Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Give a clear, grammatical topic sentence stating your status, then add one or two specific supporting details (what you study, when you will graduate). Avoid fillers and repetition. Keep to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like "and" or "so".

Example: I am currently a university student and I will graduate next year. I study biology and chemistry, which I find fascinating because I enjoy learning about living systems and laboratory techniques.

Suggestion: Answer directly that you do not work, then give one concise reason and a future intention. Remove hesitations and repeated words; use a linking word like "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

Example: I don't work at the moment because I am a full-time student focusing on my exams. I hope to find a job related to molecular biology after I graduate.

Suggestion: Start with a clear direct response ("Yes, it would be a good place for me") then give specific reasons. Avoid repeating words and use linking words such as "because" or "therefore." Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, it would be a great place for me because I am passionate about biology and molecular science. Working there would be fulfilling and help me develop practical lab skills.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer and then explain clearly what features make the workplace appealing (e.g., good facilities, supportive team). Use correct collocations ("laboratory facilities" not "local movement") and avoid filler words.

Example: Yes, I would enjoy working there because the laboratory has excellent facilities and equipment that are essential for my research. Also, a supportive team would make the workplace enjoyable.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence about your main plan, then add 1–2 specific goals (career, studying abroad, supporting family). Avoid vague phrases and repetition; use linking words like "so" or "for example" to structure ideas.

Example: In the future I plan to pursue a career in molecular biology and possibly continue my studies abroad. I also want to work hard to support my mother financially while building my research career.

× I currently a student uh, I will graduate next year.

✓ I am currently a student; I will graduate next year.

Missing verb 'am' causing sentence without proper verb (sentence structure error). Use the verb 'to be' for present state: 'I am currently a student.' Use a semicolon or separate sentence for the future clause to improve clarity.

× I'm studying on biology and chemistry subject umm studying and it's really interesting for me and I wish I can achieve all my dreams.

✓ I'm studying biology and chemistry; they are really interesting to me, and I hope I can achieve all my dreams.

Preposition 'on' is incorrect here; use no preposition: 'studying biology and chemistry.' 'Interesting for me' is non-idiomatic; use 'interesting to me.' 'I wish I can' is incorrect modality: use 'I hope I can.' Also removed repetition 'studying' to fix sentence structure.

× Because of the due to that, I'm currently student, I didn't work.

✓ Because of that, I'm currently a student; I don't work.

Redundant phrase 'the due to that' is incorrect; use 'because of that' or 'due to that.' Missing article before 'student' and incorrect tense 'didn't work' (past) when meaning present; use 'a student' and present 'I don't work.'

× I don't work anywhere.

✓ I don't work anywhere at the moment.

The original is grammatically possible but abrupt; adding 'at the moment' clarifies time and fits context of being a current student.

× I'm trying to to pass the my university exam.

✓ I'm trying to pass my university exams.

Duplicate 'to' should be one 'to.' 'the my' uses both definite article and possessive pronoun; use only 'my.' 'Exam' likely plural when referring to a set of university exams, so 'exams.'

× And I I wish, I wish I would work in the future.

✓ I wish I could work in the future.

Using 'would' after 'wish' to express a desire about future ability is unnatural; use 'could' or 'will' depending on meaning. 'I wish I could work in the future' expresses desire and possibility.

× Actually, I would like to tell that it's the best way for me to work because I'm really interested in biology and the molecular science is really incredible, incredible and make my life more fulfilling.

✓ Actually, I would like to say that it is the best field for me because I'm really interested in biology, and molecular science is incredible and makes my life more fulfilling.

'Tell that' is unnatural; use 'say that.' 'The best way for me to work' should be 'the best field for me' to match meaning. 'Molecular science' does not need 'the.' Verb agreement: 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'molecular science.' Removed repeated 'incredible.'

× So I will try to do my best and I think yes.

✓ So I will try to do my best, and I think so.

'I think yes' is non-idiomatic; use 'I think so.' The rest is fine; ensure natural linking with comma.

× I believe that yes, because, uh, due to the scientific biology laboratory have a local movement that I need in my, in my profession.

✓ I believe so, because the biological laboratory provides local experience that I need in my profession.

'Due to the scientific biology laboratory have a local movement' is ungrammatical. 'Due to' followed by noun phrase is inappropriate here; better to say 'because the biological laboratory provides...' 'Scientific biology' is redundant; use 'biological laboratory.' 'Local movement' is unclear; 'local experience' or 'opportunities' fits context. Fixed subject-verb agreement and removed repetition 'in my.'

× So this makes the place more good and, uh, enjoyable.

✓ So this makes the place better and enjoyable.

'More good' is unidiomatic; use comparative 'better.' 'Enjoyable' is fine; placing both adjectives together yields a natural phrase.

× MMM my my plan for future.

✓ Hmm, my plan for the future.

Repeated words and missing article 'the.' 'For future' needs article: 'for the future.' Also 'MMM' replaced by 'Hmm' for natural filler.

× Actually I have never thought about it because now I'm striving for university plays and but I think I will work hard to achieve all my dreams and help my mom in financially or also go abroad and and achieve all my goals.

✓ Actually, I have never really thought about it because right now I'm focused on university exams, but I think I will work hard to achieve my dreams, help my mom financially, and perhaps go abroad to reach my goals.

'Have never thought' is possible but adding 'really' improves meaning. 'Striving for university plays' is incorrect: likely 'studying for university exams' or 'focused on university studies.' Removed redundant 'and' and fixed 'help my mom in financially' to 'help my mom financially.' Repeated 'and' removed and sentence restructured for clarity and appropriate tense usage.