Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is clear and relevant with a good topic sentence and useful detail about your qualification and current job. To improve, make the phrasing more natural and concise: avoid mixing tenses and remove redundancy (e.g. "right now" + "recently completed"). Also limit to no more than five sentences and use a linking phrase to connect degree and current job.

Example: I work in an aged care facility. I recently completed a Master’s in Social Work, which prepared me for this role, and I now apply what I learned every day with elderly clients.

Suggestion: Good location and employer named, plus length of service. Improve by using smoother phrasing and correct prepositions («at Holland Pryor» not «over there») and combine details into one coherent sentence using a linking word.

Example: I work at Holland Pryor, an aged care facility in Mosman, and I have been there for more than four years.

Suggestion: Your enthusiasm is clear, but accuracy and fluency need work. Fix grammar (plural/singular, word order), avoid repetition, and be more specific about why it's rewarding. Use linking words (because, so) and give one or two concrete examples of what you learned.

Example: Yes, it’s a very rewarding place because my colleagues and managers are extremely supportive. For example, they taught me practical care techniques and how to communicate with residents, so I’ve developed both technical and interpersonal skills.

Suggestion: Answer is relevant but fragmented and full of hesitations. Improve by speaking more fluently, removing fillers, using correct expressions ("on the north side," "no train access"), and combining points with linking words. Be specific about how the quiet location and transport situation affect you.

Example: Yes, I like it. It’s on the north side of Sydney and is very quiet, which I enjoy because it’s peaceful for residents. However, it’s not close to train services, so most staff travel by bus or by car.

Suggestion: Good intention and clear goal. Improve grammar and fluency: use correct prepositions ("interested in"), avoid repetition, and add a brief plan (how/when you will transition or what steps you will take) to make your answer more specific. Keep to fewer than five sentences and use linking words like "because" or "so".

Example: I plan to move into the counseling sector because I’m passionate about therapy and helping people in need. To achieve this, I’m taking additional counseling courses and seeking supervised practice so I can transition into a counseling role within the next two years.

× I'm working right now.

✓ I am working right now.

The student's contraction 'I'm' is acceptable in speaking but for clarity keep full form 'I am' in formal responses; this is a style suggestion rather than a grammatical error. Keep present continuous to indicate current action.

× I have recently completed my Master in Social Work degree and now I'm working in an aged care facility.

✓ I have recently completed my Master's in Social Work and now I am working in an aged-care facility.

Use the possessive form 'Master's' for the degree and hyphenate 'aged-care' as a compound modifier. 'I have recently completed' correctly uses present perfect to show recent completion.

× It's Holland Pryor Company.

✓ It's the Holland Pryor Company.

When naming a company that includes a descriptive noun like 'Company', include the definite article 'the' before the full name in spoken formal English.

× I have been working over there for more than four years.

✓ I have been working there for more than four years.

'Over there' is redundant in this context; 'there' is sufficient. The present perfect continuous 'have been working' correctly indicates duration up to now.

× Yes, it's such a rewarding place to work because the coworker and manager are such a wonderful people I have ever met in my life.

✓ Yes, it's a very rewarding place to work because the coworkers and managers are some of the most wonderful people I have ever met.

Use plural 'coworkers and managers' to match 'people'. Replace 'such a wonderful people' with 'some of the most wonderful people' for grammatical agreement and natural phrasing.

× I have get I, I got chance to learn so many things from them.

✓ I have had, I got a chance to learn so many things from them.

The sentence mixes tenses and has incorrect verb forms. Use 'I have had' or 'I got a chance' but not 'have get'. Better: 'I have had the chance to learn many things from them.' This corrects verb form and article usage.

× So it's such a wonderful place to work and I recommend it to anyone.

✓ So it's a wonderful place to work, and I would recommend it to anyone.

Add comma and modal 'would' for a polite recommendation. 'Such a' is acceptable but 'a' is more natural here.

× Yes, I like the place as well.

✓ Yes, I like the place as well.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Keeping it for completeness.

× It's in the north side of Sydney.

✓ It's on the north side of Sydney.

Use the preposition 'on' with 'side' (on the north side). This is the standard collocation.

× It's a very quiet place.

✓ It's a very quiet place.

This sentence is correct; present tense description is appropriate.

× Umm it, it doesn't have access to trains, it's umm, there are just transport like umm boss and your own private vehicle.

✓ It doesn't have access to trains; there is only transport such as buses and private vehicles.

Corrected 'there are just transport' to 'there is only transport' and replaced 'boss' with 'buses'. Use 'such as' for examples. Consolidated repetitive fillers for clarity. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'there is only transport' or 'there are only buses and private vehicles.'

× I have planned to work in counseling sector in future because that's something I'm very interested about.

✓ I plan to work in the counseling sector in the future because that's something I'm very interested in.

Use 'plan' or 'have planned' with correct prepositions. Add the article 'the' before 'counseling sector' and use 'in the future'. Use 'interested in', not 'interested about.'

× I'm extremely passionate about learning, learning about therapy and helping people in need.

✓ I'm extremely passionate about learning, especially about therapy and helping people in need.

Add 'especially' to connect clauses smoothly and avoid repetition of 'learning.' The structure becomes clearer and more natural.

× I I'm.

✓ I am.

The utterance 'I I'm.' is an unfinished repetition. Replace with the complete sentence 'I am.' or finish the thought (e.g., 'I am.' or 'I am planning to...'). This corrects redundancy and provides a complete clause.