Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g., “I am currently a student.”), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., “At the same time…”). Correct basic grammar (articles, verb forms) and avoid filler sounds like “uh.”

Example: I am currently a student studying health sciences for a program abroad. At the same time, I work part-time in my small family hotel in my hometown, where I help with customer service for a few hours each day.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and then add two specific details with linking words. Fix grammar (use articles, correct verb forms) and replace vague phrases like “different kinds of things” with concrete activities (e.g., “managing bookings, preparing breakfasts”). Keep answer under five sentences.

Example: I work in my own small hotel in my hometown. I usually manage bookings and greet customers, and I also prepare simple breakfasts for guests. I enjoy these tasks because they let me meet many people and improve my hospitality skills.

Suggestion: Answer directly with an opinion sentence, then give two clear reasons using linking words (e.g., “because,” “also”). Correct word choice (“better” → “a great place”; “people’s individuals” → “the people”). Avoid repetition and fillers.

Example: Yes, it is a great place to work because the environment is very clean and well-maintained. Also, the people here are friendly and helpful, which makes working there enjoyable.

Suggestion: Start with a direct response and then give specific supporting details (how long, what you enjoy, future plans). Use correct grammar for duration (“for nine years”) and avoid fillers. Limit to three sentences max.

Example: Definitely — I love working there. I have been running the hotel for nine years, and I enjoy interacting with guests and improving services. In the future, I hope to expand the business into a larger hotel.

Suggestion: Give a clear, structured answer: one sentence stating your main plan, then one sentence explaining why with specific details. Fix grammar and vocabulary (e.g., “I currently own a small hotel” ; “I want to train as a barista” ; “flat white,” not “fat white”). Avoid vague endings like “forward.”

Example: At the moment I own a small hotel, but in the future I would like to train as a barista. I enjoy making latte art for drinks such as cappuccinos and flat whites, and I hope to work in a specialty café to develop these skills.

× Uh, currently I'm student, uh, I'm studying my health class for my abroad country.

✓ Currently I'm a student; I'm studying health at a university abroad.

Missing article 'a' before 'student' and awkward phrase 'my health class for my abroad country'. Corrected to 'studying health at a university abroad' to convey intended meaning and improve sentence structure.

× At the same time I'm also doing work at my home.

✓ At the same time I'm also doing work at home.

Redundant possessive 'my' before 'home' is unnatural; use 'at home'. This fixes pronoun usage and reads more naturally.

× Uh, I have small hotel in my hometown and I do works for like some hours and I get busy with my, uh, reading Alice.

✓ I have a small hotel in my hometown and I work for a few hours; I also spend time reading.

Missing article 'a' before 'small hotel' and plural 'works' is incorrect—use 'work'. 'Like some hours' is informal and ungrammatical; use 'a few hours'. 'Reading Alice' likely intended 'reading' generally; clarified to 'spend time reading'.

× So I work in my own hotel.

✓ I work at my own hotel.

Preposition 'in' can be used, but 'at my own hotel' is more natural for place of employment. This improves prepositional usage and fluency.

× Uh, it's very small hotel located in my hometown and I work there, uh, at my whole day and I love to do works in my hotel and I prefer making different kinds of, uh, things and sort to the customers.

✓ It's a very small hotel located in my hometown and I work there all day. I enjoy working at my hotel and I prefer preparing different kinds of things and serving customers.

Missing article 'a' before 'very small hotel'. 'At my whole day' is ungrammatical; use 'all day'. 'Do works' should be 'working' or 'work'. 'Sort to the customers' is incorrect; changed to 'serving customers' for clarity.

× Uh, from my perspective, uh, it's very, uh, better place.

✓ From my perspective, it's a very good place.

'Very better' is incorrect; use 'much better' (comparative) or 'very good' (positive). Here 'a very good place' fits meaning.

× Uh, because the environment is very clean.

✓ Because the environment is very clean.

Sentence is correct except keep as is; no grammatical change needed. Included for completeness.

× At the same time, uh, the people's individuals here are very friendly and helping ever I've seen.

✓ Also, the people here are very friendly and helpful; they are the friendliest I've seen.

'People's individuals' is incorrect—use 'people'. 'Helping ever I've seen' is ungrammatical; changed to 'helpful' and rephrased to 'the friendliest I've seen' for intended meaning.

× So for all peoples too, I think it's very better place.

✓ So for everyone, I think it's a very good place.

'Peoples' is incorrect here; use 'everyone' or 'all people'. 'Very better' is incorrect; use 'very good' or 'much better'. Added article 'a'.

× Definitely, I love the place.

✓ Definitely, I love the place.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change necessary. Included to maintain alignment with original intent.

× I love the peoples of individuals of here and I have been doing this work like since nine years and I'm still doing my best and in the future I would love to uh grow my hotel in like uh, big, big, uh hotels.

✓ I love the people here, and I have been doing this work for nine years. I'm still doing my best, and in the future I would like to expand my hotel into a much larger establishment or several hotels.

'Peoples of individuals of here' is incorrect; use 'people here'. 'Since nine years' should be 'for nine years' to express duration. 'Would love to grow my hotel in like big, big hotels' is informal and unclear; rephrased to 'expand my hotel into a much larger establishment or several hotels' for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× So currently I'm hotel like owner and safe at the time in the future but I prefer as a barista safe because I love to make a different kinds of latte arts like cappuccino and fat white.

✓ Currently I'm the owner of the hotel, and in the future I might work as a barista because I love making different kinds of latte art like cappuccino and flat white.

Missing articles and incorrect noun forms: 'I'm hotel like owner' should be 'I'm the owner of the hotel'. 'Safe at the time' is unclear and removed. 'Prefer as a barista' incorrect modal/structure; use 'might work as a barista' or 'would prefer to be a barista'. 'A different kinds' should be 'different kinds of'. 'Latte arts' should be 'latte art'. 'Fat white' is likely 'flat white'.

× So in the future I would love to forward.

✓ In the future I would like to move forward with these plans.

'Love to forward' is incorrect usage; use 'move forward' or 'advance'. Clarified to 'move forward with these plans' to express intended future action.