Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct minor word choices. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific duty. Avoid unclear phrases like “dropout station.” Use linking word if adding a second detail.

Example: I currently work as a pharmacy assistant at a Walmart pharmacy in Canada. I primarily handle prescription processing, and I also do data entry for patient records.

Suggestion: Good direct answer and a specific detail. Improve naturalness by combining into one sentence and using a linking word to connect distance to convenience.

Example: I work at the Sage Hill pharmacy in Canada, which is conveniently only a 10-minute drive from my home.

Suggestion: Reduce repetition and correct grammar. Give one or two specific reasons using linking words for coherence. Use plural/singular forms correctly and avoid informal words like “cool” in formal test.

Example: Yes, it is a good place to work because I work with many experienced pharmacists who mentor me, and I can help patients get the medications they need, which is very rewarding.

Suggestion: Combine ideas into a clear topic sentence and use linking words. Correct phrasing (e.g., “one of the main advantages” and “I encounter”). Limit to two sentences maximum.

Example: I like my workplace for several reasons: one of the main advantages is that it is only a ten-minute drive from my home, and I also meet many friendly colleagues and patients every day.

Suggestion: Clarify your goal and sequence of steps. Use correct tense and concise structure: state the goal, then the current action you are taking, with linking words like “so” or “by.” Avoid redundant phrasing.

Example: My plan is to qualify as a pharmacy technician and obtain a professional license. To achieve this, I am preparing for the required English test so I can enroll in a pharmacy technician course.

× Currently I work as a pharmacy assistant in Walmart Seashell in Canada.

✓ Currently I work as a pharmacy assistant at Walmart Seashell in Canada.

Use of present simple is correct for current job, but the preposition should be 'at' for workplaces (preposition error). Replace 'in' with 'at' to sound natural.

× I handle prescriptions and data entry at the dropout station.

✓ I handle prescriptions and do data entry at the drop-off station.

The phrase 'dropout station' is incorrect; likely intended 'drop-off station'. Also 'data entry' is an action, so use 'do data entry' for clarity. This fixes vocabulary and verb usage.

× I work in Sage Hill pharmacy in Canada.

✓ I work at Sage Hill Pharmacy in Canada.

Use 'at' for a specific workplace and capitalize 'Pharmacy' as part of the proper name. This corrects the preposition and proper noun formatting.

× It's 10 minutes away from our home.

✓ It's 10 minutes away from our home.

Sentence is grammatically correct; present simple appropriately describes a general fact. No change needed.

× Working as a pharmacy assistant in Sage Hill Walmart, I I can say that it's a good place to work because I got to work with a lot of professional pharmacists and also cool pharmacist assistant.

✓ Working as a pharmacy assistant at Sage Hill Walmart, I can say that it's a good place to work because I get to work with many professional pharmacists and friendly pharmacy assistants.

Multiple issues: duplicated 'I I', past tense 'got' should be present 'get' for habitual action, 'a lot of' is informal—use 'many' for countable plural 'pharmacists', and 'pharmacist assistant' should be 'pharmacy assistants' (plural and correct noun). Also 'cool' is informal; 'friendly' is more appropriate.

× Aside from that is I got to help the patients bringing the quality of life and medicines that they needed.

✓ Aside from that, I get to help patients by improving their quality of life and providing the medicines they need.

Problems include awkward 'is I got', incorrect tense 'got' (past) should be present 'get' for habitual action, unnecessary article 'the patients'—use 'patients' generally, and awkward structure 'bringing the quality of life' should be 'improving their quality of life' and 'medicines that they needed' should be present 'medicines they need'.

× I like the place where I work because one of the most advantage of it is it's only 10 minutes drive away from our home.

✓ I like the place where I work because one of its main advantages is that it's only a 10-minute drive from our home.

Errors: 'one of the most advantage' is incorrect—use 'one of its main advantages'; need 'that' to introduce clause; '10 minutes drive' should be 'a 10-minute drive' (compound adjective) and preposition 'from' is more natural than 'away from'.

× And also there's a lot of great people, great patients that I encounter in my everyday working.

✓ Also, there are a lot of great people and patients that I encounter in my everyday work.

Use 'there are' not 'there's' with plural 'people'; 'everyday working' is awkward—use 'everyday work'. Remove redundant 'great'. Use conjunction 'and' to join nouns.

× My future work plans is to be being a pharmacy assistant pharmacy technician someday and get a license.

✓ My future work plan is to become a pharmacy technician someday and get licensed.

Multiple issues: subject-verb agreement ('plans is' should be 'plan is' or 'plans are'), incorrect phrase 'to be being' — use 'to become', and 'pharmacy assistant pharmacy technician' is unclear; likely 'pharmacy technician'. Use 'get licensed' or 'obtain a license' for natural phrasing.

× Right now I'm currently working on it on my English test for me to admit to a school whereby they enroll a pharmacy technician course.

✓ Right now I'm preparing for an English test so I can be admitted to a school that offers a pharmacy technician course.

Awkward and incorrect phrasing: 'working on it on my English test' should be 'preparing for an English test'; 'for me to admit to a school' is wrong—use 'so I can be admitted to a school'; 'whereby they enroll a pharmacy technician course' is unnatural—use 'that offers a pharmacy technician course'. This makes the sentence clear and grammatically correct.