Example: I've lived there for over ten years; I moved there with my family in 2016. I love the neighbourhood because the friendly people and the stunning scenery have helped me create many lasting memories.

Suggestion: Provide a direct opinion then support it with specific examples and correct grammar: use correct plural/singular forms and choose precise adjectives. Mention concrete facilities and link them to young people's needs (safety, activities, education). Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, it is. My neighbourhood is safe and peaceful, with many large parks, cafes and community centres that organise sports and arts activities, so young people have plenty of places to play and develop their skills.

× I live in Buckling, the north of Vietnam.

✓ I live in Buckling, in the north of Vietnam.

The preposition 'in' is needed before 'the north of Vietnam' to indicate location. Use 'in the north of' to describe a region within a country.

× We does have four season and often hard in summer and cold in the winter.

✓ We have four seasons; it is often hot in summer and cold in winter.

'Does' is incorrect with plural subject 'we'; use the base verb 'have'. 'Season' should be plural 'seasons'. Also add 'it is' to describe weather and use 'hot' not 'hard'. Omit 'the' before 'winter' when speaking generally.

× But Manning has a lot of stunning views for everyone to take beautiful photos and save memories.

✓ But Manning has many stunning views for everyone to take beautiful photos and make memories.

Use 'many' with countable plural 'views' instead of 'a lot of' optionally acceptable but 'many' is cleaner. 'Save memories' is unnatural; use 'make memories'.

× It's the best place for Go to the Pagoda and pray for health, happiness and success.

✓ It's the best place to go to the pagoda and pray for health, happiness, and success.

Do not capitalize 'Go' and use infinitive 'to go'. 'Pagoda' does not need a capital letter unless part of a proper name; use lowercase and include commas in the list.

× I love everything in my hometown, but the thing I love most is film friendly and hospital.

✓ I love everything in my hometown, but what I love most is that it is film-friendly and has good hospitals.

Original sentence lacks structure. 'Film friendly' should be hyphenated as an adjective 'film-friendly'. Add 'has' to introduce 'hospitals' and use plural 'hospitals' or 'a good hospital'.

× Hmm neighborhoods and people.

✓ Hmm, the neighborhoods and the people are great.

The fragment lacks a verb and clear structure. Add subject and verb to form a complete sentence and include definite articles if referring to specific neighborhoods and people.

× People there really welcome everyone to the town, foreigners to, visitors to.

✓ People there really welcome everyone to the town, including foreigners and visitors.

Repetition of 'to' is incorrect and awkward. Use 'including' to list groups welcomed. Also combine items into a parallel list.

× I've lived there for over 10 years.

✓ I've lived there for over 10 years.

This sentence is correct. It uses the present perfect correctly to describe a period continuing to the present.

× I moved there with my family in 2016 and I really love this neighborhood because because of the friendly people and stunning views that save a lot of memories and beautiful stories.

✓ I moved there with my family in 2016, and I really love this neighborhood because of the friendly people and the stunning views that create many memories and beautiful stories.

Remove repeated 'because'. Use 'create' instead of 'save' for memories. Add 'the' before 'stunning views' and use 'many' for countable 'memories'.

× Yes, definitely. My neighborhood is literally a safe, wonderful and peaceful place for every kids to play and have fun and have a good neighbor childhood there.

✓ Yes, definitely. My neighborhood is truly a safe, wonderful, and peaceful place for every child to play, have fun, and have a good childhood there.

Use 'child' (singular) or 'children' (plural) not 'kids' after 'every'. 'Literally' is often misused; 'truly' is more appropriate. 'Neighbor childhood' is incorrect; use 'good childhood'.

× There are many big parks, cafes and community centers with activities for example.

✓ There are many large parks, cafés, and community centers with activities, for example.

'Big' can be replaced with 'large' for formality; add a comma before 'for example' and a comma after it if followed by examples. Use 'cafés' with accent or 'cafes' acceptable. The sentence ends awkwardly; better to add examples after 'for example'.