Hometown— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating where your hometown is, correct geographical phrasing, and follow with one or two specific details. Avoid tense errors and unnecessary words.

Example: I’m from Stone, a province in southern Thailand. It’s famous for its beautiful beaches and calm natural scenery, which attract many visitors.

Suggestion: Clarify your main idea and use correct vocabulary. Start with a direct statement of what you like, then add a specific reason and an example. Use correct noun forms and articles, and link sentences with words like 'because' or 'for example.'

Example: What I like most is the beach near my house, because it’s close and beautiful. For example, many tourists visit to swim and surf, and there are several scenic spots along the shore.

Suggestion: Use the correct tense and more precise time expressions. Answer directly with a time duration and then briefly explain the change of residence using linking words. Avoid contradictory or vague phrases.

Example: I lived there for about ten years, from early childhood until I started boarding school. Now I live in an eastern province because I attend a boarding school there.

Suggestion: Give a clearer opinion with specific reasons and relevant examples. State your view directly, then support it with concrete reasons (e.g., activities, safety, nature). Avoid unclear phrases like 'watch the beautiful movie from your home.'

Example: Yes, I think it’s a good place for young people because it’s peaceful and safe. Young people can relax by the beach, join outdoor activities like surfing, and enjoy quiet spaces to study.

× I lived in Stone, which is a province in the southern of Thailand that is known for beautiful beaches and serene nature.

✓ I live in Stone, which is a province in the south of Thailand known for its beautiful beaches and serene nature.

The student used past tense 'lived' but the question asks 'Where is your hometown?' requiring present-tense description. Use 'live' for current fact. 'the southern of Thailand' is incorrect preposition and form; 'the south of Thailand' is correct. Add possessive 'its' before 'beautiful beaches' to show the beaches belong to the province.

× My fruit things in my hometown is the beach near my house.

✓ My favorite thing in my hometown is the beach near my house.

The phrase 'My fruit things' is incorrect and unclear. Likely the student meant 'favorite thing'. Also subject 'My favorite thing' is singular so use 'is'. Replace incorrect pronoun phrase with correct adjective 'favorite'.

× There's a lot of tourist there because there's many attractive location on it such as surfing.

✓ There are a lot of tourists there because there are many attractive locations for activities such as surfing.

Subject-verb agreement and count noun forms are wrong. Use 'There are' for plural 'tourists'. 'Tourist' should be plural 'tourists'. 'Many attractive location' needs plural 'locations'. 'on it' is incorrect preposition; use 'for activities such as' or 'for' before 'surfing'.

× I lived there since I was a kindergarten, around 10 years.

✓ I have lived there since I was in kindergarten, for about 10 years.

When an action began in the past and continues to the present, use present perfect 'have lived'. Use 'since' with a point in time ('since I was in kindergarten') and 'for' with a duration ('for about 10 years'). Include 'in' before 'kindergarten' and 'about' for approximate duration.

× Now I've moved to the other province in the eastern of Thailand because I'm in a boarding school to study.

✓ Now I've moved to another province in the east of Thailand because I attend a boarding school to study.

'the other province' is vague; 'another province' is better. 'in the eastern of Thailand' should be 'in the east of Thailand'. 'I'm in a boarding school to study' is awkward; use 'I attend a boarding school' or 'I'm attending a boarding school' to express current situation.

× Actually I think it is quite good for teenagers because there is like peaceful environment.

✓ Actually, I think it is quite good for teenagers because there is a peaceful environment.

'Omit filler 'like'. 'there is like peaceful environment' lacks an article; use 'a peaceful environment'. Commas improve clarity. 'There is' is acceptable with singular 'environment'.

× You can watch the beautiful movie from your home that can make teenagers relax from studying.

✓ You can watch beautiful movies from home that can help teenagers relax from studying.

'the beautiful movie' is too specific; plural 'movies' matches general statement. 'from your home' is acceptable but 'from home' is more natural. 'make teenagers relax from studying' is awkward; use 'help teenagers relax from studying' or 'help teenagers relax after studying' for clarity.