Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., current status), then give one brief past detail. Avoid repeating negatives and keep within 2–3 short sentences. Add a linking phrase to clarify the timeline.

Example: I'm currently not working because I'm on maternity leave. Previously, I worked as an English teacher at a large private school, where I taught general English to secondary students.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a topic sentence naming the workplace, then give one specific detail (role or section). Use linking words (e.g., previously, where) to make the sentence flow and avoid filler words like 'actually'.

Example: I used to work at a private school called Dunya, where I taught English in the IB section. I mainly supported IB classes and prepared students for exams.

Suggestion: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with a specific reason. Use linking words like 'because' and avoid trailing off. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and finish the thought (e.g., why that led you to look for a different role).

Example: I wouldn't say it was a good fit for me because I worked as a support teacher rather than a main class teacher. Because I wanted more responsibility and curriculum control, I started looking for other types of work.

Suggestion: Begin with a direct response to the question, then explain your preference with a specific reason. Use linking words (e.g., however, because) and finish the sentence—avoid leaving ideas incomplete. Limit to 2–3 concise sentences.

Example: I wouldn't choose to stay in teaching long-term because I prefer office-based work that involves handling documents. Teaching involves constant classroom management and interaction, whereas I prefer more detail-oriented, desk-based tasks.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your plan, then give one or two specific reasons or steps. Use linking words (e.g., because, for example) and complete the sentence. Mention any concrete actions (training, application) to make it specific.

Example: I plan to move into the banking sector and work in a back-office, document-focused role because I enjoy detail-oriented tasks. For example, I am preparing by studying basic banking procedures and looking for entry-level positions in operations or administrative departments.

× I'm currently not working but I worked at private school which is called Dunya actually as an English teacher in IB section.

✓ I'm currently not working, but I worked at a private school called Dunya as an English teacher in the IB section.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'private school' and incorrect word order 'which is called Dunya actually' is awkward; also 'the IB section' needs definite article. Use 'a private school called Dunya' and add commas to improve clarity.

× Actually not it's not suitable for me because yes I was English teacher but not main teacher.

✓ Actually, no, it's not suitable for me because I was an English teacher but not the main teacher.

Missing articles: 'an' before 'English teacher' and 'the' before 'main teacher'. Also 'Actually not it's not' is unidiomatic; rephrase to 'Actually, no, it's not suitable for me'.

× I was working as a support teacher.

✓ I worked as a support teacher.

Simple past 'I worked' is more natural with the previous sentence 'I was an English teacher'; 'I was working' implies continuous past action without contrast—use simple past for completed past job. This fixes tense consistency rather than agreement error.

× I'm currently an English teacher, but I like to change my profession because I prefer working with documents rather than teaching students.

✓ I'm currently an English teacher, but I would like to change my profession because I prefer working with documents rather than teaching students.

Use 'would like' to express a desire to change profession; 'like to change' is less appropriate for future intention. This makes tone more polite and matches intention.

× I want to work

✓ That's why I want to work there.

Fragment missing object/place. In context the student began a sentence 'That's why I want to work' but didn't finish; add 'there' or complete clause to clarify meaning.

× I'd like to work in a bank detail oriented nature of all this work like behind the desk just with working with documents rather than teaching students and

✓ I'd like to work in a bank because the work is detail-oriented and desk-based, dealing with documents rather than teaching students.

Run-on sentence with missing connectors and hyphenation: 'detail oriented' should be 'detail-oriented'; add conjunctions to connect ideas and complete the sentence. Remove trailing 'and' and restructure for clarity: 'because the work is detail-oriented and desk-based, dealing with documents'.