Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make your answer more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (“I’m an 11th-grade student.”), then add one or two specific supporting details. Reduce hesitation and repetition, and avoid running sentences. Use linking words (for example, “because” or “so”) correctly and sparingly.

Example: I’m an 11th-grade student. I’m currently preparing for my final exams because this is my last year of school, and I hope to finish it with good memories.

Suggestion: Answer directly to the question (state you do not work) and then briefly mention future plans. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors (use “an English teacher”). Keep sentences short and coherent with linking words like “but” or “however.”

Example: I don’t work at the moment; I’m a student. However, I plan to become an English teacher after university.

Suggestion: Clarify what “place” you mean (the future school). Give a clear opinion first and then two specific reasons using linking words (“because” / “and”). Avoid filler words and repeat words like “so.”

Example: Yes, I think a school is a good place to work because there are many colleagues and it’s always busy, so you won’t get bored. Also, I enjoy communicating with children and find teaching interesting.

Suggestion: Answer directly whether you would like it, then give 1–2 concrete features you want (comfortable classroom, active programs). Avoid vague phrases and repetition (“I hope”). Use correct collocations: “comfortable to work in,” “activities for children.”

Example: Yes, I would like my future workplace. I hope it will be comfortable to work in, with well-equipped classrooms and many activities for children.

Suggestion: Give a clear, structured response: state your main plan, then two supporting details (study at university; teach children and what you will teach). Remove hesitations (“umm”, “uh”) and fix grammar (“become an English teacher,” “children at school”). Use linking words like “then” or “so that.”

Example: My main plan is to apply to university to study English so that I can become an English teacher. Then I want to teach school children practical skills and classroom rules to help them succeed.

× I'm a student of 11th of grade and I'm preparing for my exam because it's my last year and in the end of the year I will pass an exam, so I hope that I will remember my school years only with good memories.

✓ I'm a student in the 11th grade and I'm preparing for my exams because it's my final year. At the end of the year I will take an exam, so I hope I will remember my school years only with good memories.

Use 'in the 11th grade' instead of 'of 11th of grade'. Use 'final year' for natural phrasing. 'Take an exam' is the correct collocation rather than 'pass an exam' when referring to sitting the test; 'pass' refers to success but 'take' fits the neutral context. Also split into two sentences for clarity.

× As I said, I'm a student right now and I'm studying hard because it's my final year, but I hope that in the future I will become a English teacher. It's my future job and work well.

✓ As I said, I'm a student right now and I'm studying hard because it's my final year, but I hope that in the future I will become an English teacher. It's my future job and I will do it well.

Use the indefinite article 'an' before words beginning with a vowel sound: 'an English teacher' not 'a English teacher'. The second sentence was ungrammatical; replace 'and work well' with 'and I will do it well' to show ability/intent.

× Definitely because there are lots of people, a lot of colleagues and we don't get bored. So and it's interesting work with a lot of children and I love communicating with them. So it's my favorite one.

✓ Definitely, because there are lots of people and many colleagues so we don't get bored. Also, it's interesting work with many children and I love communicating with them. So it's my favorite job.

Use 'many' for countable plural nouns and avoid 'a lot of' repetition. 'Favorite one' is informal and vague; use 'favorite job'. Remove extra 'and' at sentence start. Improved article/word choice for natural English.

× I'm going to work as an English teacher in the future and I hope that my workplace will be great and comfortable to work to do somethings with children and there will be a lot of activities, so I hope that it will be a great area.

✓ I'm going to work as an English teacher in the future and I hope that my workplace will be great and comfortable for working with children and that there will be a lot of activities, so I hope it will be a great environment.

Use 'comfortable for working with children' not 'comfortable to work to do somethings with children'. 'Something' should be singular or rephrased; 'a lot of activities' works but 'environment' fits better than 'area'. Correct preposition and noun choices.

× I have some plans for my future and one of them is umm, applying to university and uh, become an English teacher and work with a lot of children's of school and uh, teach them a lot of uh, new things and about rules.

✓ I have some plans for my future, and one of them is applying to university, becoming an English teacher, and working with many schoolchildren to teach them new things and rules.

After 'one of them is' follow noun forms or gerunds: 'applying', 'becoming', 'working'. 'Become' should be 'becoming'. 'Children's of school' is incorrect; use 'schoolchildren' or 'children at school'. Use 'many' for plural count nouns and remove filler sounds. Ensure parallel gerund structure.